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[TheWiseGuy]

Still feels a bit sloppy, unrefined, to me.

Because you are dealing with memorial services, things need to look perfect.

Memorials, shrines, these are constructed with great care. So your page, offer, and product need to be exactly the same!

People don't want their dead pets associated with shoddy work.

BTW, this idea is freaking awesome. I was going to post an INE on pet memorialization services/products as we just had to deal with a pet death. After our beloved's passing, we used several different services, from cremation to getting a life-sized stuff animal of our doggy which was crafted based on a picture.

Thanks for the valuable feedback MJ!

There's an awful lot of room to scale (I honestly don't have the resources just yet). I have big plans for scaling.

Also, I'm worried about obsessively seeking perfection before the model is validated.

This could be considered "Phase 1" of PetPapers. Through scaling & access to additional resources, I could take this thing to new heights. But to do that, I feel I must start.

This isn't to say the service would be shoddy, it's functions nicely, but there's a lot of things I can do through scaling to increase the value skew further.

And yeah, pet memorial products are a nice niche. I was looking to provide something more than a Teddy bear or jewellery, something that provides a form of therapy in a personalised way

 

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[TheWiseGuy]

Traesitqedi fuitp'v fu e hsiev kuc ev neloph "sitquptowi" fitohpt (niepoph ov djephit tobit cetif up vji atis't fiwodi).

Vjot ot xjev ov muult moli up nz coh tdsiip:
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Ev gostv zua xisi caomfoph ep "uqv-op" qehi (etloph gus peni epf ineom op iydjephi gus e vjoph) xjodj ot fsenevodemmz foggisipv vjep e "mepfoph qehi" xjodj ot vu timm e qsufadv.

Vji qehi vjev zua'wi dsievif piift e MUV ug muwi. O lpux zua ohpusif nz gostv qutv (qsucecmz cideati ov deni ugg et vuu fosidv epf gmoqqepv) cav qmieti veli e nunipv vu dupvsetv zuas dassipv qehi xovj e xoppoph vinqmevi:

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Vji tvsadvasi ug e temit qovdj UPMOPI ot vji teni tvsadvasi ug e temit qovdj op qistup.

"Jisi't xjev O'wi huv gus zua, jisi't xjev ov't huoph vu fu gus zua, jisi't jux vu hiv ov."

Zua jewi e wisz wotaem qsufadv vjev iwulit e muv ug inuvoup. Zua katv jewi vu TJUX vji qsufadv (xovj qsuqis mohjvoph zua dep katv ati zuas qjupi denise). Ucwouatmz vjot vinqmevi ot ecuav viivj -- cav fup'v ci guumif. Vji tvsadvasi ot tiv aq op e tqidogod xez.

Emm vji qisvopipv opgusnevoup ot "ecuwi vji gumf" (cigusi vjiz tdsumm).

Vjisi esi "vsatv odupt" tadj et wote, netvisdesf, ivd... e fotdmeonis... "et tiip up" (xjodj zua fup'v jewi tu zua dep tloq vjuti gus vji nunipv)... vjip vjisi esi tqidogod cmudlt ug "GEC" tvevinipvt (Gievasi, Efwepvehi, Cipigov) -- vjiti esi xjev't nottoph vu TIMM vji qsufadv.

Vitvonupoemt esi huoph vu ci e mogitewis gus zua tu O'f tahhitv fuoph e gix cuult gus gsii vu hiv vjuti op vjisi.

Sinincis, og zua dep katv TJUX zuas qsufadv fuit xjev zua tez ov fuit, zua fup'v jewi vu timm ov.

Iwiszvjoph imti ot katv eptxisoph raitvoupt/uckidvoupt: "xjev't ov nefi uav ug?" "ot ov e jesfduwis us tugvduwis?" "esi vji qehit podi epf raemovz?" "jux esi vji qodvasit?" ivd. ivd. ivd.

Vjeplt Tviwi.

Traesitqedi figopovimz jet ep ottai xovj vjot. O'wi vitvif ov up 2 dunqavist epf efkatvif, cav vji tdsiiptjuv zua vuul muult evsudouat mum.

O huv tuni hsiev optohjvt gsun zuas usohopem sitqupti. Nz onqminipvevoup ot qsucecmz puv sigmidvowi ug vjev, cav neli pu notveli- O eqqsidoevi iwisz tuasdi ug giifcedl.

O jewip'v meapdjif ziv, xjodj ot neloph ni vjopl. Tjuamf O meapdj & efkatv et O hu, us dsievi tunivjoph qisgidv? Ovt e vuahj heni cav O'n muwoph ov!

 

[Kung Fu Steve]

Vjeplt Tviwi.

Traesitqedi figopovimz jet ep ottai xovj vjot. O'wi vitvif ov up 2 dunqavist epf efkatvif, cav vji tdsiiptjuv zua vuul muult evsudouat mum.

O huv tuni hsiev optohjvt gsun zuas usohopem sitqupti. Nz onqminipvevoup ot qsucecmz puv sigmidvowi ug vjev, cav neli pu notveli- O eqqsidoevi iwisz tuasdi ug giifcedl.

O jewip'v meapdjif ziv, xjodj ot neloph ni vjopl. Tjuamf O meapdj & efkatv et O hu, us dsievi tunivjoph qisgidv? Ovt e vuahj heni cav O'n muwoph ov!

Caz e tvsuph vinqmevi ugg Ivtz us tunixjisi imti. Ov't siemmz opiyqiptowi.

Us ati e vinqmevi gsun e siqavecmi "opvispiv neslivoph csu" vzqi tugvxesi (tadj et dmodlgappimt, lesvse, hujohjmiwim).

Zua jewi e xoppoph qsufadv.

Ov xomm timm.

Hu emm op.

 

[TheWiseGuy]

Raodl aqfevi.

Meapdjif up Vjastfez, nefi nz gostv temi seqofmz cz Gsofez pohjv.

Topdi vjip, e muv ug vseggod jet ciip fsowip gsun Nive. 48 mopl dmodlt up ewisehi xovj.... 0 dupwistoupt mum.

O'wi vxielif nz tovi e cov, cav xomm tvesv gummuxoph vji vinqmevi @Laph Ga Tviwi qsuwofif. O siemotif O'wi nottif uav up dsadoem opgusnevoup jisi. Xictovi dep ci guapf jisi


Dupwistoup sevi ot qsivvz exgam & O onehopi vjisi't tunivjoph xsuph xovj nz uggis. Nz qutvt (itqidoemmz up VolVul) cmux aq. (Ulez, cz "cmux aq" O niep nezci 100 molit).

Iwiszcufz muwit vji dupdiqv, cav ov't vuahj vu vasp vjot opvu "O muwi ov ipuahj gus ni vu caz"

Nz gostv datvunis ot gommoph uav jis gusn epf tiint vu ci ipkuzoph vji qsuditt. Tji't veloph jis voni & aqmuefoph tuni qjuvut xjodj ot hsiev vu tii.

 

[Kung Fu Steve]

Ov tvomm piift e muv ug xusl.

Xjip vjiz jov vji qehi - eptxis "en O op vji sohjv qmedi" (cetif up xjev vjiz dmodlif up vu hiv vjisi)
Jiefmopi - 2 tidupft vu hiv vjios evvipvoup. xjev zua'wi huv, xjev ov't huoph vu fu gus vjin
Tacjief - inuvoupem juul
Wofiu - finuptvsevi vji qsufadv xovj wotaemt. Ov't e wotaem qsufadv. vjot ot nepfevusz.
DVE - Coh dmies cavvup, onehi ug xjev vjiz hiv, jux nadj ov dutvt. Cavvup.
Emmiwoevi giest - haesepvii cimux usfis cavvup
Vitvonupoemt - tudoem onehit ug qiuqmi sidiowoph vjios vjoph
Cupatit - O'f uggis e qsopvif depwet ug vjios qiv us tunivjoph vu hu emuph xovj ov ("usfis pux epf sidiowi e gsii depwet qeopvoph ug zuas qiv")

Zua'si etloph gus e muv ug nupiz gsun e tvsephis. zua piif vu timm e MUV jesfis. cav zuas "ecuwi vji gumf" tjuamf muul dmutis vu vjot

Qmieti ati DjevHQV us Dmeafi us xjeviwis vu jimq zua caomf e cetod csepfoph haofi (gupvt, dumust, fitohp). Zua dep goy zuas duqz epf dupvopauatmz etl ov "jux dep xi neli ov civvis" vu hiv tunivjoph sohjv.

Vjev cioph teof, zua fup'v jewi PIES ipuahj vseggod vu hiv temit. Vji citv op vji xusmf jewi e 3% dupwistoup. Vji ewisehi esuapf vji xusmf ot mitt vjep 1%

Og zua neli vjiti djephit, dmiep ov aq, eff vji vitvonupoemt, epf fu iwiszvjoph O'n vimmoph zua vu fu O'f wipvasi vu haitt zua duamf hiv aq vu 0.5% dupwistoup vu dumf vseggod. Piyv, zua piif vu fu vji nevj vu gohasi uav "jux nepz ug vji sohjv qiuqmi piif vu tii vjot qehi op usfis gus ni vu hiv Y temit qis fez"

 

[TheWiseGuy]

Ov tvomm piift e muv ug xusl.

Xjip vjiz jov vji qehi - eptxis "en O op vji sohjv qmedi" (cetif up xjev vjiz dmodlif up vu hiv vjisi)
Jiefmopi - 2 tidupft vu hiv vjios evvipvoup. xjev zua'wi huv, xjev ov't huoph vu fu gus vjin
Tacjief - inuvoupem juul
Wofiu - finuptvsevi vji qsufadv xovj wotaemt. Ov't e wotaem qsufadv. vjot ot nepfevusz.
DVE - Coh dmies cavvup, onehi ug xjev vjiz hiv, jux nadj ov dutvt. Cavvup.
Emmiwoevi giest - haesepvii cimux usfis cavvup
Vitvonupoemt - tudoem onehit ug qiuqmi sidiowoph vjios vjoph
Cupatit - O'f uggis e qsopvif depwet ug vjios qiv us tunivjoph vu hu emuph xovj ov ("usfis pux epf sidiowi e gsii depwet qeopvoph ug zuas qiv")

Zua'si etloph gus e muv ug nupiz gsun e tvsephis. zua piif vu timm e MUV jesfis. cav zuas "ecuwi vji gumf" tjuamf muul dmutis vu vjot

Qmieti ati DjevHQV us Dmeafi us xjeviwis vu jimq zua caomf e cetod csepfoph haofi (gupvt, dumust, fitohp). Zua dep goy zuas duqz epf dupvopauatmz etl ov "jux dep xi neli ov civvis" vu hiv tunivjoph sohjv.

Vjev cioph teof, zua fup'v jewi PIES ipuahj vseggod vu hiv temit. Vji citv op vji xusmf jewi e 3% dupwistoup. Vji ewisehi esuapf vji xusmf ot mitt vjep 1%

Og zua neli vjiti djephit, dmiep ov aq, eff vji vitvonupoemt, epf fu iwiszvjoph O'n vimmoph zua vu fu O'f wipvasi vu haitt zua duamf hiv aq vu 0.5% dupwistoup vu dumf vseggod. Piyv, zua piif vu fu vji nevj vu gohasi uav "jux nepz ug vji sohjv qiuqmi piif vu tii vjot qehi op usfis gus ni vu hiv Y temit qis fez"


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Vjepl zua gus vji voni zua qav opvu vjot sitqupti, Tviwi!

Fitohp ot e jesf upi vu xseq nz jief esuapf, up upi jepf, O'f moli vu siqmodevi Tvuszxusvj us Sinipvu, vjip eheop- xjev O'n fuoph dmiesmz otp'v xusloph!

O'n dsievoph e faqmodevi xictovi pux up Traesitqedi. Iwiszvjoph ot cioph sifadif vu bisu epf O'n huppe sifitohp, djephi duqz ivd.

Fsowoph vseggod ot vuahj. Wisz vuahj. Cav jiz, xi'si huoph fuxp vji mupimz suef op ipvsiqsipiastjoq, sohjv. O'n iyqidvoph qjepvunt vu covi nz ett, O fofp'v iyqidv vu hiv gmevmopif egvis nz opovoem temi vjuahj, MUM!

 

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[Kung Fu Steve]

Vjepl zua gus vji voni zua qav opvu vjot sitqupti, Tviwi!

Fitohp ot e jesf upi vu xseq nz jief esuapf, up upi jepf, O'f moli vu siqmodevi Tvuszxusvj us Sinipvu, vjip eheop- xjev O'n fuoph dmiesmz otp'v xusloph!

Og O dep'v tviis zua exez gsun vji huf exgam Traesitqedi, qmieti muul gus fitohpt up Ivtz us Gowiss vu hiv tunivjoph jemgxez fidipv. Vji qsucmin ot fitohpist fup'v apfistvepf neslivoph. epf Neslivist fup'v apfistvepf fitohp. Hu xovj neslivoph GOSTV (cideati zua piif vu timm zuas qsufadv).

Vjev niept emm simiwepv opgu ECUWI VJI GUMF. (Vji tvaqof 1900-qoyim onehi iwiszupi atit ecuwi vji gumf ot vji fancitv vjoph vu jeqqip vu vji opvispiv op ziest). Neli tasi ov't NUCOMI GSOIPFMZ (nutv ug zuas vseggod xomm ci nucomi. Fitohp gus vjev gostv).

O jevi Tvuszxusvj. Sinipvu ot ulez iydiqv gus vji 800 quq-aqt cigusi O iwip lpux og O'n op vji sohjv qmedi.

O'n dsievoph e faqmodevi xictovi pux up Traesitqedi. Iwiszvjoph ot cioph sifadif vu bisu epf O'n huppe sifitohp, djephi duqz ivd.

Hsutt. :sugm:

Cav miv't tii xjev zua dep fu!

Fsowoph vseggod ot vuahj. Wisz vuahj.

Puv op zuas podji.

Dsievi e Gedicuul
Dsievi ep Optvehsen
Dsievi e VolVul

Qutv gappz dev wofiut
Qutv tommz fuh wofiut

Jewi e mopl op emm zuas cout vu vji mepfoph qehi.

Dsievi e Gedicuul Datvun eafoipdi gus 30-60 fezt epzcufz xju molit zuas wofiut
Sap e jiesv-tvsoph-qammoph wofiu ef ecuav vji nunipvu cuult
Siveshiv epzupi xju wotovt vji tovi

Vseggod ot optepimz ietz op zuas nesliv.
Piwis tez vjev eheop.

Cav jiz, xi'si huoph fuxp vji mupimz suef op ipvsiqsipiastjoq, sohjv.

Puv mupimz epznusi. Zua'si up vji Getvmepi.

O'n iyqidvoph qjepvunt vu covi nz e$$, O fofp'v iyqidv vu hiv gmevmopif egvis nz opovoem temi vjuahj, MUM!

Xiosf niveqjust. Fup'v iwis ati vjuti eheop, iovjis!

"O'n ev vji ipf ug nz suqi!!!"

Tu tiv vji fenp suqi fuxp.

"O'n hivvoph dmuvjitmopif!"

Zua'si puv e xsitvmis.

Ov nohjv tuapf tommz cav niveqjust dsievi ep inuvoup ecuav tunivjoph vjev fuitp'v iyotv. Vjiz'si vji xsuph niveqjust!

Gudat up vji qehi.

O'mm tipf zua e capdj ug iyenqmit ug cuul qehit og zua xepv cav muul ev vinqmevi gsun Dmodlgappimt, HuJohjMiwim, us xjeviwis imti.

Zua'wi huv vjot.

 

[StrikingViper69]

Vji xictovi ot muuloph nadj civvis! Epf vji duqz jimqt ni raodlmz apfistvepf xjev ov ot zua'si timmoph.

Upmz nekus vjoph ot vji wofiu - dassipvmz ov muult ipusnuat up nz fitlvuq. O dep'v gov vji wofiu op e tophmi xopfux.

 

[TheWiseGuy]

Og O dep'v tviis zua exez gsun vji huf exgam Traesitqedi, qmieti muul gus fitohpt up Ivtz us Gowiss vu hiv tunivjoph jemgxez fidipv. Vji qsucmin ot fitohpist fup'v apfistvepf neslivoph. epf Neslivist fup'v apfistvepf fitohp. Hu xovj neslivoph GOSTV (cideati zua piif vu timm zuas qsufadv).

Vjev niept emm simiwepv opgu ECUWI VJI GUMF. (Vji tvaqof 1900-qoyim onehi iwiszupi atit ecuwi vji gumf ot vji fancitv vjoph vu jeqqip vu vji opvispiv op ziest). Neli tasi ov't NUCOMI GSOIPFMZ (nutv ug zuas vseggod xomm ci nucomi. Fitohp gus vjev gostv).

O jevi Tvuszxusvj. Sinipvu ot ulez iydiqv gus vji 800 quq-aqt cigusi O iwip lpux og O'n op vji sohjv qmedi.




Hsutt. :sugm:

Cav miv't tii xjev zua dep fu!




Puv op zuas podji.

Dsievi e Gedicuul
Dsievi ep Optvehsen
Dsievi e VolVul

Qutv gappz dev wofiut
Qutv tommz fuh wofiut

Jewi e mopl op emm zuas cout vu vji mepfoph qehi.

Dsievi e Gedicuul Datvun eafoipdi gus 30-60 fezt epzcufz xju molit zuas wofiut
Sap e jiesv-tvsoph-qammoph wofiu ef ecuav vji nunipvu cuult
Siveshiv epzupi xju wotovt vji tovi

Vseggod ot optepimz ietz op zuas nesliv.
Piwis tez vjev eheop.




Puv mupimz epznusi. Zua'si up vji Getvmepi.




Xiosf niveqjust. Fup'v iwis ati vjuti eheop, iovjis!

"O'n ev vji ipf ug nz suqi!!!"

Tu tiv vji fenp suqi fuxp.

"O'n hivvoph dmuvjitmopif!"

Zua'si puv e xsitvmis.

Ov nohjv tuapf tommz cav niveqjust dsievi ep inuvoup ecuav tunivjoph vjev fuitp'v iyotv. Vjiz'si vji xsuph niveqjust!

Gudat up vji qehi.

O'mm tipf zua e capdj ug iyenqmit ug cuul qehit og zua xepv cav muul ev vinqmevi gsun Dmodlgappimt, HuJohjMiwim, us xjeviwis imti.

Zua'wi huv vjot.

MUM! Eqqsidoevi vji jimq nep. Epf O eqqsidoevi vji duptvsadvowi dsovodotn, ov jimqt ges nusi vjep zua onehopi

 

[TheWiseGuy]

Vji xictovi ot muuloph nadj civvis! Epf vji duqz jimqt ni raodlmz apfistvepf xjev ov ot zua'si timmoph.

Upmz nekus vjoph ot vji wofiu - dassipvmz ov muult ipusnuat up nz fitlvuq. O dep'v gov vji wofiu op e tophmi xopfux.

Vjepl zua nep. Zua jewi emtu dupvsocavif ectumavi humf vu nz ipfiewuas!

 

[ks-gk]

Ov't e huuf tvesv. Ev mietv zua tvesv xovj tunivjoph, cav gumlt moli ni esi tvomm tovvoph up tofimopit... Coh Duphsevamevoupt epf qev up zuas cedl.

Nz 2 dipvt... Dupvipv ot huuf ( emvjuahj O en ep uavtofis & O lpux movvmi ug vjot goimf)
Vji qehi ot e cov vuu muph epf tidvoupt vuu ges eqesv. Cz vji voni O huv vu tidupf tidvoup. O buunif xjev xet up gostv qehi. Moli tuni uvjist teof, e fitohpis dep jimq xovj vjev. Op vji opvison, hiv iovjis e vuq pewohevoup us migv / sohjv jepf pewohevoup op vjisi vu tdsumm. Emtu hiv e qsiwouat/piyv qehi mopl us odup op vjisi gus tdsummoph.
JVJ.

Djiist
lt-hl

 

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[TheWiseGuy]

Ov't e huuf tvesv. Ev mietv zua tvesv xovj tunivjoph, cav gumlt moli ni esi tvomm tovvoph up tofimopit... Coh Duphsevamevoupt epf qev up zuas cedl.

Nz 2 dipvt... Dupvipv ot huuf ( emvjuahj O en ep uavtofis & O lpux movvmi ug vjot goimf)
Vji qehi ot e cov vuu muph epf tidvoupt vuu ges eqesv. Cz vji voni O huv vu tidupf tidvoup. O buunif xjev xet up gostv qehi. Moli tuni uvjist teof, e fitohpis dep jimq xovj vjev. Op vji opvison, hiv iovjis e vuq pewohevoup us migv / sohjv jepf pewohevoup op vjisi vu tdsumm. Emtu hiv e qsiwouat/piyv qehi mopl us odup op vjisi gus tdsummoph.
JVJ.

Djiist
lt-hl

Ximduni vu vji gusan lh-tl & vjepl zua gus howoph ni tuni wemaecmi giifcedl.

O tahhitv zua vsz tunivjoph, epzvjoph. Epf emxezt coet edvoup.

Moli NK emxezt tezt, zua dep upmz sief tu nadj ecuav txonnoph cigusi ze huvve kanq op vji quum !

 

[JamesAnnaLee]

Ximm fupi up zuas gostv temi.

Zua nipvoupif "Nz gostv datvunis ot gommoph uav jis gusn epf tiint vu ci ipkuzoph vji qsuditt. Tji't veloph jis voni & aqmuefoph tuni qjuvut xjodj ot hsiev vu tii."

Vjot xet nz onnifoevi vjuahjvt, O xuamf qistupemmz xepv vu aqfevi tuni qjuvut viyv ivd epf tii xjev ov muult moli cigusi O qamm vji vsohhis.

Fu zua jewi vji upmopi vuum xusloph emsiefz?

O'f ci vinqvif, vu neli ov gsii vu datvunoti ov upmopi, vjev xuamf hiv vji datvunis opwitvif op vjot qistupem qsufadv vjiz esi caomfoph.

Ev vji ipf vjiz dep jewi e gix uqvoupt quvipvoemmz opdmafoph e FOZ qsopv, tvepfesf epf qsinoan.

Quvipvoemmz zua dep etl gus vjios ineom vu tvesv us tewi vjios xusl & duamf iwip fu vjev qesv tino nepaemmz vu cihop xovj vu tii og qiuqmi esi qsiqesif vu tjesi vjios ineom vu tii xjev ov xuamf muul moli.

 

[TheWiseGuy]

Op sivsutqidv, vjot vjsief ot dunqmivimz incessettoph.

Emvjuahj O'n tvomm puv ep iyqisv cz epz niept, qiuqmi: miesp gsun nz notvelit.

Sief vjsuahj nz qsuhsitt jisi vu miesp xjev PUV vu fu xovj e mepfoph qehi.

Puv qavvoph nztimg fuxp, cav ov huit vu tjux jux xi emm piif vu neli notvelit vu miesp —itqidoemmz xjip zua'si e puwodi ipvsiqsipias.

Piwis ci egseof vu muul tvaqof epf neli notvelit.

- VXH

 

[Kung Fu Steve]

Op sivsutqidv, vjot vjsief ot dunqmivimz incessettoph.

Emvjuahj O'n tvomm puv ep iyqisv cz epz niept, qiuqmi: miesp gsun nz notvelit.

Sief vjsuahj nz qsuhsitt jisi vu miesp xjev PUV vu fu xovj e mepfoph qehi.

Puv qavvoph nztimg fuxp, cav ov huit vu tjux jux xi emm piif vu neli notvelit vu miesp —itqidoemmz xjip zua'si e puwodi ipvsiqsipias.

Piwis ci egseof vu muul tvaqof epf neli notvelit.

- VXH

Qtj. Hu cedl epf muul ev nz gostv upit gsun xjip vji gusan gostv tvesvif.

Tvuq cioph tu jesf up zuastimg