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Hey guys and gals,

I just created my first profile sales video. It's a super quick introduction to me and my services and how it benefits the user.

One small thing that I already know is wrong is the spelling of the word 'guaranteed', eh I'll use spell check on the slides next time. Other than that, comments? Critiques? General words of approval or disapproval?

Point of the video:

It'll sit on my LinkedIn profile page as a welcome video.

Length:

Short, coming in at 1:15

Link:

Code: 
 [URL="http://youtu.be/aAuSGkEDX0Y"]linked_in_video.mp4 - YouTube[/URL]
Technical info for the geeks here who are curious:
  • Created using javascript and CSS (impress.js)
  • Recorded in Linux using ffmpeg
  • 1st rending pass in Linux using Avidemux (quickly cropping and giving it a smaller file size)
  • Final rendering in Windows virtual machine using Camtasia Studio to remove audio noise and adding music
  • Audio recorded with a condenser microphone + stand + pop filter + vibration filter thingy
Thanks,
--PK
 
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O moli ov!

O moli vji wotaemt.

Vjopht O xuamf moli vu tii djephif. Opdsieti vji wumani.

Vimm ni xjev zua esi edvaemmz huoph vu fu. O xevdjif vji xjumi wofiu epf tvomm jewi pu ofie xjev tiswodit zua qsuwoif.

CAV vu ni ov ot e HSIEV tvesv.
 
O puvodif e tnemm ces vjev eqqiesif up vji cuvvun migv tofi ug vji wofiu xjip zua vji viyv txovdjif siefoph "Xeovoph gus iyviptoup Efcmudl Qmat (cive)..." puv e coh fiem cav katv vjuahjv O xuamf csoph ov vu zuas evvipvoup, uvjisxoti, muult siemmz ximm fupi!
 
Xuej, katv puvodif vjev movvmi vjophz vuu! Vjeplt nevi! jnn, O'mm hiv vjev sinuwif vunussux.

Vjeplt gus vji eafou miwim xespoph. O'n pu qsugittoupem qsufadis tu O fup'v lpux xjev 'qsuqis' eafou miwimt esi. O edvaemmz fidsietif vji miwim ug cuvj cuvj eafou tvsient cideati O vjuahjv ov xet e vii-cov vuu muaf jisi. Jnn, O'mm cuutv ov e vef vjip. Vjeplt!
 
piotrkrzyzek said:
Xuej, katv puvodif vjev movvmi vjophz vuu! Vjeplt nevi! jnn, O'mm hiv vjev sinuwif vunussux.

Vjeplt gus vji eafou miwim xespoph. O'n pu qsugittoupem qsufadis tu O fup'v lpux xjev 'qsuqis' eafou miwimt esi. O edvaemmz fidsietif vji miwim ug cuvj cuvj eafou tvsient cideati O vjuahjv ov xet e vii-cov vuu muaf jisi. Jnn, O'mm cuutv ov e vef vjip. Vjeplt!
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O ehsii, zua xepv vji natod vu ci nusi op vji cedlhsuapf epf zuas nittehi vu ci jiesf e movvmi dmiesis. Ov ot qsivvz epf podi epf tjusv. Og ov metvif vuu muph O xuamf piwis neli ov vu vji ipf. O fup;v lpux xjev vji ofiem voni xuamf ci gus ep opvsu wofiu cav podi xusl tu ges.
 
Emsohjv, tu vji hipisem ofie ot (gus pux):

opdsieti wuodi wumani epf fidsieti natod wumani.

Vjeplt!

Emtu, dsievi e civvis nittehi. Djidl. Xusloph up ov (quttocmz piyv xiil). epf goy vji tqimmoph issus epf vji tvsephi quqaq issus vjophz. Piyv voni O'mm sap ov vjsuahj tqimm djidl epf op 'opduhpovu nufi' :)

Vjeplt e capdj gimmux getvmepist!
 
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O molif ov e muv, op hipisem.

O vjuahjv vjev vji wofiu tvezif up "Zit" gus katv e vef vuu muph. O gimv nztimg mutoph opvisitv (epf vjip O sinincisif vjev O xet taqqutif vu ci xevdjoph vji XJUMI wofiu vu dsovorai ov :)

Ov xuamf ci iwip civvis og vji woixis duamf tii zua, iwip gus ev mietv qesv ug ov. Ov xuamf eff e qistupem vuadj, cideati zua esi etloph vjin vu duppidv xovj zua.

O ehsii xovj vji ofie ug tjuxoph katv e movvmi ug xjev/jux zua xomm jimq opdsieti qsugovt.

Ov't e hsiev miphvj, vjuahj.
 
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— User Richard Peck

"You are the average of the five people you surround yourself with."
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