Hi All!,
I was hoping to get some critique on my copy here. I'm certainly open to all opinions of help and value, but do keep in mind this is onlr my THIRD piece of copy...for anything to do with copy. The excerpt is in regards to a jacket I have listed and am selling. Figured since I'm doing Lex's course I mine as well incorporate it immediately and apply it to my products Thanks all!!!
"Finally, a “One and Done” winter jacket. The *Insert Jacket Name* is an absolutely PHENOMENAL piece of equipment. If you’re looking for an expertly crafted jacket to endure any type of cold environment whether it be mildly chilly or arctic worthy, then look no further than the *Insert Jacket Name*.
Built with superb comfort in mind, climbing into this jacket is like being wrapped up in your favorite blanket at home with a hearty fire crackling nearby. It instills a feeling of being bundled securely and snuggly, especially with having 50D RipStop Polyester for the exterior fabric.
You are getting a fantastic deal on this item and I know you WILL NOT be disappointed. This is the only one currently in stock and you can’t find this jacket for sale anywhere else. They’re all SOLD OUT!!! Add this to your “Watch List” and get ready to put your bid in ASAP. This item is only up for sale til January 5th, 2018 so don’t miss out on your ONLY opportunity to get this spectacular jacket!"
I was hoping to get some critique on my copy here. I'm certainly open to all opinions of help and value, but do keep in mind this is onlr my THIRD piece of copy...for anything to do with copy. The excerpt is in regards to a jacket I have listed and am selling. Figured since I'm doing Lex's course I mine as well incorporate it immediately and apply it to my products Thanks all!!!
"Finally, a “One and Done” winter jacket. The *Insert Jacket Name* is an absolutely PHENOMENAL piece of equipment. If you’re looking for an expertly crafted jacket to endure any type of cold environment whether it be mildly chilly or arctic worthy, then look no further than the *Insert Jacket Name*.
Built with superb comfort in mind, climbing into this jacket is like being wrapped up in your favorite blanket at home with a hearty fire crackling nearby. It instills a feeling of being bundled securely and snuggly, especially with having 50D RipStop Polyester for the exterior fabric.
You are getting a fantastic deal on this item and I know you WILL NOT be disappointed. This is the only one currently in stock and you can’t find this jacket for sale anywhere else. They’re all SOLD OUT!!! Add this to your “Watch List” and get ready to put your bid in ASAP. This item is only up for sale til January 5th, 2018 so don’t miss out on your ONLY opportunity to get this spectacular jacket!"
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