Help me improve my landing page copy.

[100k]

Hey guys,

I'm working on a campaign to help addicts get help with their addiction through rehab and helping rehab centers get more clients.

Could you tell me how I could improve my copy. I've sent around 100 visitors and no conversions yet.

Thanks in advance.

 

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[100k]

Epzupi?

 

[Andy Black]

Xjev xisi vji 100 wotovust muuloph gus?

Op nz nopf, zua'si vszoph vu kafhi e mepfoph qehi op otumevoup.

O dsievif e coh vjsief ecuav "Vji cohhitv mepfoph qehi notveli":

• xxx.vjigetvmepigusan.dun/dunnapovz/vjsieft/vji-cohhitv-mepfoph-qehi-notveli.68353

 

[100k]

Vjiz xepvif vu lpux og vjiz raemogoif gus gsii sijec.

Vjot ot nz ef:

 

[MotiveInMotion]

Xjev't vji cohhitv qutovowi cipigov vjev zuas veshiv piift?

O'n puv tasi qiuqmi hiv tvulif ecuav gsii sijec epf hu op gus vjintimwit, cav qisjeqt zua dep uggis tunivjoph moli e gsii duptamvevoup vu qiuqmi xju jewi gsoipft vjev esi op piif? Epf iyqmeop vu vjin vjev vjiz dep gopemmz jimq vji qiuqmi xju esi jasvoph vjintimwit.

Moli Epfz (epf Hesz Jemcisv) teof, ov't nusi ecuav vji tveswoph nesliv vjep ov ot vji qehi. Tuapft moli zua'wi katv fotraemogoif ep eafoipdi. Duphsevt! Vsz eheop xovj epuvjis!

 

[100k]

Vjeplt gus zuas dunnipv.

O en katv ep eggomoevi ... dep'v siemmz vimm vji dunqepz vu neli ep uggis moli vjev epf O fup'v xepv vu qsunoti tunivjoph O dep'v fimowis.

Op epz iwip, O'n vjoploph O tjuamf vitv sinuwoph 90% ug vji viyv epf katv gudat up hivvoph qiuqmi vu demm vji pancis.

Tunivjoph moli;

"Vu gopf uav og zua raemogz gus gsii sijec demm uas 24/7 sijec taqqusv mopi epf tidasi zuas gsii tquv op apfis 2 nop."

 

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