Help me improve my landing page copy.

[100k]

Hey guys,

I'm working on a campaign to help addicts get help with their addiction through rehab and helping rehab centers get more clients.

Could you tell me how I could improve my copy. I've sent around 100 visitors and no conversions yet.

Thanks in advance.

 

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[100k]

Anyone?

 

[Andy Black]

What were the 100 visitors looking for?

In my mind, you're trying to judge a landing page in isolation.

I created a big thread about "The biggest landing page mistake":

• www.thefastlaneforum.com/community/threads/the-biggest-landing-page-mistake.68353

 

[100k]

They wanted to know if they qualified for free rehab.

This is my ad:

 

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[MotiveInMotion]

What's the biggest positive benefit that your target needs?

I'm not sure people get stoked about free rehab and go in for themselves, but perhaps you can offer something like a free consultation to people who have friends that are in need? And explain to them that they can finally help the people who are hurting themselves.

Like Andy (and Gary Halbert) said, it's more about the starving market than it is the page. Sounds like you've just disqualified an audience. Congrats! Try again with another!

 

[100k]

Thanks for your comment.

I am just an affiliate ... can't really tell the company to make an offer like that and I don't want to promise something I can't deliver.

In any even, I'm thinking I should test removing 90% of the text and just focus on getting people to call the number.

Something like;

"To find out if you qualify for free rehab call our 24/7 rehab support line and secure your free spot in under 2 min."