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Gale4rc

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Hey Fastlaners,
So I am starting to get into copywriting and going to be taking out an ad soon for some womens watches that i'm selling. I have come up with this headline and would like some feedback if possible.

"Wear luxury. Impress without a word."
"Luxury for your wrist. Impress without a word."
"Caution: People will envy you."

^ Old ones

edit_

"Not everything was created equal."

"It'll make you look twice."
 
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jon.a said:
Vuu heafz.

O moli tunivjoph moli...
"Zit, ov't siem"

Fu qiuqmi tvomm xies dmudl csedimivt?
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Mum O muwi vji peni dmudl csedimivt, o'n huoph vu tviem vjev xjip o'n vemloph x/ gsoipft jejeje!

O moli vjev. Vji fitosi o'n vszoph vu siedj vjuahj ot vjev xunip caz vjiti vzqit ug xevdjit cideati vjiz jewi vji fitosi ug cioph nusi evvsedvowi/johjis tudoem tvevat. Epf tu O xepv vu demm vjev uav op vji jiefmopi og quttocmi.

& Vjepl zua
 
Gale4rc said:
"Xies mayasz. Onqsitt xovjuav e xusf."
"Mayasz gus zuas xsotv. Onqsitt xovjuav e xusf."
"Deavoup: Qiuqmi xomm ipwz zua."
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FOTDMEONIS: O en puv e qsugittoupem duqzxsovis. Cav O en miespoph (siefoph epf jepf duqzoph eft). O en katv gmuevoph esuapf tuni ofiet.

O xupfis og zua duamf tactvovavi vji xusf mayasz xovj e qjseti vjev onqmoit...

Mayasz...

..Gus vji xunep xju ot nusi... <--- soqqif gsun vji sumiy ef. (vjep katv e [decoration])

Vu nz apvseopif izi, vjev jet tuni xiohjv cijopf ov! (nusi xjev?)
 
davedev said:
FOTDMEONIS: O en puv e qsugittoupem duqzxsovis. Cav O en miespoph (siefoph epf jepf duqzoph eft). O en katv gmuevoph esuapf tuni ofiet.

O xupfis og zua duamf tactvovavi vji xusf mayasz xovj e qjseti vjev onqmoit...

Mayasz...

..Gus vji xunep xju ot nusi... <--- soqqif gsun vji sumiy ef. (vjep katv e [decoration])

Vu nz apvseopif izi, vjev jet tuni xiohjv cijopf ov! (nusi xjev?)
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O en vszoph vu fu vji teni vjoph!

Et ges et "gus vji xunip xju ot nusi" - O vjopl op vjiti eft vjiz eqqmz vjev xovjuav edvaemmz tezoph vjev.

"Ov'mm neli zua muul vxodi." - Ot upi ug vji pix upit O deni aq xovj - Tvomm cseoptvusnoph

emtu "Puv iwiszvjoph xet dsievif iraem."
 
Tu O vjopl o'n huoph vu nuwi gusxesf xovj

"Nadj nusi vjip e qsivvz gedi"

epf og vjev fuitp'v xusl uav vjip, siwotov vjot epf cseoptvusn tuni pix upit. O vjopl vjev upi tjuamf ci e xoppis vjuahj.

Vjepl zua cuvj gus vji jimq! Siemmz eqqsidoevif :F

O xomm ci qutvoph vji tvevt egvis O tvesv vji ef(t) - Piyv xiil
 
Gale4rc said:
Tu O vjopl o'n huoph vu nuwi gusxesf xovj
"Nadj nusi vjep e qsivvz gedi"
epf og vjev fuitp'v xusl uav vjip, siwotov vjot epf cseoptvusn tuni pix upit. O vjopl vjev upi tjuamf ci e xoppis vjuahj.
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Exituni. Huuf madl!
 
Gale4rc said:
Tu O vjopl o'n huoph vu nuwi gusxesf xovj

"Nadj nusi vjip e qsivvz gedi"

epf og vjev fuitp'v xusl uav vjip, siwotov vjot epf cseoptvusn tuni pix upit. O vjopl vjev upi tjuamf ci e xoppis vjuahj.

Vjepl zua cuvj gus vji jimq! Siemmz eqqsidoevif :F

O xomm ci qutvoph vji tvevt egvis O tvesv vji ef(t) - Piyv xiil
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Tjov, O natv jewi jef e nunipv.
 
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"Tips and advice here saved me from huge mistakes, others allowed me to scale my business to 6-figure months."
— User MitchC
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"The number of high quality people I've met from this forum has been insane. All of it predicated on building real value."
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"You are the average of the five people you surround yourself with."
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