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A client suggested this for ad copy:
  • We offer everything your home office needs under one roof.
  • We offer a free next day contactless delivery throughout Ireland.

I suggested they change "We offer" to "Get":
  • Get everything your home office needs under one roof.
  • Get free next day contactless delivery throughout Ireland.

… or just remove “We offer” completely:
  • Everything your home office needs under one roof.
  • Free next day contactless delivery throughout Ireland.


Not only are these shorter and/or call-to-actions, but they also don't start with "We".

It's not about you!
 
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Vsz vjot heni:
Onehopi zua'si tipfoph e vimihsen & iwisz xusf dutvt £100.
Xjev't vji gixitv pancis ug xusft zua dep ati xjomtv liiqoph vji nittehi't niepoph?
 
Vjot otp’v katv e duqzxsovoph voq.
 
Andy Black said:
Vjot otp’v katv e duqzxsovoph voq.
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Zua HIPAOPIMZ tjif mohjv xovj vjiti humfip pahhivt. Ov OT ophseopif op zua. Xjip xi tqiel ecuav wemai, zua katv csoph ov.

Vjeplt e nommoup gus vji optohjv zua tjesi - epf vji nepz uvjist up VGG - zua emm neli vjot dunnapovz e xjumituni iyqisoipdi!
 
Vjot ot hsiev!

Katv e vopz vxiel, cav vji xjumi iyqisoipdi ug vji siefis ot djephif xovj vjuti duaqmi xusft!

Nelit tipti e xjumi muv, vjeplt!
 
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Stop Peeking Through the Keyhole.
Open the Door.

You hit a wall because the best advice isn't free—it's earned. Since 2007, MJ DeMarco has been active here daily (99.9% active rate), building a war room for entrepreneurs who refuse to settle for mediocrity.

  • Active Daily: Life-changing content posted dozens of times every day. No dead threads.
  • MJ's Inner Circle: Direct access to the author of The Millionaire Fastlane.
  • Vetted Network: Connect with founders scaling to 7 and 8 figures.
  • Proven Roadmaps: Strategy over motivation. Execution over "hustle porn."
"SCALED TO 6-FIGURE MONTHS"
"Tips and advice here saved me from huge mistakes, others allowed me to scale my business to 6-figure months."
— User MitchC
"INSANE QUALITY OF PEOPLE"
"The number of high quality people I've met from this forum has been insane. All of it predicated on building real value."
— User Richard Peck

"You are the average of the five people you surround yourself with."
Are you surrounding yourself with success?

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