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I'm a beginner in copywriting and I'm currently doing Lex's 15 day challenge.
I have created 3 headlines each for 5 random products for practice and need some expert feedback. Any related advice to my writing or anything else is also welcome.
Here it is :
Headline : The Perfect Charger! No Need to Twist Your Posture Anymore.
b> Charger That Doesn’t Tear When You Bend It? You Got It.
c> No Need To Plug In Your Laptop Every 30 Minutes Anymore.
2) Headline : Smartphone Addiction? Save 10 Years Of Wasted Time And Potential Millions Now.
b> DESTROY THOSE HABITS.
C> Save Time, Earn Money And Gain Control Of Your Life.
3) Headline : Make Your Face Look Sharp And Mog Everyone.
b> Go From A 4/10 Dweeb To a 9/10 Chad While Protecting Your Eyes.
c> Prevent Forehead Wrinkles (The Easy Way).
4) Headline : Gain 1000’s Of Followers And Attract Clients On Autopilot.
b> Want Clients That Pay More And Are Not Annoying? Get On Twitter Today.
c> I’ll Help You Grow To 1000 Followers In 55 Days GUARANTEED (No Prerequisites Needed).
5) Headline : Guests Go “Dude! Where Did You Get That?” For This Bedsheet.
b> Bedsheet That Will Keep You Warm Like A Heater.
c> Using Sleeping Pills? Throw Them Out. Our Bedsheet Will Make Your Sleep 10x Better Without Side Effects.
I have created 3 headlines each for 5 random products for practice and need some expert feedback. Any related advice to my writing or anything else is also welcome.
Here it is :
Headline : The Perfect Charger! No Need to Twist Your Posture Anymore.
b> Charger That Doesn’t Tear When You Bend It? You Got It.
c> No Need To Plug In Your Laptop Every 30 Minutes Anymore.
Product: Laptop Charger
2) Headline : Smartphone Addiction? Save 10 Years Of Wasted Time And Potential Millions Now.
b> DESTROY THOSE HABITS.
C> Save Time, Earn Money And Gain Control Of Your Life.
Product : The Power of Habit (Book)
3) Headline : Make Your Face Look Sharp And Mog Everyone.
b> Go From A 4/10 Dweeb To a 9/10 Chad While Protecting Your Eyes.
c> Prevent Forehead Wrinkles (The Easy Way).
Product : Sunglasses
4) Headline : Gain 1000’s Of Followers And Attract Clients On Autopilot.
b> Want Clients That Pay More And Are Not Annoying? Get On Twitter Today.
c> I’ll Help You Grow To 1000 Followers In 55 Days GUARANTEED (No Prerequisites Needed).
Service : Twitter Growth Consultation
5) Headline : Guests Go “Dude! Where Did You Get That?” For This Bedsheet.
b> Bedsheet That Will Keep You Warm Like A Heater.
c> Using Sleeping Pills? Throw Them Out. Our Bedsheet Will Make Your Sleep 10x Better Without Side Effects.
Product : Bedsheet
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