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I just received my first review. It was positive, but had a couple of constructive criticism points. One will be answered already in the next book, the other left me with a puzzle. Now, it is only one review, so it's not enough to tell me to course correct, but I wanted to get some advice on it.
Here's the critique:
Another thing that bothered me was the p.o.v of the story. I would get lost and confused of which characters point of view I was reading.
Now, I have always read books that are third person and past tense. The popular book in this category seem to be dominated by first person, present tense. That was a challenge at first, but I'm used to it now. I only have a few chapters that aren't from the main characters POV, I never change POV within a chapter and I try to make it clear (without saying "Hey, this is Gavin's point of view!") by the first paragraph that it's someone else's POV. Unfortunately, the genre I have always read (Fantasy) is dominated with third person, so I have no experience with this. I have three options going forward and I was hoping to get some of you more experienced authors' input.
1. Keep doing it the way I am doing it, but try to be more clear, without being overt, about the POV change.
2. Keep first person POV with my main character, but when I switch to other characters, move to third person. This seems like it would make for a very disconcerting reading experience, but like I said, I have very little experience with first person books.
3. Switch to third person from now on. I obviously cannot do it for this series, but I can switch for all future ventures. This may cause false expectations for my readers though, so I'd probably need to create a different pen name.
Thoughts?
Here's the critique:
Another thing that bothered me was the p.o.v of the story. I would get lost and confused of which characters point of view I was reading.
Now, I have always read books that are third person and past tense. The popular book in this category seem to be dominated by first person, present tense. That was a challenge at first, but I'm used to it now. I only have a few chapters that aren't from the main characters POV, I never change POV within a chapter and I try to make it clear (without saying "Hey, this is Gavin's point of view!") by the first paragraph that it's someone else's POV. Unfortunately, the genre I have always read (Fantasy) is dominated with third person, so I have no experience with this. I have three options going forward and I was hoping to get some of you more experienced authors' input.
1. Keep doing it the way I am doing it, but try to be more clear, without being overt, about the POV change.
2. Keep first person POV with my main character, but when I switch to other characters, move to third person. This seems like it would make for a very disconcerting reading experience, but like I said, I have very little experience with first person books.
3. Switch to third person from now on. I obviously cannot do it for this series, but I can switch for all future ventures. This may cause false expectations for my readers though, so I'd probably need to create a different pen name.
Thoughts?
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