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Day 09 Challenges

3. I'm going to create an account on upwork?/odesk? right after I post this.

4. Headlines:

Fast-Food / Burger Joint

- The Perfect Combo: Fast, Fresh And Delicious
- You're Missing Out If you Never Tried These Burgers!

Travel Backpack
- The Best Travel Companion You'll Ever Meet
- Travelling Made Easy

Pastry Cooking Book
- You'll Here Praise At Home All Day Long
- Here's How To Raise The Mood At Home


5.

Product : Women Leather Boots

Do you love leather boots?
We love them too!

We also know you are sad when they get old and scratched.
This is why we created a great (and free!) guide to help you take care of them.
This way, they will always look new! Even years after you bought them.

I Want That Guide! (link)

What about a new pair ?
Well, we have a secret for you.
We finished next year's collection.
And we decided to let you see it and order your favorite pair before everyone else.

That's 4 months before release.
Just think about your friends' faces when you tell them they can't get one until then!
Be warned however. This offer only last until next Friday.

Get Your Favorite Pair Before Everyone Else (link)
 
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Day 5 | Technique Lesson 2
F.U.C.C.C.
Fundamental Understanding of Core Concepts in Copywriting
or
K.I.S.S.
Keep It Stupidly Simple


Effective Copy Operates from Solid Foundations.

It doesn't have to be complicated, and you don't have to study for years. You can learn enough in a few minutes to improve anything you write. The more you practice the better you'll be, but you don't have to be J.K. to sell.

This isn't a comprehensive guide, and I can't teach everything in a post, but the stuff you're about to learn will help your copy flow more easily for you and your customers.

Before we start you should know that anything you write should be tailored to your specific audience, and also for the medium where it'll be read. For instance the format of a sales letter won't work very well for most website home pages, so you'll need to modify your style if you want it to look good.

Keep in mind none of these rules are absolutes.


Technique 1: Open with a Question

Why are questions so useful?

Because they draw us in and almost force us to find answers. We MUST know, so we drop a line &
keep reading to finally get closure. Make sure you don't answer the question in the same line or it loses its effect.

For Example:

"Do you ever have trouble hearing what other people say?
If so, then..."


By the way did you notice I did it to you at the beginning of this technique? ;)


Technique 2: Ask More questions

What happens if you ask another question instead of just giving the answer?

It has the same effect and keeps em' reading for more!

For Example:

"Do you ever have trouble hearing what other people say?
Do people sometimes tell you you're freakin' deaf?
If so, then..."


The longer they read, the more chances you have to influence. Be sure not to ask too many questions without offering a solution or you'll piss em' off.


Technique 3: Use Short Sentences

Short sentences move fast. The shorter the better. Eleven words or less is good. More than that and you slow things down. If you want to impact emotion, use short sentences. It speeds up their mind and makes em' want action.

That doesn't mean longer sentences can never be useful, and you'll find there are times when you really want your readers to slow down and grasp what you say. Use long sentences whenever you want to emphasize something, or when you want your prospects to consider a thought or idea more deeply. Use short sentences when you wanna speed em' up again.


Technique 4: Short Paragraphs

This technique is just like the one before it. Keep paragraphs short if you want to keep things moving effortlessly. Long paragraphs take longer to read, and they end up looking like a wall of text. People don't like walls of text.

Instead writer short paragraphs that are 3 lines or less. Sometimes this means increasing font size to fill up more space, or sometimes you have to decrease it or cut out words if you want it to fit.


Technique 5: Less syllables = Easier to Read

Are you aware of the astronomical quantity of citizens who are absolutely, cataclysmically, abominably mediocre when it comes to aptitude for comprehending the transcribed word?

It's pretty crazy, but seriously...

A lot of people suck at reading.

When we use less syllables our words are easier to understand.

My personal experience is that less syllables is usually better, though I've had a few clients who needed more intelligible writing for certain elite audiences. For most product copy, use less syllables and you can't go wrong.


Technique 6: Make Sub-headings Larger than Body Text

Large sub-headings are for people who like to skim instead of reading everything. When writing sub-headings make sure every word counts because it may be all your prospect sees. I can think of a thousand times when I only read the sub-headings and nothing more. But, if the sub-heading doesn't stand out by being larger, then it may not be seen at all.


Technique 7: Choose Where Each Line Ends

Most of us are used to writing sentences that continue the entire length of the page until they finally
return on their own. In copy it's a little different. In copy we still write across the length of the page but
we choose when to hit return so
we can carry our readers to the
next line.

See what I did there? The last examples were just for effect. The first two lines are how it
normally works. Oops, did it again. ;)

"finally..." - Reader asks, "finally what?"
"but..." - Reader asks, "but what?" and they read the next line for the answer.


Technique 8: Read that Shit Out Loud!

OMG... If you're not reading your copy out loud before going live, then it's no wonder you're not
getting the responses you want! When we read our copy out loud we can find subtle differences in the
wording that changes everything.

Sometimes when I write it comes out really wordy, but I don't know it until I read it out loud. Sometimes
I even have to read it about 10 times before it sounds good. When it sounds good out loud it usually
sounds good in our mind.

Any words that seem like they maybe don't necessarily need to be in the sentence, probably don't.


Technique 9: Speak to the Senses

We'll talk more about this one later, but I want to bring it up for those who are writing copy now. All humans think in terms of their senses all the time. That means sight, sound, smell, taste & touch.

If you want to connect with people, and you want them to experience what you have to say, then you have to write words that give them those experiences.

This is especially true for those of you pecking away at your keyboards, watching words fill up the screen while waiting for your Starbucks to cool after nearly spilling it across the floor because the over-enthusiastic Barista was too busy smiling at customers and forgot to add the cardboard cover to your scalding hot brew.

This is sensory-based language. This is also how you show the reader what you want them to see instead of telling them about it.


Technique 10: Use Action Language

This technique is last but it may be the most powerful of all.

Anytime you write copy you should be using the active voice...

Let's rephrase that.

Anytime you write copy use the active voice.

Feel the difference?

For starters, the active voice cuts out most extra words before you ever read out loud. Plus it allows you to direct the reader instead of letting them make their own choices.

"You should." is very different than, "You will."

"I think you should go over there." is very different than, "Go over there."

"I'll think about it." is very different than, "I'll do it."

Action driven language communicates with clarity.

There's a time and a place for passive language, but most of the time write for action.

If you're selling a product or service, then drive action from the start so your reader gets used to being directed, and by the time they reach the end of your copy they're ready to follow your lead...

Order Now.
Reply.
Join.


This list isn't even close to complete. There's tons of techniques that aren't mentioned, and probably a zillion that I don't even know about. Still, these should be enough to give you a working foundation so you can get started and get feedback. Once you have feedback you can adjust as needed.


Day 5 Challenge


1. Solve a problem for someone.
No matter how big or small, and don't ask anything in return.

2. Write 5 headlines for a real product that MAKES THEM STOP!

3. Write 5 influential sentences using the lessons from day 3.

4. Take 1 action you are most afraid of. Just do it.


5. Type a page of copy selling a real product, using a good headline, subheadlines, & the techniques listed in this lesson.


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Okay, Day 5 is done and you're still here!
Great! If you're actually following the
steps, then you're probably making
real progress! When you're
ready, continue to Day 6
Influence Lesson
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Day 08 Challenges

4. Write 5 Creative Headlines

Headlines:

Antivirus

- You're More Vulnerable Than You Think.
- Here Is Why You're In The Danger Zone.

Sparkling Water
- The Simple Trick To Improve Any Meal

5 Star Hotel (Dream Location)
- Why Dream About It When You Can Live It RIGHT NOW?
- Make Your Dream A Reality

Product Packaging Service
- We Make You AND Your Customers HAPPY!


5. Write a website "About Us" page using everything you've learned to this point, and make sure you do it in logical order.

Website: (fictional) Acme Antivirus and Security Solutions

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ABOUT US

Protecting You And Your Data


We believe that everyone has the right to be safe on the internet.
Even if they do not know anything about technology.

The Internet and computers are now everywhere in our lives.

And it's a great place.

However, some people will try to scam you, steal from you, harm you.

We want to be the bulwark between you and any danger.
We want to keep you safe at all time, so you can enjoy the power of the Internet.

Without fear.
Without any doubts about your security.


We have to be the experts, you don't.

Everything we design follows a simple rule:

Extreme Ease of Use

Our products are powerful, complexes and incorporate very advanced features.
However, our interfaces are straightforward and instinctives.

This means that all our customers can enjoy the greatest level of protection without hassle.

This also means that we put a great emphasis on our customer services.

You also have access to an array of free tutorials. This way you can grasp the full potential of every product you release.

Should you still have any problem, our customer service is available every days. Yes, even during week-ends.


The Ultimate Safety Softwares

To make sure you are safe at all time we designed 3 great products:

Acme Bulwark, Our Antivirus.

Acme Safety Net, A Powerful Internet Browser Plugin

Acme Bunker, Designed To Protect You From Every Treats.


Learn More About Our Products

Day 09 Challenges

3. I'm going to create an account on upwork?/odesk? right after I post this.

4. Headlines:

Fast-Food / Burger Joint

- The Perfect Combo: Fast, Fresh And Delicious
- You're Missing Out If you Never Tried These Burgers!

Travel Backpack
- The Best Travel Companion You'll Ever Meet
- Travelling Made Easy

Pastry Cooking Book
- You'll Here Praise At Home All Day Long
- Here's How To Raise The Mood At Home


5.

Product : Women Leather Boots

Do you love leather boots?
We love them too!

We also know you are sad when they get old and scratched.
This is why we created a great (and free!) guide to help you take care of them.
This way, they will always look new! Even years after you bought them.

I Want That Guide! (link)

What about a new pair ?
Well, we have a secret for you.
We finished next year's collection.
And we decided to let you see it and order your favorite pair before everyone else.

That's 4 months before release.
Just think about your friends' faces when you tell them they can't get one until then!
Be warned however. This offer only last until next Friday.

Get Your Favorite Pair Before Everyone Else (link)

Seeing as Lex is busy, I'll try to help.
I'm no copywriter but I'm almost Human.

Can you lose some words without losing meaning?
Get rid of words that don't convey meaning or add to the message.
Make the phrases shorter, more powerful, no redundant words.

Want a new pair ?
Here's a secret for you.
Next year's collection is ready!
Order your favorite pair now.
Before anyone else.
You're 4 months fashion-forward!
Imagine your friends' faces
When you say​
"You'll have to wait 4 months"​
Oh the envy!​
Be quick!
This offer ends Friday.
 

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Seeing as Lex is busy, I'll try to help.
I'm no copywriter but I'm almost Human.

Can you lose some words without losing meaning?
Get rid of words that don't convey meaning or add to the message.
Make the phrases shorter, more powerful, no redundant words.

Want a new pair ?
Here's a secret for you.
Next year's collection is ready!
Order your favorite pair now.
Before anyone else.
You're 4 months fashion-forward!
Imagine your friends' faces
When you say​
"You'll have to wait 4 months"​
Oh the envy!​
Be quick!
This offer ends Friday.

Thank you so much. Your version is miles better!
I’m going to review this tomorow.

I will also submit my Upwork profile and try to get my first gig soon enough.
 

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Thank you so much. Your version is miles better!
I’m going to review this tomorow.

I will also submit my Upwork profile and try to get my first gig soon enough.
Thanks
Although it's always easier to improve someone's work than to create original copy.

Just take your time, review your work, look for redundant words or phrases & where one word can replace several
Just think about your

To be a good writer you have to be a good reader.

I read the classics, Shakespeare & all that crap, but that won't help you write copy, so read good copy.

Analyse it, why is it good? What words & phrases stand out.

Vocabulary is important, improve yours, add to your arsenal, use a dictionary when you don't understand the meaning then use that word in phrases & sentences.

Use that word till you own it, make it part of your everyday vocab.

You can't learn copy in a vacuum, you need external references.

Artists copy the masters to perfect their technique, then they paint their own works.

Hope that helps you.
 
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Day 10 Challenges

4.

Product: Premium Winter Cycling Gear
Who:
25-35 years old; Males; semi-pro to pro cyclist; several sorties per week, all year long; Races several time a year.
What: Warm gear. Improve aerodynamics. Include all necessary utility pockets. Anti-sweat properties. Water-repellent technology.
Why: To make it easy to have optimum cycling performance, even during a cold and humid day. To Increase chance to win race and improve speed during sorties.

Headlines:
- Perfect Gear For Perfect Performances
- The Winter Gear Of The Pro Cyclists
- If The Tour De France Was In Winter, They'd Wear THIS!
- Yellow Jerseys' Secret Winter Gear
- Forget The Weather, Get Peak Performance


5.
Product: Premium Winter Cycling Jersey


So Good You'll Forget It


This jersey is for the Pros.

It keeps you warm all day long.
From a freezing cold of -15°C to a chilly 15°C.
You won't get hot either. Thank to the sweat-wicking and
highly breathable fabric.

Water? Wind? Don't worry.
You'll be sheltered in any condition.


You also get the basics of every great jersey:
- Four utility pockets, NOTHING will fall.
- Tight fit for maximum aerodynamics.
- Antimicrobial Fabric.


We have so much faith in our gear that we include exceptional guarantees:
You can try it for 30 days.

If anything is wrong, you get
a full refund.

No questions asked.
Even if you wore it intensively.

Yes, it's just that good.

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Next post I'm going to review my "About Us" page and improve it @Odysseus M Jones.
 

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Day 08 Revision

ABOUT US

Protecting You And Your Data


Everyone should be safe on the internet.
Even if they do not know anything about technology.

Especially now that it's everywhere.

And that's great.

However, some people use it to scam, steal or harm you.

We can't arrest them. But
We can be the bulwark between you and them.

We want you to be safe, so you can enjoy the power of the Internet.
Without fear.

Discover our story (link)

We have to be the experts, you don't.

Everything we design follows this rule:

Simplicity

Our products are powerful.
They incorporate advanced features but
our interfaces are straightforward.

All our customers enjoy the greatest level of protection effortlessly.

If you struggle,
You have access to an array of free tutorials.
This way you can grasp the full potential of all our products.

If this isn't enough, our customer service is available every days.
Even during week-ends.


The Ultimate Safety Softwares

We designed 3 great products:

Acme Bulwark, Our Antivirus.

Acme Safety Net, A Powerful Internet Browser Plugin.

Acme Bunker, Designed To Protect You From Every Treats.


Discover Our Products


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Thanks again Odysseus, hope you like it more now!
 
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Day 11 Challenges

1. Write a 2 to 3 paragraph short story about a product that explains how it came into existence. How was it born from a need. How did it manifest from a problem.

Product: Small Size Smartphone

You're gross!

That's my coworker yelling at me after I talked to her. I felt the burn of a dozen stares in my back. Yet, I didn't do or say anything wrong.

I quickly walked to my office to hide. The air suddenly felt chill as I avoided my coworkers' eyes.
But my face was burning. I this point I probably glowed in the dark.

The fact is,
She mistook the giant smartphone in my pocket for -- you-know-what.


Don't you hate it that smartphones get bigger every year?
I do to. And not only because I got humiliated at work.

It doesn't fit in my jeans.
It falls from my pockets.
Its so heavy it damages my jackets.

In fact,
It doesn't fit anywhere anymore. What a burden.

Will smartphones come with carry-on bags in 5 years?

Let's be honest here.
Who really needs a giant screen to make calls? Or Listen to music and podcasts?
Truth is, smartphones barely get out of our pockets for these tasks.
Just use earbuds!

Maybe your watching videos or reading while commuting in public transportation. But
you'd be better off bringing a tablet.


That's why I decided to design a small, practical smartphone.
Anything others do, he does too. It's easy to carry, and won't make you look like
you're the workplace's pervert.


Click here to discover his little secrets (link)



2. Write 3 mind blowing headlines that would make someone want to read your story.

My Smartphone Made Me A Pervert
Why Small Is Not Always Worse
You'll Want A Small One After Reading This
 

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Day 12 Challenges

1. Write 5 headlines
that target both pain & pleasure.

STOP Getting Rejected! Here's A Confidence Booster
One Month To Win Your Crush

How To Eat Healthy & Delicious

5 Simple Tips To Look Better Right Now

Improve Your Finances In One Week

2. Write 2 paragraphs of copy
that utilize storytelling & metaphors to speak to both audiences (pain & pleasure).

I'm sorry.

I tried to write for hours but always ended up scrapping everything. My teeth were grinding as
I fought an internal battle. My will acted as a shield. But
the attack was overwhelming. Tired, I gave up.

That's something I could have said before finding this book. I wasn't fighting alone anymore.
Since reading it and using it, I never suffered writing anything. Not only that.
In a single month, I doubled my work quality AND quantity!

I want to know more (link)

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I'm not very inspired today :(
 

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How To Eat Healthy & Delicious

5 Simple Tips To Look Better Right Now

Improve Your Finances In One Week

Boost Your Confidence & Never Get Rejected Again! - Now it's two commands in one.

Steal Your Crush's Heart Even If She Has a Boyfriend - The pleasure comes from the idea of a shortcut to winning, rather than the idea of winning through competition. The pain is that she has a boyfriend.

Finally! Healthy Food That Doesn't Taste Like Crap! - It's longer, but it's more engaging and talks in the audience's voice.

5 Tips to Look Better Even If You Look Like Miley Cyrus Now - Longer, but gives the reader a visual. Of course this only works if they think Miley Cyrus is ugly. :D

Fix Money Problems Fast Without Going Bankrupt - Who improves their finances? People have money problems and they need them fixed. They've probably considered filing bankruptcy as a quick fix. The pain is "money problems" the pleasure is "a fast fix without going bankrupt."

Your paragraphs are pretty good. I hope you've started applying to gigs already. You're good enough to get paid for copywriting.
 
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Boost Your Confidence & Never Get Rejected Again! - Now it's two commands in one.

Steal Your Crush's Heart Even If She Has a Boyfriend - The pleasure comes from the idea of a shortcut to winning, rather than the idea of winning through competition. The pain is that she has a boyfriend.

Finally! Healthy Food That Doesn't Taste Like Crap! - It's longer, but it's more engaging and talks in the audience's voice.

5 Tips to Look Better Even If You Look Like Miley Cyrus Now - Longer, but gives the reader a visual. Of course this only works if they think Miley Cyrus is ugly. :D

Fix Money Problems Fast Without Going Bankrupt - Who improves their finances? People have money problems and they need them fixed. They've probably considered filing bankruptcy as a quick fix. The pain is "money problems" the pleasure is "a fast fix without going bankrupt."

Your paragraphs are pretty good. I hope you've started applying to gigs already. You're good enough to get paid for copywriting.

Thanks for the kind words (and confidence boost) Lex !

I will ASAP! I am currently working on a small portfolio to increase my credibility. But I guess there is no harm in applying before it’s done anyway !
 

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Day 13 Challenge

5. Write a commercial script. Again, something to get you moving in a new direction. Most commercial scripts are 1 minute or less. That's about 100 words. Try coming up with a unique script that utilizes some of the techniques you've learned for copywriting. Once you write the script, then be sure to add it to your portfolio so clients know they can use you for other services than just sales letters. If you want to grow, then you have to offer something your competition doesn't.

Product: Acme's Pro Cycling Jersey

No Music.
Only the sound of thunder and rain.


Opens with a shot of the sky.
It's dark. Rain is pouring.
The atmosphere is cold.

Camera slides to the ground.

Its a country road in a valley. There is a cyclist struggling.

We get closer to him.

Cyclist: *To himself* Why did I go? I'm freezing. I'm already regretting this.
I must be the only fool cycling in this weather.

Large shot.
We see a second cyclist coming fast behind him.

The second cyclist come to his side.
Close shot of both cyclist, side by side.

Acme's cyclist: *Looks fresh and happy* Is everything alright ?
Cyclist: I'm miserable. I though I was the only fool riding in this weather.
Acme's cyclist: What do you mean?
Cyclist: Well it's cold and raining. How can you do anything in such weather?
Acme's cyclist: *looks surprised but still happy* Oh yes! your right I didn't pay attention.

Close shot of the cyclist.

He is puzzled. He looks lost for a second.
He then look back at the other cyclist.
He isn't here anymore.

He is 50 meters in front of him. A gap is forming fast.

Quick, front facing shot of the cyclist.
He looks crushed.

Fade to white.
A message appear. (line by line, fading in)

Acme's Pro Winter Gear
Forget The Weather.
Focus On Performance.
 

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I didn't have much time today. So I spent it making a proposal on upwork and
improving my profile.
If I find time tonight I'll do the day 14 challenges.
If not I'll do it tomorrow.

Cheers!
 
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I just spent this day crafting another proposal with a free sample on UPWORK.
As Lex said, you have to take action. You have to test your strengh on the battlefied.

I’ll try to make time for day 14 tomorow.

Good Night

:zzz:
 

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It seems my first 2 proposals (ever) weren't very successful.
No answer and both jobs got closed.

Since reading Extreme Ownership I do take full responsibilities for all my actions and failures.
So I guess my propositions weren't good enough.

I'm currently looking into my proposals to see what could be improved.

However, I'm certainly not defeated. I made 2 more proposals today.
I think both are better than my first 2.

I might want to start an execution thread.

Again I'm not sure I'll have the time to do the challenge (again!).

Sorry!
 

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Consider this post a bonus lesson. The 3 elements of basic, powerful copy are within.

Read it again carefully and see if you can find them.
Anyone of you have found answer to this??
Consider this post a bonus lesson. The 3 elements of basic, powerful copy are within.

Read it again carefully and see if you can find them.
These three elements can be found in every copy. For this one, they are as follows...
Now clear your mind, and let's get started.
1) Start with a clean slate - mindset lesson
…the ONLY thing that matters is results.
2) Focus on results only.
Only results are rewarded not the trials. - Shiv Khera
Here's a secret.
3) Influence lesson. Use secrets to keep them engaged
 
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Day 1 Challange:
I helped my neighbor kid to learn English.
And taught him the story of a fox and a crane.
In which the crane taught the fox the lesson: Tit for tat.

The smile on his face after learning the story was contagious.
 

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Day 2

1) Product: Copywriting course

who: age group 20 - 30
what: start a business, without capital, freedom from a 9 to 5 job.
why: free time, more money, delete the boss from life.

Headline: Why Wait for Years? Start Living Your Dream Life from Next Week.

2) Product: Hair Saloon

who: young generation 21 to 35
what: attract attention, look cool.
why: to date girls, gain respect from friends

Headline: Why Should You Look Like a Cave Man of the 21 Century, Change Your Look in 30 Minutes.

3) Product: Domain and hosting

who: students who are making dummy sites
what: free domain and hosting
why: they don't have more money to spend

Headline: Why Pay for a Domain & Hosting When You Can Get It for Free.

4) Product: Portfolio Website

Who: Photographers
what: show their work history to future clients
why: to get a gig

Headline: SHOWCASE YOUR TALENT. Let Clients Beg for Your Services.

5) SEO Agency ( Maximizer)

who: Blog owners
what: to drive traffic
why: to get more followers and sales

Headline: Triple Your Visitors With Maximizer and Increase the Profits by 10%.



Thank You, Lex Deville!
 

Pavan M.

New Contributor
Dec 3, 2018
21
19
Day # 3 Challange

Write 5 headlines that MAKE THEM STOP!

1) Product: Pest Control
who: college students living in hostels
what: get rid of pests
why: to ensure uninterrupted sleep

Headline: Get Those Blood Suckers Out of Your Home! AND SLEEP PEACEFULLY.

2) Product: Children's Storybook
who: 3-4 years Children's Parents.
what: make their child sleep without slapping them
why: Get the feeling that they choose best for child

Headline: Story works better than slaps.

3) Product: Women Fitness Club
who: women after pregnancy
what: to regain the shape
why: To avoid the feeling of nervousness about being fat

Headline: Have Pregnancy Stolen Your Beauty? Get Your Fitness Back In Months Not Years.

4) Product: Plumbing Services
who: house owners
what: fix the leakages
why: To ensure a constant supply of water

Headline: Make Your Bae Happy By Giving Her What She Wants ( No Its Not Love)

5) Product: Water Filters
who: couples/ families
what: pure water
why: to protect their families from diseases

Headline: Protect Your Family From The Water They Drink Daily.
 
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Pavan M.

New Contributor
Dec 3, 2018
21
19
Day 3 Challange

Sales Letter for Plumbing Services

Headline: Are You tired of Pipe Leakages Often?

Is your family going through daily dangerous
slippery tiles due to leakages?

Bunny had the same problem.
He was tired of trying different solutions.

Now he is happy because he has found us.
If that's what you need.
Call Now!

What we actually do?

We have special glue that binds the pipes such that
when pressed they will break but won't leak.

Our specially trained team knows what to apply and when.
Your worries about plumbing will be gone by just one call.
Just Imagine.
10% discount until Friday.
Call Now!

P.S.
After working with us, you will retreat
why didn't you find us before?
Call Now!
 

Pavan M.

New Contributor
Dec 3, 2018
21
19
Day #4 Challange

5 Headlines For A Real Product

Product: Dating Website

1) Are You Tired of Getting Rejected in the Clubs? Sensual Dating (product name) is For You.
2) Upgrade Your Game Plan to Find Your Romance.
3) Your Soulmate is Waiting For You...
4) Are You Tired of Being Single? You Don't Have to Anymore.
5) Find & Be Found For Lovemaking.



10 Sentences Using Influential Words.


1) To know more Click Here!
2) Never miss the latest information. Subscribe.
3) Enter your email address to get a free ebook.
Submit.
4) Buy 2 Get 1 Free! Offer Ends Friday.
5) Only 2 more clients vacancy is available. My Schedule Fills by Sunday.
6) Summer Sale. Ends By Friday.
7) Own your dream bike without downpayment. Few Slots Left.
8) One call can change Your Life. Just Imagine.
9) Are You on Right Way? Consider Your Options.
10) Give it a try. Maybe it's the right fit for you.




 

Pavan M.

New Contributor
Dec 3, 2018
21
19
Day #5 Challange

Headlines for real product

Product:- Karate Class

1) Defend Yourself from Bullies. Learn 5 Phase System & Walk Anywhere Confidently.

2) Be Your Massiah! Don't Depend on Others for Your Safety.


3) Be a Hero for Your Family.

4) Depend on Your Strength, Not on Others' Compassion.


5) Get Tough. A Month of Karate Training is What You Need.


Influential Sentences

1) It's a no brainer. Buy Now.
2) Beautiful chicks waiting for YOU. Click Here.
3) Best bargain you could find. Valid till Friday.
4) You'll never find it again. Call before Friday.
5) You have nothing to lose. Give it a try.


Page of Copy

Prepare Yourself For the worst.

God helps them who help themselves.
Have you heard this before?
In street fights, it is absolutely true.

The best fight is the one that
you never fought.

But what if some bully forces
you into a fight.
What if someone suddenly grabs
your neck from behind.

If you are like 90% crowd
probably you'll submit.

But if you know Jiu-Jitsu
then the matter will be reversed.

The attacker will have to submit himself.
Because you will force him to do so by
Jiu-Jitsu lessons learned from Academy.

We have lots of our students having
gone through such experience.

Don't wait for that bullet to
grab your neck.

Wear your Gi ( training uniform)
and start practicing.

For Demo Lesson.
Call Now.

For those who are joining for 1 year
we have a 20% discount.

Offer ends on 31st January.

To have a consultation with our experts,
Call Now.

P.S. If you don't stand for yourself who else will?
Do yourself a favor and
Learn Jiu-Jitsu. The #1 self-defense in the world.

Call Now.
 
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Pavan M.

New Contributor
Dec 3, 2018
21
19
Day # 6 Challange

Product: Real Estate Agency

How 2124 Families Successfully Sold Their Properties. Without Constant Search of Buyers.

Are you tired of finding buyers for your apartment house?
Are you always searching for buyers but can't find them?

If that's the case for you then you have landed in the right place.

Last year we helped 2124 families to find Sell their Properties.
It's very nice to look at how their life changed by the money
they achieved from selling their properties.

Last month one family come to us. After listening to their story we
came to know that their property is outside of the town.
So it was the main problem why they can't find buyer for it.

But we have a list of previous clients & one of them bought the property.
Want the same for you?
Call Now.

It's not just about buying or selling properties.
It's about you get profited or not.

We make sure that you make 2x more profit than if you
did it yourself.

So don't wail and hope.
10% discount till the end of month.
Call now.

P.S. Great profits come with fast actions.
Hurry up. Profits are on your way.
Call Now.
 

Pavan M.

New Contributor
Dec 3, 2018
21
19
Day #7 Challange

Product: Bed Sheet Cover Set

Alert! Is Your Bed The Cause of Your Skin Infection. Find Out How?

Do you know that the average human being spends 1/4th of his life in the bed?
And what if you know that your bed is full of dust mites and their feces.


Just imagine that! You are sleeping on mites and their faces. The mites cause
skin infection. Think about your little champ & how these basterds will be
infecting his skin.

But to avoid all of these "Butterfly Bed Cover" is there to help you.
Just cover your bed with these sheets and you don't have to worry
about those mighty mites.

Here's how it works. The "Butterfly Bed Covers" avoid
the direct contact of your asking and the bedclothes.
It acts as an insulator between you and bed.
Stop thinking and order now.

Few left in the stocks...
Plus an additional discount of 50% for the first five calls.
Call Now!
 

MrChud

New Contributor
Read Fastlane!
Oct 31, 2020
23
4
Day 1 Challenge

I helped someone locate something in the grocery store.
I also helped someone fight his negative self-talk that was holding him back from his goals in a Facebook group.
 
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MrChud

New Contributor
Read Fastlane!
Oct 31, 2020
23
4
Day 2 Challenge.
I helped someone by providing honest feedback on a marketing plan for his non-fiction book. (I also write for that genre.) The conversation naturally drifted to it and I willingly gave my feedback without being asked.

10 Headline to make them STOP.

“The Shocking Secret to Life-Changing Testosterone Boosts That Last!”

Who am I? Middle aged men aged 35-65

What do I want? To feel like a man again.

Why do I want it? To experience greater vitality and feel young again

“Stay Hydrated Wherever You Go!”


Who am I? Fitness-minded people who have trouble staying hydrated due to busy schedules

What do I want? To be able to have access to water wherever I go.

Why do I want it? So I can avoid the common symptoms of dehydration.

“Increase Gains and Muscle Endurance Instantly!”

Who am I? Gym-goers ages 20-45

What do I want? To achieve muscle gains and endurance without a lot of hassle.

Why do I want it? To look and feel better, get more results in the gym.

“Mind-Blowing Sexual Experience At a Low Price”

Who am I? Men who want to get more out of their love lives.

What do I want? To spice up their love lives

Why do I want it? To experience something incredible and will increase their quality of life.

“Complete At-Home Workout In Only 20 Minutes!”

Who am I? Busy people who want to get fit on tight schedules.

What do I want? To experience greater physical vitality and lower stress.

Why do I want it? To increase and/or maintain physical fitness on a time-crunch.

“Simple Tricks That Increase Productivity IMMEDIATELY!”

Who am I? Someone who wants to be more productive.

What do I want? Simple tools to achieve more in my day.

Why do I want it? So I can be “in the zone” for longer and feel more accomplished.

“State-Of-The-Art Portable Processing Power You Can Afford!”

Who am I? Someone looking for a laptop that can handle heavy-duty computing tasks.

What do I want? A laptop that can do more at a reasonable price point.

Why do I want it? To be able to run businesses/record podcasts/record professional YouTube videos anywhere in the world.

“Pumpkin Spice Whiskey That Tastes Great!”

Who am I? Anyone over legal drinking age that likes pumpkin spice

What do I want? An enjoyable drink that tastes great.

Why do I want it? To enjoy the taste of pumpkin spice on a laid-back Friday night.

“Revolutionary Home Massage Experience That Destroys Stress!”

Who am I? People who want relaxing massages at home without a masseuse.

What do I want? To have massages at home after longs days at the office.

Why do I want it? To be able to melt away stress.

“Take Your Confidence Levels to New Heights!”

Who am I? Anyone who wants to feel great about themselves

What do I want? To feel unstoppable at life.

Why do I want it? To achieve more from life.
 

MrChud

New Contributor
Read Fastlane!
Oct 31, 2020
23
4
I helped someone with a tax dilemma over Facebook tonight.

STOP headlines
“Take Care of Your Lawn in Half the Time”
“Delicious Homemade Meals Ready in Less Than 5 Minutes”
“Tune Out Distractions Immediately!”
“The Only Pull-Up Bar You Can Take Anywhere!”
“The Proven System for Fluency In Any Language In Only 10 Minutes A Day!”

Paragraph with influence statements:

“The revolutionary self-improvement system that will take your confidence and self-esteem to new heights! For less than one-tenth of the cost of a seminar from a life coach, you can learn vetted methods to feel like the world is your oyster in a matter of days! Consider this – You attend a seminar and take notes. You feel great, but that feeling goes away hours afterward. This system is yours to own, giving you lasting results. If you don’t feel more confident and ready to take on the world with 30 days, we will give you a full refund, no questions asked! This offer is only good while supplies last, and this is our top-selling item! Don’t miss out – CLICK HERE TO PLACE YOUR ORDER”
 

MrChud

New Contributor
Read Fastlane!
Oct 31, 2020
23
4
Day 4

Turbocharge Your Relationships & Quality of Life
Learn the Communication Skills for True Success
Excel In Love and In Life
How to Get The Respect You Deserve
Learn the Exclusive Secrets to Fulfillment In Your Life

“Hurry! Order Now While Supplies Last!”
“IMMEDIATE PASSIVE INCOME!”
“Offer Expires This Thursday! Act Fast!”
“Order Now and Get This FREE Tote Bag”
“Imagine the convenience you’ll get while scanning your groceries”
“Consider all of the possibilities you might not have thought of”
“Click Here for Instant Real Estate Secrets!”
“Get 25% off your order! Expires on Friday!”
“This Formula is flying off of shelves! Order Now While Supplies Last!”
“Consider how these secrets will impress your mate!”
 
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MrChud

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Oct 31, 2020
23
4
Day 5


Helped someone figure out part of the self-publishing process for E-books on Amazon today.

STOP Headlines:

“Absorb and Remember Facts Like Never Before!”
“Simple Trick Unlocks Your Brain’s Potential for Only 5 Minutes Per Day!”
“Get Rid of Set-In Stains Fast!”
“Special Fluid Makes Your Old Dishwasher Run Like Brand New!”
“BOOST MANHOOD FAST”

Influence Sentences:

“Order by Thursday and get this special catnip mouse!”
“Consider how happy your dog will feel playing with this.”
“Click Here to Order”
“Buy Now and Get 15% Your Oder!”
“Supplies are FLYING off the shelves, so place your order today!”

Action that I took that I was fearful of:
Promoted my E-book on a promotional Facebook group

(Page of copy in post below)
 

MrChud

New Contributor
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Oct 31, 2020
23
4
Day 5- page of copy

New E-Book Reveals Secret Methods Proven to Increase Your Personal Potential​

Do you feel like your self-confidence could use a boost?

Are you wanting more from your relationships at home and at work?

Would you like to see your life become one that others could call ‘inspirational’?

If you answered ‘YES’ to at least one of these questions, keep reading.

I’ve been where you are, and I know you’re capable of great things.

If this sounds hard to believe, I get it.

There was a period where I felt like that wasn’t true for me, either.

It wasn’t until I discovered the simple secrets that all great leaders have known on a subconscious level. Of course, I didn’t come by this information by pouring over lots of self-help books. I also didn’t attend a bunch of seminars from today’s life coaches to come by these priceless secrets.

When I stumbled upon these, I was floored at how simple these tricks are. At first, I was very skeptical that they would work.

How could all this be so easy? Surely, there had to be more to it than this. I mean, I couldn’t believe how I was feeling more and more like a superhero than I ever felt in my life!

To say this information is life-changing doesn’t do it justice!

I went from someone who was struggling to climb the ladder in my career, to someone who regularly receives promotions and is on the fast track!

I used to get into regular shouting matches with my wife. I wasn’t sure if I was a good enough father to my kids. I was fearful of what my co-workers were saying. I was even convinced that they were plotting to end my career at one point.

I was a nervous wreck. Conflict of any kind was enough to make me break out in cold sweats! My level of confidence in myself was at lows that I’ve never known before.

It became so bad that I considered talking to my doctor about medication for depression and anxiety.

From nervous wreck to superstar – in a matter of days!

I meet regularly with the top executives of my company, and walk and talk with confidence I haven’t known in years!

My wife and I are closer than we’ve ever been. I have an incredible relationship with my kids.

I have the poise and skill to handle conflict as soon as it arises, and I get along much better with my co-workers. We even go out for drinks every week!

And I accomplished all of this, without the need for any kind of medication!

If I can do this, imagine what this can do for you!

This book can take your life to new heights, even beyond what you ever dreamed was possible! The information is easy to apply, and effective in its impact. You can take advantage of this information and have it on hand to read anywhere, in a convenient E-Book format.

You can have this information anywhere you go.

Today, I’m offering these secrets for the low price of only $15.99 if you order within the next 24 hours. ($40 value)

Consider all of the potential benefits you’ll experience. Imagine how much your relationships will improve.

If you don’t experience all of the benefits that the information can provide, simply send my team an e-mail within 30 days of your purchase. We’ll give you a FULL REFUND, plus you KEEP THE E-BOOK!
100% RISK-FREE!
I am so sure you’ll be pleased with your own life transformation, you’ll agree that this E-book pays for itself, many times over!

CLICK HERE to unlock the success you deserve!​
 

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