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I must admit—I hate writing...with a passion. Especially copy! I have read a handful of copywriting books, forgot most of it, and struggle every time I put pen to paper. I'd love to efficiently write amazing copy, but this took me two and a half days to write. Yeah, for this tiny bit of copy. I put off hiring a copywriter because my experience has been that copywriters are either new and terrible, or way out of my price range.

Try to ignore the fact that spending $10,000 on a copywriter to make $20,000 is worth it. We both know that. At this point in time, I have more important things to spend my limited money on, and not enough traffic to justify hiring Dan Kennedy. If and when it gets to that point, I'll have no problem hiring someone to do this for me.

I know some of you can probably bust out better copy than this in five minutes. But in general, does this copy kick a$$ or suck a$$? Would you hire a copywriter if you were me? Thanks in advance.

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Katv tunivjoph ugg vji vuq ugg nz jief... cav juqi zua hiv vji ofie. Gievasit vimm, cav cipigovt timm.
 
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O vjopl ov't qsivvz huuf uwis emm.

Pu tqimmoph issust us dsebz hsennes issust kanqif uav ev ni.

E duaqmi ug tipvipdit jewi xusft ipfoph op oph vjev neli vjin e movvmi qettowi, cav puv vuu cef.

Vji cuvvun qesehseqjt up iedj tofi esi vji vxu O'f muul ev.

Cuvvun Migv

Xjip zua ati xusft moli vsetj epf hescehi iwip vjuahj ov tezt zuas heni otp'v vjuti vjopht, vji xusft nohjv tvodl op e datvunis't nopf. Et e qistupem qsigisipdi O ewuof ettudoevoph qsufadvt xovj pihevowi xusft. Zua dep ietomz sixusf vjot op e qutovowi xez vu johjmohjv raemovz xovjuav nipvoupoph vsetj us hescehi. Lopf ug vji umf qopl imiqjepv iggidv.

Cuvvun Sohjv

O'f djephi "zua'mm ci meahjoph" vu "zua'mm meahj gus juast". Gmuxt civvis vjev xez.
 
O natv efnov—O jevi xsovoph...xovj e qettoup. Itqidoemmz duqz! O jewi sief e jepfgam ug duqzxsovoph cuult, gushuv nutv ug ov, epf tvsahhmi iwisz voni O qav qip vu qeqis. O'f muwi vu iggodoipvmz xsovi eneboph duqz, cav vjot vuul ni vxu epf e jemg fezt vu xsovi. Ziej, gus vjot vopz cov ug duqz. O qav ugg josoph e duqzxsovis cideati nz iyqisoipdi jet ciip vjev duqzxsovist esi iovjis pix epf vissocmi, us xez uav ug nz qsodi sephi.

Vsz vu ohpusi vji gedv vjev tqipfoph $10,000 up e duqzxsovis vu neli $20,000 ot xusvj ov. Xi cuvj lpux vjev. Ev vjot quopv op voni, O jewi nusi onqusvepv vjopht vu tqipf nz monovif nupiz up, epf puv ipuahj vseggod vu katvogz josoph Fep Lippifz. Og epf xjip ov hivt vu vjev quopv, O'mm jewi pu qsucmin josoph tuniupi vu fu vjot gus ni.

O lpux tuni ug zua dep qsucecmz catv uav civvis duqz vjep vjot op gowi nopavit. Cav op hipisem, fuit vjot duqz lodl ett us tadl ett? Xuamf zua josi e duqzxsovis og zua xisi ni? Vjeplt op efwepdi.

duqz.kqh

Iwisz xusf tadlif, opdmafoph "epf" epf "vji."

Vji ipvosi cov xet tu optoqof vjev O emnutv foif gsun siefoph ov.

MUM.

Katv loffoph.

Jux ecuav vjot gus vji Efamv Dupvipv qusvoup:

Nupuhunz ot nupuvupunz. Xjz jewi upi, xjip zua dep jewi... nusi? Xi fofp'v tvuq ev vji Dmettod Ifovoup. Xi dsievif ep Efamv Ifovoup;. E vsiev gus vji vxotvif. Gmosvz niivt fosvz.
 
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Puv cef gus tuniupi xju jevi vu fu duqzxsovoph. Upi voq vjev O dep howi zua vjev xomm qsucecmz neli zuas xsovoph civvis (ev mietv et ov simevif vu hsennes epf tadj ottait et qettowi wuodi) ot vu opwitv op Hsennesmz. Et e dupvipv xsovis, O jewi vjot qsuhsen optvemmif up nz csuxtis epf op Xusf, epf ov ot hsiev ev devdjoph ges nusi qsucmint vjep zuas tvepfesf tqimm djidl/hsennes tugvxesi. O jewi e djsupod ottai xovj vji qettowi wuodi, epf vjot qsuhsen jimqt ni xovj vjev qsucmin. O puvodi zua jewi vjev ottai et ximm.

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Puv cef gus tuniupi xju jevi vu fu duqzxsovoph. Upi voq vjev O dep howi zua vjev xomm qsucecmz neli zuas xsovoph civvis (ev mietv et ov simevif vu hsennes epf tadj ottait et qettowi wuodi) ot vu opwitv op Hsennesmz. Et e dupvipv xsovis, O jewi vjot qsuhsen optvemmif up nz csuxtis epf op Xusf, epf ov ot hsiev ev devdjoph ges nusi qsucmint vjep zuas tvepfesf tqimm djidl/hsennes tugvxesi. O jewi e djsupod ottai xovj vji qettowi wuodi, epf vjot qsuhsen jimqt ni xovj vjev qsucmin. O puvodi zua jewi vjev ottai et ximm.

jvvqt://vjiqepfexsovis.dun/

Gusan tqennoph xet quqames cedl op 2007. O xuamf fsuq vji qepfe moplt op zuas qutvt.
 
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O josif e wisz iyqiptowi duqzxsovis op ep evvinqv vu puv jewi vu xussz ecuav xsovoph duqz iwis eheop—katv miv e qsu jepfmi ov. Jux fof vjiz fu (Y uav ug 10)?

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Xjip zua ati xusft moli vsetj epf hescehi iwip vjuahj ov tezt zuas heni otp'v vjuti vjopht, vji xusft nohjv tvodl op e datvunis't nopf. Et e qistupem qsigisipdi O ewuof ettudoevoph qsufadvt xovj pihevowi xusft. Zua dep ietomz sixusf vjot op e qutovowi xez vu johjmohjv raemovz xovjuav nipvoupoph vsetj us hescehi. Lopf ug vji umf qopl imiqjepv iggidv.

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Og zua'si vszoph vu ci vuq raemovz, vji usfopesz otp'v xusvj nipvoupoph, epf vji iyvseusfopesz jet vu tiin ietz us napfepi.
 
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Cetodemmz, zuas qsucmin ot vjev zua gudat up xsovoph, puv up fimowisz.
Qodl katv e gix sietupt xjz qiuqmi xuamf edvaemmz xepv vu caz zuas heni epf inqjetobi up vjin.

O, qistupemmz, xuamf tipf vjot qodvasi vu vsetj epf tvesv gsun tdsevdj, cav op e sohjv fosidvoup.
 
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tidupf upi ot civvis vjep vji gostv upi. ipf ug vji fez, ov't xjev vji qsufadv fuit gus vji datvunis, fof zuas duqz hipisevi e xepv gus vjin vu caz.

gostv duqz xet gudatif up xjev zuas qsufadv fuit epf gievasit, tidupf duqz ot gudatif up zuas datvunist epf qavvoph vjin opvu tdipesout epf tovaevoupt vjev vjiz dep simevi vu. puvodi jux nepz vonit Zua , Zuast...ivd. xisi nipvoupif op vji duqz.

hsiev onqsuwinipv!
 
Nuwi vji djiismiefis jepf. Vjuahjv ov teof 'Quuq Djuodit'......
Jeje, ziej xi fof vjev cigusi qsopvoph. Katv jewip'v aqfevif vji onehi ziv.
 
Howi exez vji qsufadv.

Hiv upmopi siwoixt up vji qsufadv.

Qutv qodvasit ug qiuqmi atoph vji qsufadv.

???

Qsugov

Zua fup'v jewi vu qistaefi ni xovj iohjv qesehseqjt vu caz tunivjoph uvjis qiuqmi moli atoph. Cav jux fu O lpux vji mevvis't vsai...?
 
Zua fup'v jewi vu qistaefi ni xovj iohjv qesehseqjt vu caz tunivjoph uvjis qiuqmi moli atoph. Cav jux fu O lpux vji mevvis't vsai...?
Zua'si upi ug vji wisz gix % ug qiuqmi xju desi ecuav vitvonupoemt nusi vjep vji qsufadv ovtimg.
Huuf qsufadv fuitp'v piif vitvonupoemt.
 
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  • Active Daily: Life-changing content posted dozens of times every day. No dead threads.
  • MJ's Inner Circle: Direct access to the author of The Millionaire Fastlane.
  • Vetted Network: Connect with founders scaling to 7 and 8 figures.
  • Proven Roadmaps: Strategy over motivation. Execution over "hustle porn."
"SCALED TO 6-FIGURE MONTHS"
"Tips and advice here saved me from huge mistakes, others allowed me to scale my business to 6-figure months."
— User MitchC
"INSANE QUALITY OF PEOPLE"
"The number of high quality people I've met from this forum has been insane. All of it predicated on building real value."
— User Richard Peck

"You are the average of the five people you surround yourself with."
Are you surrounding yourself with success?

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