What do you think of this flyer I've come up with?

McCoyH · Aug 23, 2013

Thinking of using this for some promotional marketing for my own services...
Can I get some constructive criticism?

Mark Anthony Le · Aug 23, 2013

Personally hated it.

Came in, literally looked right over it.

I still haven't read it actually. I would suggest simplifying it. Less is more; sometimes.

100k · Aug 23, 2013

It's UGLYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY!

Sorry, but that is the truth.

Hire someone to do it on Fiverr / Search results for 'design couverture de livre'

You want to be able to know at a glance what it is that you are offering. I had to read every word before I understood. I thought it was a flyer for a construction company at first.

Use some well known brands... i.e Yahoo. Google. Bing etc.

Maybe a a growth chart...

and maybe a attractive professional looking lady to grab the attention and (a problem and a solution - i.e Tired of just getting by... Are You Ready Take Your Business to New Heights?) and finally a clear call to action! Call now for a quick informal chat! xxx-555-555

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zoomzoom · Aug 23, 2013

Yeah, sorry it needs work... It's msg is confusing and very sloppy looking.

Definitely not something that will convey trust to your prospect.

Create a new benefits driven headline put it on top rather than the bottom... Remove your business name from both sides, you only need your contact information on the bottom (think small) and create a graphic of a road, customers on one side, the business forefront on the other with boulders (or other obstacle) in between... Each boulder will be labeled as one of your "roadblocks" - then give the idea to one of the graphic artists at fiverr to make it slick and professional looking.

Maybe offer a very specific "door opener" service in the flyer as an introduction and reason to leave the flyer.

Mike.B · Aug 23, 2013

As a potential customer I wouldn't know what the hell you're offering! I need to see benefits, What's in it for me? Looking at the flyer, I have NO idea.

Vick · Aug 23, 2013

its confusing.

you need someone with graphic design knowledge.

simplicity goes far.

skylizard · Aug 23, 2013

I have to agree with what others have already said. It's not clear on what you are trying to sell. Although I like the idea of the roadblocks, it's just not presented in a clear manner.

Kencan98 · Aug 23, 2013

What you need is a blank white page with 3 things.

1. Here is what I have.
2. Here is what it will do for you.
3. Here is how to get it.

That's it.

McCoyH · Aug 23, 2013

Ah ha!
Thank you all for the constructive criticism!
I can tell you were all honest... Hahahaha

Thanks again!

critter · Aug 23, 2013

What are you going to do with it/where are you going to post it?

You need a specific offer with a deadline; something like '25% off new website for the first 10 clients'. It creates urgency and gets them to call sooner rather than later.

I agree with the others - it is too busy and the layout is confusing. Where you are going to be distributing makes a difference and may warrant a different layout than another.

zoomzoom · Aug 23, 2013

Kencan98 said:
What you need is a blank white page with 3 things.

1. Here is what I have.
2. Here is what it will do for you.
3. Here is how to get it.

That's it.

Spoken like a true Frank Kern student :welldone: and it's true, cut through all the extra noise and get to the point. A lot of people don't like Kern but I happen to love his simplistic approach.

stephanduq · Aug 23, 2013

You can not talk about traditional old ways, when you use a design that seems to have been made with word-art in the 90's

Get yourself a good designer, be trendy and get one that can create good "flat" designs. It is all the rage right now.

mentalic · Aug 24, 2013

The bold red letters at the bottom with the black border are hard to read
Get yourself a .com domain if possible
Put all contact info one bellow the other (as a business card)
Improve your headline (eg Wanna reach more customers?)
As I understand you provide what is in the middle, while Professional website and Social Reach are fine with me, Customer Service, Advertising Methods and Networking Methods are too vague. If you are like doing consulting, maybe change that to 'Customer service consulting' or "Business networking consulting'
Also don't make it difficult for you potential customers to read your brand name. Maybe you should place it normally.

Good luck with your venture.

XOthermic · Aug 30, 2013

Simple, simple, simple and then make it more simple.

Here is one I made for a client. They really liked it.

The-J · Aug 30, 2013

Read Ca$hvertising. Scrap this design. Start from scratch.

liquidglass · Aug 31, 2013

There's a lot of things that need editing, as others have mentioned. I would suggest throw out the color red that you're using. Red normally causes alarm, puts people on guard, and even induces hunger. I'm not an expert I've just read up on certain advertising techniques.

bonus tip: red only works well when combined with blue and white (thus why many flags use these three colors)

liquidglass · Aug 31, 2013

I'm feeling creative and it's my night to relax from a long and successful week so I wanted to share one idea I had, maybe it'll spark something for you. I'm sure it's not the best out there by a long shot, but if you use it, I expect my royalty check in the mail

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