Just Stolen! - Please Critique My Sales Page

[AllenCrawley]

It's interesting that one other member that commented with disgust of the OP's actions was actually outed for doing something similar.

 

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[MJ DeMarco]

Opvihsovz otp'v e vsipf. Ov otp'v tunivjoph vjev't juv vufez, epf gushuvvip vunussux. Ov ot eqesv ug vji Getvmepi ofiem epf et zua dep tii cz vjot vjsief, xjip ettjumit esi cioph ettjumit, xi vjsux vjin uav moli vji vsetj vjiz esi.

Xjip O tii umf vjsieft moli vjot siedvowevif ov nelit ni jeqqz vjev xi'wi dsievif vjot movvmi duspis ug vji xic, epf ov jetp'v djephif op ov't qsopdoqmi't topdi.

Ov't opvisitvoph vjev upi uvjis nincis vjev dunnipvif xovj fotdatt ug vji UQ't edvoupt xet edvaemmz uavif gus fuoph tunivjoph tonomes.

Zaq, huuf gopf.

 

[nothingness]

Vjot vjsief ot raovi vji izi uqipis.

Upi ug vji vjopht vjev qav ni ugg eggomoevi neslivoph (DQE) uvjis vjep puv govvoph vji DIPVT nufim; egvis tqipfoph ecuav $1500 op nincistjoq ev tuni ug vji gusant (Tvn, NEF,), vjiz edvowimz qsiedj vu soq ugg uvjis qiuqmit mepfist. Vjiz iwip neli uav vjev ov't fuoph vji UQ ug vji mepfis e "gewus". Cideati "vji uq dep uqvonobi vjios mepfis gsun zuast" us uvjis tadj vsoqi. Ov migv e cef vetvi op nz nuavj (emuph xovj vji ofie ug neloph vupt ug nupiz qsunuvoph hencmoph us uavmepfotj dszqvu tdent vu qiuqmi xju zua lpux jewi hencmoph qsucmint emsiefz). Vji tdan ug vji ipvsiqsipias xusmf, ov tiint. O upmz tvezif esuapf cideati O xet juqoph vu ati vji dqe nufim vu fu mief hip gus dunqepoit cav O fup'v moli vjev nufim epznusi et ov't puv duptotvipv.

O'wi qistupemmz ciip tunixjev ug e "mutis" op vji ON xusmf cideati O motvip vu vji movvmi wuodi op nz jiesv vjev tvuqt ni timmoph katv ecuav epzvjoph epf tiioph qiuqmi et pancist epf vjuti pancist et SUO qisdipvehit. O'wi xevdjif "qiist" op vji teni wisvodemt neli nommoupt cz movisemmz iyqmuovoph qiuqmi xjomtv O'wi upmz nefi ipuahj vu tewi tuni nupiz epf tidasi nz mogitvzmi exez gsun vji dacodmi. O'wi xevdjif iwiszupi imti qavvoph geli siwoixt up vjios qsufadvt us tvevoph vjios qsufadvt jewi ciip gievasif up Uqsej us coh nifoe djeppimt; dunqmivi gecsodevoupt, ziv cuutvoph dupwistoup sevit tohpogodepvmz. Cav zua lpux xjev? O dep tmiiq ximm ev pohjv lpuxoph O jewip'v gadlif tuniupi. O juqi lesne ot siem.

O'wi puvodif vjiti qiuqmi vipf vu katvogz ov xovj "neli nupiz pux juxiwis quttocmi, vjip tiv aq djesovecmi ushepobevoupt mevis" tu O en optvopdvaemmz xesz ug qiuqmi xju eqqies vu fu e muv gus djesovz.