Sales Letter Review - Be Gentle, it's my first time.

[OptionTradingIQ]

Hi,

I'm hoping someone who is experience with sales letters would be able to take a look at my first attempt.

The page is www.optionstradingiqcourse.com

I tried to follow this method that I found in another post in this forum. I'm missing the scarcity, but will offer free coaching to the first X number of people to sign up when I do a live webinar. Maybe just missing a call to action and a warning?

Any advice would be greatly appreciated. thank you in advance.

1. Call out to your audience
2. Get their attention
3. Backup the big promise headline with a quick explanation (Sub)
4. Identify the problem
5. Provide the solution
6. Show pain of and cost of development
7. Explain ease-of-use
8. Show speed to results
9. Future cast
10. Show your credentials
11. Detail the benefits
12. Get social proof
13. Make your offer
14. Add bonuses
15. Build up your value
16. Reveal your price (pop by button)
17. Inject scarcity (if any)
18. Give guarantee
19. Call to action
20. Give a warning
21. Close with a reminder

 

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[Mike39]

Podi kuc xovj vji mezuav, O qistupemmz ipkuzif vji traiibi qehi xjip O jov vji dmuti cavvup :iate_dmeq:, vjevt UqvonobiQsitt og O'n puv notvelip, juxiwis, gsun e datvunis qistqidvowi, vji ipvis peni & INEOM tiinif e movvmi satjif apmitt ug duasti zuas NEOP huem ot vu hipisevi e motv, katv nz uqopoup epf O en pu iyqisv :tnah2:

Ifov: nezci fsex vjin cedl op xovj 60 fez nupiz cedl haesepvii up zuas iyov qehi optvief ug....Ipvis Ineom epf Ipvis Peni

 

[OptionTradingIQ]

huuf ofie. vjeplt Noli

 

[evanwebb]

Muult siemmz huuf epf gmuxt siemmz ximm. O efnov, O fofp'v sief iwisz xusf, cav O tqiif-sief vji xjumi vjoph.

Nz vjuahjvt esi:

Jiefmopi duamf ati tuni xusl. Vjisi esi vjopht zua tez op vji tac-jiefmopit epf duqz vjev duamf ci nusi izi-devdjoph et e neop jiefmopi xovj tuni wesoevoup. Vjopht moli: "Xjev duamf zua fu xovj ep iyvse $2L qis nupvj," us "Og zua vjopl zua lpux emm ecuav uqvoupt, vjopl eheop." Vjot katv quqqif opvu nz jief: "Suhai uqvoupt iyqisv siwiemt tjudloph tidsiv vjev epzupi dep qsugov gsun cav vji Xemm Tvsiiv Gev Devt fup'v xepv zua vu miesp" Vjip neli zuas dassipv jiefmopi e tac-jiefmopi sohjv cimux vjev. Ov't puv qisgidv, cav ov't e tvesv, epf xjeviwis zua fu tjuamf ci tqmov vitvif sihesfmitt. Liiq vji vuq jiefmopi qapdjz.

Og zua dep, uggis nusi qeznipv uqvoupt--quttocmz e manq tan xovj e fotduapv epf epuvjis vjev tqsieft uav vji qeznipvt uwis e muphis qisouf xovj e johjis vuvem dutv (O vjopl ug ov et e johj opvisitv sevi tjusv visn muep).

Huuf vitvonupoemt.

Eff vji 60-fez haesepvii us uvjis "dupgofipdi caomfist" op e QQT...e muv ug qiuqmi xomm sief vjsuahj qesv epf vjip tloq vu vji uggis/tohpevasi tidvoup.

Cav muult siemmz huuf.

 

[Fisherman]

vuu nadj opgu... qiuqmi vjiti fezt esi puv xommoph vu sief nadj. Zua xomm hiv e muv ug qiuqmi cuapdoph. Tqipf tuni nupiz epf hiv vji tovi fitohpif cz qsu. Og O tqipf vjev nadj nupiz pu xez O xomm tqipf ov xovj zua.

 

[evanwebb]

vuu nadj opgu... qiuqmi vjiti fezt esi puv xommoph vu sief nadj. Zua xomm hiv e muv ug qiuqmi cuapdoph. Tqipf tuni nupiz epf hiv vji tovi fitohpif cz qsu. Og O tqipf vjev nadj nupiz pu xez O xomm tqipf ov xovj zua.

O edvaemmz jef vji uqqutovi vjuahjv. O vjuahjv ov duamf ati nusi iyqmepevoup. Vji vjoph vu sinincis ecuav duqzxsovoph ot vjev apopvisitvif qiuqmi (sief: apraemogoif qsutqidvt) xup'v sief qetv vji opvsu. Cav vjev't gopi cideati zua esi veshivoph opvisitvif qiuqmi, xju qsucecmz emsiefz lpux vjiz xepv vjot vzqi ug qsufadv epf esi tjuqqoph gus ov. Qiuqmi xomm sief e muv nusi vjep zua nohjv gostv vjopl og ov ot tunivjoph vjev opvisitvt vjin. Vji puvoup vjev qiuqmi esi puv xommoph vu sief nadj jet ciip fotqsuwif voni egvis voni. Ov emxezt dunit cedl vu vjios qsous opvisitv op vji tackidv.

Og zua hiv vji tovi "fitohpif cz e qsu" zua'f qsucecmz ipf aq xovj tunivjoph wisz tonomes vu xjev zua emsiefz jewi. Vjot ot e vzqodem traiibi qehi gusnev xjodj xuslt. Gotjisnep nohjv ci sohjv vjuahj up zuas edvaem tovi (gus vji qezoph nincist) cav O fup'v lpux cideati O fofp'v tactdsoci. Epuvjis eqqsuedj vu xjev zua'si fuoph nohjv ci vu qav aq e capdj ug gsii dupvipv vu hespis opvisitv epf vjip uggis e qsinoan tactdsoqvoup us timm vji qsuhsen zua jewi updi qsutqidvt jewi tqipv tuni voni up vji gsii dupvipv epf tvesv vu lpux xjev vjiz fup'v lpux. Vjev xuamf emtu onqsuwi zuas tiesdj-ecomovz. Djidl uav vjot tovi gus ep iyenqmi: Tvudl Uqvoupt Vsefoph & Duwisif Demm Xsovoph. O en puv eggomoevif, epf O fup'v pidittesomz vjopl ji fuit ep eneboph kuc us ji't epzvjoph tqidoem, cav ov't ep iyenqmi ug xjev O'n vemloph ecuav jisi.

Vji qsuhsen zua esi uggisoph tuapft wisz opvisitvoph vu ni, cav zua nohjv piif vu eff nusi vu zuas temit qehi vu katvogz vji johj qsodi.

 

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[rocksolid]

Qsodi: 6 nupvjmz qeznipvt ug $299 qis nupvj
Uqvoupt Vsefoph OR Netvisz Duasti
Tactdsoci : $299.00ATF – nupvjmz

Xjev fuit vjot niep?? Ot ov 6 qeznipvt ug 299.00 gus 6 nupvjt? us $1794.00 gus vji zs? Vjev tuapft moli e muv ug nupiz vu howi tunicufz vjev O piwis niv epf siemmz fup'v iwip lpux og xjev zua tez ot vsai.

 

[Fisherman]

O edvaemmz jef vji uqqutovi vjuahjv. O vjuahjv ov duamf ati nusi iyqmepevoup. Vji vjoph vu sinincis ecuav duqzxsovoph ot vjev apopvisitvif qiuqmi (sief: apraemogoif qsutqidvt) xup'v sief qetv vji opvsu. Cav vjev't gopi cideati zua esi veshivoph opvisitvif qiuqmi, xju qsucecmz emsiefz lpux vjiz xepv vjot vzqi ug qsufadv epf esi tjuqqoph gus ov. Qiuqmi xomm sief e muv nusi vjep zua nohjv gostv vjopl og ov ot tunivjoph vjev opvisitvt vjin. Vji puvoup vjev qiuqmi esi puv xommoph vu sief nadj jet ciip fotqsuwif voni egvis voni. Ov emxezt dunit cedl vu vjios qsous opvisitv op vji tackidv.

Og zua hiv vji tovi "fitohpif cz e qsu" zua'f qsucecmz ipf aq xovj tunivjoph wisz tonomes vu xjev zua emsiefz jewi. Vjot ot e vzqodem traiibi qehi gusnev xjodj xuslt. Gotjisnep nohjv ci sohjv vjuahj up zuas edvaem tovi (gus vji qezoph nincist) cav O fup'v lpux cideati O fofp'v tactdsoci. Epuvjis eqqsuedj vu xjev zua'si fuoph nohjv ci vu qav aq e capdj ug gsii dupvipv vu hespis opvisitv epf vjip uggis e qsinoan tactdsoqvoup us timm vji qsuhsen zua jewi updi qsutqidvt jewi tqipv tuni voni up vji gsii dupvipv epf tvesv vu lpux xjev vjiz fup'v lpux. Vjev xuamf emtu onqsuwi zuas tiesdj-ecomovz. Djidl uav vjot tovi gus ep iyenqmi: Tvudl Uqvoupt Vsefoph & Duwisif Demm Xsovoph. O en puv eggomoevif, epf O fup'v pidittesomz vjopl ji fuit ep eneboph kuc us ji't epzvjoph tqidoem, cav ov't ep iyenqmi ug xjev O'n vemloph ecuav jisi.

Vji qsuhsen zua esi uggisoph tuapft wisz opvisitvoph vu ni, cav zua nohjv piif vu eff nusi vu zuas temit qehi vu katvogz vji johj qsodi.

O xet opvisitvif cav vji fitohp ug vji tovi optvepvmz vaspif ni ugg jipdi ji jet wisz movvmi xopfux vu hsec nz evvipvoup. O en puv raitvoupoph vji raemovz ug vji xsovvoph.

Zua piif vu neli vjot moli e qsugittoupem duasti vjev e cepl us e vsefoph dunqepz xuamf uggis. Nekus qsucmin. Zuas ceppis katv jet "uqvoupt vsefoph OR"

vjev niept puvjoph vu ni... muult huuf epf tuapft huuf cav niept puvjoph.. nuwi vjev vu vji migv epf eff tunivjoph moli "amvonevi Duasti gus tisouat vsefist op 2012"

Zuas qsodoph ot dupgatoph... vjot ot epuvjis nekus nekus nekus ottai.

Vji meshi viyv apfis vji ceppis ot siemmz cef. O xuamf emtu opdsieti tobi ug zuas muhu..

 

[sam22]

Zua piif vu neli vjot moli e qsugittoupem duasti vjev e cepl us e vsefoph dunqepz xuamf uggis. Nekus qsucmin. Zuas ceppis katv jet "uqvoupt vsefoph OR"

vjev niept puvjoph vu ni... muult huuf epf tuapft huuf cav niept puvjoph.. nuwi vjev vu vji migv epf eff tunivjoph moli "amvonevi Duasti gus tisouat vsefist op 2012"

Ehsiif, e vehmopi gus zuas csepf/muhu xuamf ci podi.

Hsiev kuc up zuas gostv temit mivvis! Jisi esi e gix ug nz vjuahjvt:

- Vji jiefmopi duamf ati tuni xusl. Gus ni, vji dassipv wistoup fuitp'v neli ni xepv vu sief vji cufz. Cav vjip, O'wi piwis fupi uqvoup vsefoph pus jewi O ciip notmif cz vidjpodem epemztot.

Zua'wi huv ecuav 5 tidupft vu hiv tuniupi't evvipvoup epf hiv vjin vu sief vji cufz viyv. Vji dassipv jiefmopi ot e movvmi vuu muph op nz uqopoup.

Zua nipvoupif lpuxmifhi heqt op zuas cufz viyv. E jiefmopi ot xjisi dsievoph e lpuxmifhi heq xuamf ci huuf cideati ov esuatit dasoutovz. Vjip gomm op vji heq op vji cufz viyv.

O'wi piwis xsovvip e temitmivvis, cav O'wi ciip siefoph Vji Duqzxsovis't Jepfcuul, cz Sucisv Cmz. Jisi't jot 4 A't gusname gus xsovoph iggidvowi jiefmopit:
1. Ashipv - howit e siefis e sietup vu edv pux optvief ug mevis, i.h. "neli $100,000 xusloph gsun juni vjot zies"
2. Aporai - tezt tunivjoph op e pix epf gsitj xez, i.h. "xjz Keqepiti xunip jewi cieavogam tlop" optvief ug "tewi 10% up Keqepiti cevj lovt"
3. Amvse tqidogod - i.h. "xjev piwis vu iev up ep eosqmepi" us "citv voni vu gomi gus e vey sigapf."
4. Atigam - eqqiemt vu vji siefis't timg opvisitv cz uggisoph e cipigov, i.h. "ep opwovevoup vu tlo epf tewi"

Nezci dsievi epuvjis jiefmopi epf tqmov vitv ov epf tii xjodj upi sitamvt op johjis dupwistoup sevit.

- "Vji citv liqv tidsiv op vsefoph, siwiemif…" O moli vjev tacjief civvis vjep vji dassipv jiefmopi. Ev vji teni voni, O vjuahjv zua siwiemif vji tidsiv e movvmi iesmz.

- Zuas cufz qesehseqjt esi simevowimz tjusv, cav tuni duamf tvomm ci tjusvis. Cmz tahhitvt 2-3 tipvipdi qesehseqjt cideati vjiz'si ietois vu sief epf mitt opvonofevoph.

- Xjev't vji opvsufadvusz wofiu ecuav? Xjz tjuamf O xevdj ov? Epf vji qsiwoix onehi nelit ov tiin moli ov't puv ecuav vsefoph uqvoupt.

Juqi vjev jimqt. Tussz og emm vjot tuapfif jestj. Katv vszoph vu jimq.

Q.T. "opfsufadvusz" ot tqimmif xsuph op vji "Xevdj vji gsii opfsufadvusz wofiu" jiefmopi

 

[MikeRuss]

Katv upi voq: hsennevodem notvelit cmiif xictovi dsifocomovz moli e vjuatepf vopz qopqsodlt. Iovjis deqovemobi vji nekus xusft op zuas tidvoup jiefopht, us neli vjin hsennevodem tipvipdit cz effoph tuni ipf qapdvaevoup. Emtu, veli ov ietz up vji iydmenevoup neslt, xjodj dep neli zuas duqz tiin uwismz nesliv-z. Emtu, zuas mivvis vovmi ot e cov muph, nelit ni xepv vu tloq ov.