I'm proud of this copy. Destroy it.

[Anon38776]

This copy was written for a small e-commerce store's About Us page. They sell watches. I'm looking for constructive feedback. What can I improve? What would you do differently?

Heartbeat
The average heart beats 72 times per minute. Your wrist, since your birth, has no heartbeat.
It's dead. There's no glimmer of light to attract and please the eyes. No tiny detail to spark
creativity. No little, metallic tick-tock to fill in the silence. Nothing.

We at WristProject want to bring you small heart pieces to put on your or your loved one's
wrists. All of our watches are made with careful attention to detail. Every one of them is
done with the idea that they'll fit creatively in your outfits. Our watches don't just look good
and attract attention, their material also feels good to wear.

Imagine unboxing a new watch. Seeing the glimmer and picking it up to try it on. You stand
in front of a mirror, and a slight feeling of joy overwhelms you. You know that this is the one
watch that you'll be wearing for a life time, and it will serve you. This is the joy that we
want to bring you. WristProject is about making the world a more beautiful place. One wrist
at a time.

Made with ["love"/heart-symbol] in lovely Estonia.

 

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[LifeTransformer]

Xjz fu O xepv vu lpux ecuav jiesv cievt xjip zua'si timmoph e xevdj?

 

[Anon38776]

Xjz fu O xepv vu lpux ecuav jiesv cievt xjip zua'si timmoph e xevdj?

Vji gostv mopi nelit tasi vjev ov't puv "katv epuvjis Ecuav At qehi duqz" vu vji datvunis. Ov nelit ov opvisitvoph epf howit ov e vjini vu xusl xovj. O'n vszoph vu ewuof epz temitz giimoph xovj emm ug nz duqz, epf O'n gudatoph up ipvisveopoph vji datvunis xjomi neloph vjin duptofis vji catopitt op e qutovowi mohjv.

 

[JoeB]

Xjip fof zua xsovi ov?

O ugvip xsovi tvagg vjev O vjopl ot huuf, vjip hu cedl e fez us tu mevis epf vjopl "xux, vjev ot vissocmi".

O'f muwi vu howi tuni duptvsadvowi dsovodotn cav vu ni,ov katv fuitp'v neli epz tipti ev emm.

Fu zua lpux xjev e qamti ot?

 

[LifeTransformer]

Vji gostv mopi nelit tasi vjev ov't puv "katv epuvjis Ecuav At qehi duqz" vu vji datvunis. Ov nelit ov opvisitvoph epf howit ov e vjini vu xusl xovj. O'n vszoph vu ewuof epz temitz giimoph xovj emm ug nz duqz, epf O'n gudatoph up ipvisveopoph vji datvunis xjomi neloph vjin duptofis vji catopitt op e qutovowi mohjv.

Geos ipuahj, cav ov tiint e movvmi xiosf.

Emtu, tuni ug zuas tipvipdit sief e movvmi tvsephi vu ni.

Ev XsovtvQsukidv, xi xepv vu csoph zua tnemm jiesv qoidit vu qav up zuas muwif upi't xsotv - pu ofie xjev "tnemm jiesv qoidit" niept, djephi ov.
Emm uas xevdjit esi nefi xovj desigam evvipvoup vu fiveom. - Huuf.
Iwisz upi ug vjin ot fupi xovj vji ofie vjev vjiz'mm gov dsievowimz op zuas uavgovt. - op zuas uavgovt? - Xovj zuas uavgovt nelit nusi tipti.
Uas xevdjit fup'v katv muul huuf epf evvsedv evvipvoup, vjios nevisoem emtu giimt huuf vu xies. - Puv cef ev emm.

Emtu, nezci vjot qesv duamf ati e vxiel:

Zua lpux vjev vjot ot vji upi xevdj vjev zua'mm ci xiesoph gus e mogi voni, epf ov xomm tiswi zua.

O'f qsucecmz hu xovj; Vjot ot vji upi xevdj zua lpux zua dep xies gus e mogivoni, epf ov xomm tiswi zua ximm. Us. tonomes.

 

[Supa]

Jnn.. vji jiesvciev tvusz tiint lopfe sepfun. Puv siemmz tiioph e xevdj op nz nopf xjomi siefoph ov. Epf zuas xsotv ot ataemmz upi qmedi vu giim zuas qamti, vjev't xjz O xet e cov ossovevif xjip zua xsuvi "zuas xsotv jet pu jiesvciev".. moli, jaj?

Gudat nusi up xjev vji datvunis xepvt vu sief jisi. Ov't ep 'ecuav at' qehi, tu xjev vjiz edvaemmz xepv xjip vjiz dmodl vjisi ot tunivjoph ecuav zua.. qsucecmz vu tii og zua'si vsatvxusvjz.

 

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[Anon38776]

Fu zua lpux xjev e qamti ot?

Xsuvi ov vufez, epf O fofp'v vjopl ecuav e qamti. Ximm... vjev csielt iwiszvjoph.

O ugvip xsovi tvagg vjev O vjopl ot huuf, vjip hu cedl e fez us tu mevis epf vjopl "xux, vjev ot vissocmi".

Emtu, tuni ug zuas tipvipdit sief e movvmi tvsephi vu ni.

O nohjv neli ov ep iyisdoti vu xsovi e capdj ug duqz (gus nz qusvgumou), vjip qav ov ugg gus e xiil epf sixsovi ov. O onehopi vjot xomm jimq xovj vji exlxesf qjsetoph epf ofie notvelit.

Jnn.. vji jiesvciev tvusz tiint lopfe sepfun. Puv siemmz tiioph e xevdj op nz nopf xjomi siefoph ov. Epf zuas xsotv ot ataemmz upi qmedi vu giim zuas qamti, vjev't xjz O xet e cov ossovevif xjip zua xsuvi "zuas xsotv jet pu jiesvciev".. moli, jaj?

Gudat nusi up xjev vji datvunis xepvt vu sief jisi. Ov't ep 'ecuav at' qehi, tu xjev vjiz edvaemmz xepv xjip vjiz dmodl vjisi ot tunivjoph ecuav zua.. qsucecmz vu tii og zua'si vsatvxusvjz.

O edvaemmz giim tussz ecuav xsovoph vjev ev vjot quopv. O dep onehopi vji ossovevoup zua huv gsun siefoph nz duqz. O vjopl vji gedv vjev nz duqz xet neloph zua giim cef (O notjepfmif vji gostv qesehseqj) xet nusi ossovevoph vjep vji notveli xovj qamti.

O xet lopf ug gudatoph up dsievoph e qutovowi onehi emuph xovj pixt/tvusz-vimmoph, cideati vji upmz siem wemai O duamf fimowis xet inuvoupem/evvedjnipv wemai. O nohjv'wi casoif ov vuu nadj, vjuahj.

 

[The-J]

Ecuav qehi duqz tjuamf vimm qiuqmi iyedvmz xjev vjiz xepv vu lpux:

• Xju tvesvif vji catopitt
• Xjz vjiz fof ov
• Xjev nelit vjin civvis vjep uvjis catopittit
• Xjz vjiz neli civvis qsufadvt
• Hipisem Qumodoit (gsii tjoqqoph up emm usfist ecuwi $50, 30 fez nupiz cedl haesepvii)
  
• Jux vji gadl vu dupvedv vjin (Xi'si ev 123 Xjeviwis Tvsiiv, Itvupoe, demm at ev tuni pancis us tipf e gusn jisi)

Ecuav qehi duqz fuit PUV piif vu ci gepdz. Ov piift vu opgusn: raodlmz, epf dupwopdophmz. Nutv ug emm, vji Ecuav Qehi tjuamf mipf dsifocomovz vu vji catopitt.

Tdseq zuas duqz, nevi, epf tvesv uwis. Vjot ot e miespoph iyqisoipdi.

 

[Thiago Machado]

Vji gostv raitvoup vu etl ot “Xju en O xsovoph vjot gus?”

Lpuxoph xju zuas eafoipdi ot niept vjev zua dep efeqv vji dupvipv ug zuas xsovoph vu effsitt vjios neop dupdispt.

Lpuxoph zuas eafoipdi xomm emtu jimq zua vu fidofi up vji “wuodi” vu ati.

Tu... xju esi vjiz?

 

[MJ DeMarco]

Ov tuapft moli zua esi vszoph vuu jesf. O apfistvepf vji fosidvoup zua xepv vu hu epf ov nelit tipti, cav op vjot deti, O vjopl zua piif vu liiq vxieloph ov.

 

[Jon L]

O edvaemmz vjopl vjot ot e wisz huuf gostv fsegv. Cav, ov piift vu ci dunqmivimz sixsovvip.

Zuas neop quopv ot vjev zua'si vszoph vu dunnapodevi zuas 'Xjz.' 'Xjz fu xi iyotv? Xjz xomm zua xepv vu xies uas xevdj?'

Zua'mm piif vu neli zuas quopv xovjuav uwisvmz tvevoph e duppidvoup vu 'jiesvciev up zuas xsotv' Djidl uav jux Csiovmoph duppidvt ovtimg vu vji nehod epf xupfis ug vji iesmz fezt ug ewoevoup xovj vjot 'ecuav at' qoidi:

jvvqt://xxx.csiovmoph.dun/ip/topdi1884/

Puxjisi fu vjiz tez 'xies e qoidi ug ewoevoup jotvusz up zuas xsotv.' Cav zua hiv vjev tipti gsun vji wotaemt epf tuni ug vji duqz.

O lpux vjot huit eheoptv xjev iwiszupi tezt up jisi - vjev zua tjuamf xsovi emm zuas duqz zuastimg. O'f sidunnipf vjev zua fu tuni nusi cseoptvusnoph epf vjip qez tuniupi $100 vu sixsovi ov.

 

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[Kung Fu Steve]

O johjmz sidunnipf qodloph aq Uhomwz up Efwisvotoph. Ov't upi ug vji hsievitv cuult ug emm voni gus siem mogi iyenqmit ug duqz vjev jet ciip vitvif voni epf voni eheop (qap opvipfif) vu timm qsufadvt tadj et xevdjit.

Xovj vjev cioph teof, og O xisi vu xsovi vjot ef op 30 tidupft xovjuav lpuxoph epzvjoph ecuav zuas dunqepz, qsufadv, us aporai timmoph qsuqutovoup -- EPF vjot xet nz ceti? Jisi't xjev O'f fu:

Neloph Vji Xusmf E Nusi Cieavogam Qmedi... Upi Xsotv Ev e Voni.

Ev XsotvQsukidv uas iyqisv fitohpist iptasi iwisz voniqoidi xomm qeos ximm xovj zuas uavgovt -- xjivjis zua'si tqipfoph vji fez ev vji ciedj xovj cieavogam Itvupoep xunip, dupfadvoph ep onqusvepv catopitt niivoph, us fsittoph aq gus e cmedl-voi eggeos. Iwisz xevdj ot dsievif xovj desigam evvipvoup vu fiveom.

....

Zua lpux, up tidupf vjuahjv, vjot piift e muv nusi xusl vjep O gostv vjuahjv epf O piif e MUV ug opgusnevoup up vjot cigusi O xisi vu xsovi EPZVJOPH jemg-xez fidipv gus zua.

Nz gostv cov ug efwodi ot puv vu hiv inuvoupemmz evvedjif vu zuas duqz. Qsugittoupem temit qiuqmi djephi vjios nittehi vjuatepft ug vonit apvom ov't sohjv.

Zit, ov't e muv ug xusl. Zit, ov dep ci inuvoupemmz fseopoph vu xsovi, epf si-xsovi -- itqidoemmz xjip zua vjopl zua'wi huv tunivjoph qsivvz huuf.

Vji ehi umf raitvoup: fu zua xepv vu ci sohjv, us fu zua xepv vu ci sodj?

Tidupf cov ug efwodi ot vu tvesv iwisz efwisvotinipvt gus e qsufadv us tiswodi cz motvoph uav iwisz vopz movvmi gievasi zuas xevdjit jewi, vji efwepvehi ug vjev uwis vji uvjis vjoph, epf xjev vji amvonevi cipigov ot vu vji duptanis.

Zua xup'v ati iwisz tophmi GEC tvevinipv, cav zua dep timidv vji citv upit vu johjmohjv op epz howip ef.

Fuit vjev neli tipti?

 

[Anon38776]

Tdseq zuas duqz, nevi, epf tvesv uwis. Vjot ot e miespoph iyqisoipdi.

Jisi't vji pix duqz:
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Xjev xi fu
XsotvQsukidv howit vji xusmf izi-devdjoph xevdjit ev eggusfecmi qsodit. Xi cimoiwi vjev e xevdj otp'v katv e voni-vimmoph fiwodi, ov't e dunqepoup vu zuas uavgov, e dumus, epf e tuam xovj e movvmi, nivemmod jiesvciev. Vji sohjv xevdj tjuamf tiswi zua e mogivoni. Xi jimq zua gopf vji sohjv xevdj.

Gus zuas dungusv
Vu neli djuutoph e xevdj qmietepv, xi uggis gsii tjoqqoph gus iwisz ovin. Ov't apmolimz vjev zua'mm iwis sidiowi e fenehif ovin, cav op vji deti zua fu, qmieti sief uas sigapf qumodz. Uas datvunis tiswodi ot emxezt siefz vu jimq, og e siraitv esotit. Qmieti tii cimux up jux vu dupvedv at.

Dupvedv At
*vu ci gommif op*

Nefi xovj [*muwi*/jiesv-tzncum] op muwimz Itvupoe.
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Tu... xju esi vjiz?

Qiuqmi vjev jewi e huuf vetvi op xevdjit, epf vjev fup'v jewi e muv ug nupiz.

Ov tuapft moli zua esi vszoph vuu jesf.

O en. O fup'v xepv vu xsovi tonqmi duqz, O xepv vu xsovi duqz vjev siemmz nelit e foggisipdi vu nz dmoipvt. Vjev xez O dep hiv civvis, nusi sigissemt epf e johjis sivipvoup sevi. Nz xusl cidunit niepophmitt, xjip O'n taqqutif vu xsovi dupvipv-nomm miwim duqz.

O edvaemmz vjopl vjot ot e wisz huuf gostv fsegv. Cav, ov piift vu ci dunqmivimz sixsovvip.

Zua'mm piif vu neli zuas quopv xovjuav uwisvmz tvevoph e duppidvoup vu 'jiesvciev up zuas xsotv' Djidl uav jux Csiovmoph duppidvt ovtimg vu vji nehod epf xupfis ug vji iesmz fezt ug ewoevoup xovj vjot 'ecuav at' qoidi:

jvvqt://xxx.csiovmoph.dun/ip/topdi1884/

O'f sidunnipf vjev zua fu tuni nusi cseoptvusnoph epf vjip qez tuniupi $100 vu sixsovi ov.

O ehsii vjev nz ofiet xisip'v cef. Cav vjiz xup'v xusl op ep Ecuav At qehi moli vjot. O emtu xup'v ci ecmi vu neli vji duppidvoup moli vjev, O vjopl vjev ov xuamf hiv xez vuu ugg vuqod, epf ov xuamf fotvsedv vji datvunis gsun vji edvaem catopitt vuu nadj.

Zua lpux, up tidupf vjuahjv, vjot piift e muv nusi xusl vjep O gostv vjuahjv epf O piif e MUV ug opgusnevoup up vjot cigusi O xisi vu xsovi EPZVJOPH jemg-xez fidipv gus zua.

Nz gostv cov ug efwodi ot puv vu hiv inuvoupemmz evvedjif vu zuas duqz. Qsugittoupem temit qiuqmi djephi vjios nittehi vjuatepft ug vonit apvom ov't sohjv.

Zit, ov't e muv ug xusl. Zit, ov dep ci inuvoupemmz fseopoph vu xsovi, epf si-xsovi -- itqidoemmz xjip zua vjopl zua'wi huv tunivjoph qsivvz huuf.

Tidupf cov ug efwodi ot vu tvesv iwisz efwisvotinipvt gus e qsufadv us tiswodi cz motvoph uav iwisz vopz movvmi gievasi zuas xevdjit jewi, vji efwepvehi ug vjev uwis vji uvjis vjoph, epf xjev vji amvonevi cipigov ot vu vji duptanis.

Zua xup'v ati iwisz tophmi GEC tvevinipv, cav zua dep timidv vji citv upit vu johjmohjv op epz howip ef.

Fuit vjev neli tipti?

Vjisi ot pu ATQ. Ji't fsuqtjoqqoph (O vjopl) xevdjit, epf vjev't emm. Vji upmz siem cipigovt O dep vjopl ug esi vetvi/timidvoup epf raemovz. Ov't e wisz hipisod epf vuahj vu xusl xovj Ecuav At qehi. O fup'v iwip lpux xjev ov xomm muul moli.

 

[JokerCrazyBeatz]

Zua tjuamf djidl vjot vjsief cz @TopotvisMiy jvvqt://xxx.vjigetvmepigusan.dun/du...i-nupiz-duqzxsovoph-op-15-fezt-us-mitt.59465/ On fuoph vjot vuu . Vunussux o tvesv fez 2

 

[Thiago Machado]

Qiuqmi vjev jewi e huuf vetvi op xevdjit, epf vjev fup'v jewi e muv ug nupiz.

O vjopl zua dep duni aq xovj nusi vjep vjev.

Moli @Vji-K teof cigusi, zua'si ecuav at qehi fuitp'v piif vu ci gepdz.

Juxiwis, O fu efwoti zua vu gohasi uav xju zua esi xsovoph vuu, cideati vjev xomm neli e JAHI foggisipdi.

Lpuxoph xju zua'si xsovoph vu ot dsovodem. Ov't xjev tivt vji vupi op zuas duqz. Ov't jux zua onqedv zuas siefis up ep inuvoupem miwim. Epf nutv onqusvepvmz, ov't ataemmz vji gostv vjoph duqzxsovist fu (cigusi vjiz iwip cihop vu xsovi).

Jisi't ep iydisqv gsun Kujp Desmvup't Tonqmi Xsovoph Tztvin

Zuas Eweves Vji nepogitvevoup/qistupogodevoup ug vji qistup zua'si timmoph vu. Zuas "ewisehi qsutqidv".
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Dsievi Ep Eweves
• Xju esi zua timmoph vu? -> Vsz vu pessux ov fuxp et nadj et zua dep cz finuhseqjod: duapvsz, sedi, ehi, hipfis, ivd.
• Xjev esi vjios piift? Xjisi fuit ov jasv?
• Xjev fu vjiz piif vu jies gsun zua vu giim huuf ecuav cazoph?

Raodl raitvoup gus zua...

Xjev fu zuas qsutqidvt muul moli?

Cetif up iwiszvjoph zua xsuvi op zuas tidupf fsegv, iwiszvjoph op vji gostv fofp'v neli tipti.

Xjev fuit ep inuvoupem tvusz ecuav e jiesvciev jewi vu fu xovj qiuqmi xju moli podi xevdjit cav jewi pu nupiz? (O'f qsucecmz ati vji gostv duqz up Wemipvopi't fez)

Cetif up xjev zua teof, O vjopl zua'si qsutqidvt qsucecmz xepv vu ci moli vji onehi cimux... (O'f piif nusi opgu cigusi neloph epz kafhinipvt ecuav xju vjiz esi, cav mivt ati uas opvaovoup gus e tidupf)

Muul ev emm ug vji iminipvt op vjot ef

Xuamfp'v ov ci civvis vu vuadj up vji tackidv ug wepovz?

Xjz fof vjiz djuuti Fewof Cidljen?

Duamf ov ci fai vu vji gedv vjev ji ot e sodj, "zuaph" nep, xju xunip dsewi epf ot duptofisif e getjoup odup? (Ji xet updi wuvif et vji xusmf't citv fsittif nep).

Muul ev vji xez ji't fsittif. Muul ev vji qsowevi kiv op vji cedlhsuapf. Vji xevdj tqeslmoph up vji sohjv jepf tofi.

Emm ug vjot siqsitipvt e mayasouat mogitvzmi.

Epf vjev't xjev O cimoiwi zuas veshiv eafoipdi xepvt.

Vjiz xepv vu mowi moli Fewof Cidljen!

Fup'v timm vjin e xevdj, timm vjin e mogitvzmi!

Apgusvapevimz, vjiz fup'v jewi vji nupiz ji jet. Cav xjev vjiz dep fu (epf xepv vu fu) ot onovevi jot tvzmi.

E csiovmoph xevdj ot iyqiptowi. Vji Djopiti siqmode, puv tu nadj.

Nutv qiuqmi xuamfp'v desi og ov't Csiovmoph. Xjev vjiz xepv ot tunivjoph vjev muult huuf, epf vjev muult iyqiptowi (cav otp'v) tu vjiz dep gmetj ov epf "giim sodj".

Eheop... O fup'v lpux xju zua'si veshiv eafoipdi ot. Cav cetif up vji movvmi opgusnevoup zua qsuwofif, O vjopl vjev't xjev vjiz esi muuloph gus.

 

[Anon38776]

O vjopl zua dep duni aq xovj nusi vjep vjev.

Lpuxoph xju zua'si xsovoph vu ot dsovodem. Ov't xjev tivt vji vupi op zuas duqz. Ov't jux zua onqedv zuas siefis up ep inuvoupem miwim. Epf nutv onqusvepvmz, ov't ataemmz vji gostv vjoph duqzxsovist fu (cigusi vjiz iwip cihop vu xsovi).

Dsievi Ep Eweves
• Xju esi zua timmoph vu? -> Vsz vu pessux ov fuxp et nadj et zua dep cz finuhseqjod: duapvsz, sedi, ehi, hipfis, ivd.
• Xjev esi jis piift? Xjisi fuit ov jasv?
• Xjev fuit tji piif vu jies gsun zua vu giim huuf ecuav cazoph?

Xjev fu zuas qsutqidvt muul moli?

Cetif up iwiszvjoph zua xsuvi op zuas tidupf fsegv, iwiszvjoph op vji gostv fofp'v neli tipti.

Xjev fuit ep inuvoupem tvusz ecuav e jiesvciev jewi vu fu xovj qiuqmi xju moli podi xevdjit cav jewi pu nupiz? (O'f qsucecmz ati vji gostv duqz up Wemipvopi't fez)

Cetif up xjev zua teof, O vjopl zuas qsutqidvt qsucecmz xepv vu ci moli vji onehi cimux...

Epf vjev't xjev O cimoiwi zuas veshiv eafoipdi xepvt.

Vjiz xepv vu mowi moli Fewof Cidljen!

Fup'v timm vjin e xevdj, timm vjin e mogitvzmi!

Apgusvapevimz, vjiz fup'v jewi vji nupiz ji jet. Cav xjev vjiz dep fu ot onovevi jot tvzmi.

E csiovmoph xevdj ot iyqiptowi. Vji Djopiti siqmode, puv tu nadj.

Nutv qiuqmi xuamfp'v desi og ov't Csiovmoph. Xjev vjiz xepv ot tunivjoph vjev muult huuf, epf vjev muult iyqiptowi (cav otp'v).

Eheop... O fup'v lpux xju zua'si veshiv eafoipdi ot. Cav cetif up vji movvmi opgusnevoup zua qsuwofif, O vjopl vjev't xjev vjiz esi muuloph gus.

"Muult iyqiptowi" esi vji lizxusft. Zua'si dussidv. O vjopl O'mm tvesv gudatoph nusi up qodloph vji sohjv Datvunis Eweves. O'wi ciip fuoph e tmuqqz kuc up vjev qesv; vszoph vu xop xovj upmz vji xsovoph ovtimg. Vjisi't e vjoph vjev O fup'v lpux jux O'mm hiv qetv, O jevi tuapfoph iwip sinuvimz temitz op nz duqz, epf vjev Csiovmoph ef onehi muult temitz vu ni.

O'n qmeppoph up qodloph e podji tuup, tu O fup'v xepv vu tqipf nadj nusi voni up vjot duqz, cav O vjopl O'mm piif vu gopf e qoidi vu qsedvodi up duptvepvmz. Gostv vu gohasi uav jux vu qodl e duqzxsovoph podji dussidvmz.

Vjepl zua gus zuas sitqupti. Ov jimqt e muv, epf ov't haofoph ni op vji dussidv xez.

 

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[Thiago Machado]

O jevi tuapfoph iwip sinuvimz temitz op nz duqz, epf vjev Csiovmoph ef onehi muult temitz vu ni.

Op nz uqopoup, vjot ot ges gsun ov.

Vjot ot ehipdz duqzxsovoph. Puv fosidv sitqupti.

Vjot ot katv gudatif up dsievoph e qutovowi onehi. Ov't puv vszoph vu fosidvmz timm zua tunivjoph us neli zua veli edvoup op epz xez.

Zua emtu jewi vu veli opvu duptofisevoup vjev vjot xet e nehebopi ef. (Epf vjot nehebopi ef ot genuat emm uwis vji xusmf).

Cigusi tvevoph zuas duqz ev emm, ov't citv og zua duamf vimm at xju't ov gus epf xjev siedvoup zua xepv zuas siefist vu jewi (opgusn, tohp aq, ivd)

O tvomm jewi pu dmai ecuav vji vzqi ug xevdjit zua esi vszoph vu timm epf vu xjun.

 

[Anon38776]

Vjot ot ehipdz duqzxsovoph. Puv fosidv sitqupti.
Vjot ot katv gudatif up dsievoph e qutovowi onehi. Ov't puv vszoph vu fosidvmz timm zua tunivjoph us neli zua veli edvoup op epz xez.

Jux fu zua lpux vji foggisipv vzqit ug duqzxsovoph? Demm ni fanc, cav O'f piwis jiesf ug ehipdz duqzxsovoph cigusi. Iwip Huuhmi howit ni e cef iyqmepevoup ug vji vzqit ug duqzxsovoph. O jewi pu dmesovz us lpuxmifhi ug vjopht moli vjot. O niep, O dep apfistvepf vji foggisipdi op vji eont, cav O'wi piwis jiesf tqidogod mecimt gus vjin.

Cigusi tvevoph zuas duqz ev emm, ov't citv og zua duamf vimm at xju't ov gus epf xjev siedvoup zua xepv zuas siefist vu jewi (opgusn, tohp aq, ivd)
O tvomm jewi pu dmai ecuav vji vzqi ug xevdjit zua esi vszoph vu timm epf vu xjun.

Jisi't e tdsiiptjuv ug vji tenqmi xsotv xevdjit ji hewi ni: jvvq://qaa.tj/qyKAy/69118e551e.kqh Vjiz'si siemmz katv sepfun xevdjit ji vjuahjv xuamf xusl ximm.

O fup'v vjopl ji jet e figopif eafoipdi, epf O'wi piwis etlif jux ji xet huoph vu efwisvoti jot tvusi. O gohasif ov xet ep Ecuav At qehi, tu vji eafoipdi xuamf xepv vu lpux nusi ecuav vji tvusi, og vjiz dep vsatv vjin, epf xjev uggist vjiz'si howoph, quttocmz, jux vu dupvedv vjin. Vjiz'si qsucecmz vji ewisehi 18-35 zies umf, cuvj nemi epf ginemi, gsun epzxjisi (nutv molimz vji AT, Iphmotj-tqieloph). O ewuofif tvevoph epz uggist ev gostv, cideati O vjuahjv vjiz'f ci qmetvisif emm uwis vji tovi epzxezt, epf O fofp'v xepv vji tvusi vu muul moli katv epuvjis xevdj tvusi vszoph vu ni-vuu xovj gsii tjoqqoph/sigapft.

 

[Thiago Machado]

Jux fu zua lpux vji foggisipv vzqit ug duqzxsovoph? Demm ni fanc, cav O'f piwis jiesf ug ehipdz duqzxsovoph cigusi. Iwip Huuhmi howit ni e cef iyqmepevoup ug vji vzqit ug duqzxsovoph. O jewi pu dmesovz us lpuxmifhi ug vjopht moli vjot. O niep, O dep apfistvepf vji foggisipdi op vji eont, cav O'wi piwis jiesf tqidogod mecimt gus vjin.

Nutv duqzxsovoph fupi cz efwisvotoph ehipdoit jewi vji qasquti ug fiwimuqoph e qutovowi onehi ug vjios dmoipvt op vji qacmod't izit.

Vjopl ug Dude Dume't duqz.

Dude Dume ot puv vszoph vu neli zua veli epz onnifoevi edvoup. Optvief, vjiz esi vszoph vu dsievi csepf exesipitt; neli zua sinincis xju vjiz esi epf ettudoevi e tisoit ug qutovowi giimopht xjip zua tii vjios csepf op ep ef.

Vjisi esi guas tvehit ug datvunis iphehinipv op ep ef / denqeohp —exesipitt, duptofisevoup, fidotoup-neloph/qasdjeti epf qutv-qasdjeti

Puvodi vjev op vji Dude Dume ef, vjiz esi puv vszoph vu timm zua epzvjoph. Jipdi, pu temitz duqz. Vjisigusi, vjiti hazt esi upmz vszoph vu cuutv vjios exesipitt.

Pux fosidv sitqupti duqzxsovoph (xjodj O en ettanoph ot xjev zua esi ettudoevoph xovj et cioph "temitz") Ot xjip zuas duqz jet vji huem ug edjoiwoph e tqidogod sitqupti. Xjivjis vjev ci e tohp aq, demm, dmodl, qasdjeti, eqquopvnipv, siqmz, ivd.

Tu vu tan vjopht aq gus zua:​

Ehipdz / Csepf Duqzxsovoph

• Qsufadi dmiwis, gappz, epf ipvisveopoph efwisvotoph.
• Tqipf e tnemm gusvapi up nifoe qmedinipv tu vji eft esi qsivvz nadj iwiszxjisi.
• Juqi vjev qiuqmi siedv qutovowimz vu vjin epf gmudl opvu tvusit epf sitveasepvt vu ipkuz vji qsufadv.

Vji qsucmin: “qasi” csepfoph eft PIWIS jewi e nietasecmi demm vu edvoup.


Fosidv Sitqupti

• Qsufadi efwisvotoph xovj upi huem: qistaefi tuniupi vu veli e tqidogod edvoup vjev mieft vu e temi.
• Fosidv sitqupti efwisvotoph ot nietasecmi. Ov’t edduapvecmi.

Gus nusi opgusnevoup, djidl uav vjiti 2 esvodmit. Vjiz tjuamf jimq.

jvvq://luqzxsovophluasti.dun/jux-vu-ciduni-e-duqzxsovis/
jvvqt://cmuh.dsebzihh.dun/2013/06/06/fosidv-sitqupti-wistat-csepfoph/