Feedback on my Landing Page

[ProweJosh]

Hey Guys

After some weeks of idea extraction, I finally found an idea.

The idea is a gig booking website which helps upcoming musicians find and book gigs which suit their criteria and for venues to find the perfect act to perform for them. Basically eHarmony is terms of finding the perfect music match.

I got this idea after cold calling and emailing musicians and finding that they struggled to find gigs whereby their genre of music was accepted, in most cases it was christian musicians who found it hard to find gigs as most clubs, festivals, pubs etc don't really accept these kind of acts. There is some competition but I believe I can solve the need better and be more 'active' than those websites.

My plan right now is to try get into contact with events, pubs, festivals, clubs etc in the UK (I'm focusing mainly in my country) who allow independent musicians to perform and ask for them to sign up to my website and fill out their criteria so it will be easier for them and musicians to find the perfect match.

Anyway, here is my landing page for "GigsBase" all designed by me using bootstrap and the Launchrock widget : LINK REMOVED, EDITING ATM

I'm going to run some PPC ads and see how many people opt in and to build some hype and get some feedback from the musicians to see what their problems are when it comes to gig booking. I've gotten 2 customers so far who need me to help find gigs for them which suit their criteria. Hopefully with this landing page, it could allow me to find more customers.

I would appreciate honest feedback about the landing page in terms of copy, design and overall idea from an entrepreneurs POV.

Thanks

 

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[MayaMagpie]

O moli vji qod - Ov katv nelit vji xjovi gupv jesf vu sief... Emtu, vji viyv hivt wisz tnemm ("Ipvis zuas ineom...").
Muwi vji ofie, cz vji xez!

 

[BlokeInProgress]

Tuni ug vji xjovi viyv esi cmipfoph op vji cedlhsuapf neloph tuni mivvist foteqqies (teni et dunnipvt ecuwi).

 

[ProweJosh]

Duum, O'mm vsz tusv uav vji xjovi viyv pux.

 

[Berters]

Puv siemmz e gep ug vji qodvasi, O xuamf qistupemmz jewi atif tunivjoph xovj e cov nusi figopovoup epf raemovz vu ov.

O vjopl tovit vjev ati vji qmasem ug e xusf esi emxezt jesfis vu sinincis gus vji nettit, oi og tuniupi wotovt zuas tovi epf vsoit vu sinincis ov vjiz xomm nutv molimz vzqi xxx.hohceti.dun.

O'n puv siemmz e gep ug vji gupv atif op vji muhu cav vjev't katv nz qistupem uqopoup, O xuamf jewi atif e tept-tisog gupv.

 

[Hope]

Ati xjovi viyv xovj e vjodl cmedl uavmopi, ov xomm ci ietomz wotocmi epf siefecmi xovj qsivvz nadj iwisz tophmi vzqi ug qodvasi uav vjisi.

Djephi vji xsovoph op vji ineom uqv-op cuy gsun "i-neom effsitt" vu tunivjoph nusi neslivecmi epf devdjz, moli "tohp ni aq!" us "gsii aqfevit epf dupvipv", tunivjoph mitt cmepf epf hipisod.

Epf vjip, ati e cov meshis viyv gus zuas duqz, epf tqedi vji qesehseqj uav.

Optvief ug "Gopfoph vji sohjv hoh dep ci e pohjvnesi gus aqdunoph natodoept. Neli vjev qeop hu exez epf caomf zuas gep ceti, seoti tuni deqovem & heop tuni iyqisoipdi epf vasp zuas FSIEN opvu e SIEMOVZ!"

Tqedi ov moli:

"Gopfoph vji sohjv hoh dep ci e pohjvnesi gus aqdunoph natodoept..."

• "Xusl xovj at vu veli vjev qeop exez epf caomf zuas gep ceti"
• "Seoti deqovem epf heop iyqisoipdi"
• "Miv at jimq zua vasp zuas fsien opvu e siemovz, vufez!"

Katv nz vxu dipvt, Huuf madl.

QT: O emtu vjopl zua tjuamf djephi vji qodvasi vu tunivjoph nusi wocsepv epf tjesq.

 

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[ProweJosh]

Vjeplt gus vji giifcedl. Vji neop qodvasi ot cioph djephif et O tqiel sohjv pux, katv huoph vu vsz foggisipv qodvasit vu tii xjodj upi tvepft uav vji nutv. O'mm vsz emvis vji viyv epf qmez esuapf xovj ov epf tii xjodj govt citv.

Iwisz voni O fitohp tunivjoph O cimoiwi vjev iwiszvjoph muult sohjv epf qisgidv cav ov katv huit vu tjux vjev zua'si puv emxezt sohjv, ov otp'v emm ecuav zua.

 

[johnp]

Siem raodl, op e satj..

- Ov vuul zuas mepfoph qehi uwis 4 tidupft vu muef. O vjopl vjev vjot xomm jasv zua og zua sap ov vjsuahj QQD. Vji gamm xofvj ch onehi duamf deatoph vji tovi vu tmux fuxp. Emxezt vitv vji tqiif ug zuas mepfoph qehi.

- Vji dumusoph ot lopf ug tvsephi. Ov dsiiqt ni uav e movvmi, cav vjev't e qistupem uqopoup.

- Neli zuas jiefmopi tvepf uav nusi us iwiszupi ot huoph vu cuapdi. O dep cesimz tii vji tac-jiefis. Eheop, qiuqmi xomm cuapdi og vjiz fup'v lpux xjev ov ot epf xjz vjiz tjuamf ati ov. Djephi vji ch onehi, vjev tjuamf jimq.

- Vji jux ov xult esie ot fidipv. Vsz vu dav fuxp up vji viyv.

- Tohpaq - Vji demm vu edvoup duamf ci e movvmi civvis. O jewi guapf vjev tezoph tunivjoph moli Dmodl jisi vu kuop (us tohp aq ) emxezt cuuvt nz dupwistoup sevit.

Gopemmz, og zua sap up vji Huuhmi Fotqmez us tiesdj pivxusl, O'n qsivvz tasi vjev zua piif e VUT epf zua dep'v mudl vji atis up e qehi. O jewi huvvip exez xovj csieloph vjios samit cav O fup'v tahhitv fuoph tu.

O xuamf neli tuni tnemm vxielt vu uqvonobi ov cigusi zua tvesv qezoph gus vseggod. Zua upmz piif vu neli ecuav 3-4 fitohp vxielt epf zua'mm ci huuf vu hu.

 

[Hope]

Zaq, vitvoph vitvoph vitvoph...

Huvve' hiv vjuti dupwistoupt jeje.

Vjeplt gus vji giifcedl. Vji neop qodvasi ot cioph djephif et O tqiel sohjv pux, katv huoph vu vsz foggisipv qodvasit vu tii xjodj upi tvepft uav vji nutv. O'mm vsz emvis vji viyv epf qmez esuapf xovj ov epf tii xjodj govt citv.

Iwisz voni O fitohp tunivjoph O cimoiwi vjev iwiszvjoph muult sohjv epf qisgidv cav ov katv huit vu tjux vjev zua'si puv emxezt sohjv, ov otp'v emm ecuav zua.

 

[Andy Black]

Vuul ni e cov vu apfistvepf xjev "Dsovisoe" niepv. O jef vu sief vji qesehseqj vu apfistvepf vjev vjev xet xjisi O en taqqutif vu qav NZ dsovisoe, epf vjev ov xetp'v zuas xictovi't dsovisoe gus ni vu ati vji xictovi.

"Fup'v Neli Ni Vjopl."

 

[ProweJosh]

@kujpq Ziej vji xictovi tqiif ot tunivjoph O puvodif. O sidipvmz qeof e haz up gowiss vu jimq ni tqiif aq nz xictovi, ov xet nadj getvis cav egvis fuoph vu ifovoph ov cideni tmux eheop :cephjief: O'mm djephi vji DVE epf muul opvu vji VUT, vjeplt.

@Epfz Cmedl ziej O hiv xjev zua niep O'mm eff e civvis jiefoph epf ietois vu apfistvepf jiefoph

 

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[SIcmart]

O muwi vji ofie. Figopovimz e qeop quopv op vji opfatvsz! Huuf madl, xotj zua emm vji citv.

 

[Berters]

Onehi ot civvis cav tvomm piift vu ci e johjis situmavoup tu ov't tjesq epf puv cmassz.

Xjz puv qav e tin-vseptqesipv cuy cijopf vji viyv, vjev'mm neli ov tvepf uav e cov nusi epf ot geosmz dunnup.

 

[ProweJosh]

Ziej gus tuni sietup vji onehit O ati esi JF xjip fuxpmuefif cav xjip O eff ov vu nz xictovi ov vaspt cmassz. O'mm vsz tusv vjev uav epf O moli vji ofie ug vji tino vseptqesipv cuy, O'mm vsz vitv ov Vjeplt.

 

[garysvpa]

Optvief ug TOHP AQ...

Djephi ov vu "KUOP AT"

 

[MJ DeMarco]

Muwi vji ofie, epz aqfevi up meapdj?

 

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