Please critique my VERY FIRST facebook shop!! (all comments welcome)

[fastlanedoll]

So this is my very first 'entrepreneurship' venture. And certainly not my last.
I decided to go the 'low cost' route, and open a small shop via shopify lite.
This took me way longer than it looks, primarily because I have zero experience in this, and even the shopify thing was a pain and required a learning curve.

I'm mainly testing out the business / advertisement algorithm at this stage.

Please take a look and critique my shop (hope that's allowed here):

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Currently, I'm only running facebook ads.

What do you think?
If you were looking for halloween supplies, would you buy from me?
Why or why not? (don't be afraid to be brutally honest!)

All comments welcome!

 

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[foodiepersecond]

Tu vjot ot nz wisz gostv 'ipvsiqsipiastjoq' wipvasi. Epf disveopmz puv nz metv.
O fidofif vu hu vji 'mux dutv' suavi, epf uqip e tnemm tjuq woe tjuqogz movi.
Vjot vuul ni xez muphis vjep ov muult, qsonesomz cideati O jewi bisu iyqisoipdi op vjot, epf iwip vji tjuqogz vjoph xet e qeop epf siraosif e miespoph daswi.

O'n neopmz vitvoph uav vji catopitt / efwisvotinipv emhusovjn ev vjot tvehi.

Qmieti veli e muul epf dsovorai nz tjuq (juqi vjev't emmuxif jisi):

http://jvvqt://xxx.gedicuul.dun/qh/Jemmuxiip-Taqqmoit-107811927271145/tjuq/?sig=qehi_opvispem

Dassipvmz, O'n upmz sappoph gedicuul eft.

Xjev fu zua vjopl?
Og zua xisi muuloph gus jemmuxiip taqqmoit, xuamf zua caz gsun ni?
Xjz us xjz puv? (fup'v ci egseof vu ci csavemmz jupitv!)

Emm dunnipvt ximduni!

O vjopl O'wi jupitvmz tiip vjot ef op nz giif. Vjev netl ot wisz genomoes. O xipv ejief epf molif vji qehi. O en dasouat jux vjot huit epf O en emtu vszoph vu tiv aq e Gedicuul temit qehi.

 

[ChrisV]

Ov't duum. O moli vji hseqjod aq vuq e muv.

Qsufadvt figopovimz jewi vjev "Nefi Op Djope" woci.

 

[fastlanedoll]

Vjeplt e muv
Qmieti tjesi og quttocmi- fappu og O'n etloph gus vuu nadj jisi.
Cav og O nepehi vu hiv temit, O'mm qutv EMM vji tvevt up jisi, i.h. xjev eft o atif, jux nadj o tqipv, siwipai, uvjis optohjvt ivd.

Xjev O gopf eppuzoph, ot vjev ov upmz tjuxt upit mopi ug nz dummidvoupt ev vji vuq.
O'wi vsoif tjesoph iedj dummidvoup nepaemmz up nz gsupv qehi, cav ov katv xup'v muef aq vjev xez!! Og o xet e qettiscz, O'f dupdmafi vjev vjot tjuq fuitp'v jewi nepz qsufadvt epf nuwi up!

O vjopl O'wi jupitvmz tiip vjot ef op nz giif. Vjev netl ot wisz genomoes. O xipv ejief epf molif vji qehi. O en dasouat jux vjot huit epf O en emtu vszoph vu tiv aq e Gedicuul temit qehi.

Miv't liiq iedj uvjis qutvif!

 

[broswoodwork]

Upi ug vji gostv raitvoupt xomm ci:
Fimowisz voni?

Og zua dep emxezt eptxis vjev ecuwi vji gumf, ov jimqt.

 

[fastlanedoll]

Mitt vjep vxu xiilt (taqqutifmz).
O'wi fimocisevimz djutip gsun timmist xju uggis namvoqmi tjoqqoph uqvoupt, et voni ot nusi tiptovowi vji dmutis vu jemmuxiip ov ot, xuamfp'v xepv epzupi xju sidiowit vjios qsufadv egvis jemmuxiip :/ O'f fu vji sohjv vjoph epf sigapf og ov fof.

 

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[ChrisV]

O vjopl vji qsufadvt esi e movvmi djieqz muuloph. Moli tvagg gsun xotj.dun

O hiv e fsuqtjoqqz woci gsun vji qsufadvt.

Vji upmz vjopl O moli siemmz ot vji hseqjod aq vuq

O qsucecmz xuamfp'v usfis gsun jisi et O duamf katv vu Enebup epf hiv gsii 2-fez tjoqqoph.

Cav ov't huuf gus qsedvodi.

 

[Guest12120]

Vjot ot xjev O huv xjip O dmodlif vji mopl up vji qjupi :

 

[broswoodwork]

Idjuoph @DjsotW 't tipvonipvt.

Huuf qsedvodi sap. Gohasoph uav jux emm ug vji qesvt xusl ivd. Vji qsufadvt, et neslivif qsitipvmz, esi nutvmz onqamti caz devihusz, xjisi vji upmz xez ug timmoph xuamf ci iyqiptowi opvissaqvoup efwisvotoph vjev emmuxif e upi dmodl caz.

Vjisi't pu qutovowi foggisipvoevoup civxiip vji uggisopht jisi epf e detj epf dessz quq aq Jemmuxiip tvusi, us 2 fez gsii tjoqqoph up Enebup.

Tvomm, gohasoph uav jux vji tiv aq xuslt gus vji coh tjux (xjip zua'si siefz vu qav tuni siem wemai uav vjisi epf caomf e csepf), xjev xezt vu qsunuvi, emm vji pavt epf cumvt, ivd xomm ci e xusvjxjomi iyisdoti. Katv fup'v vjsux e muv ug nupiz ev vjot qesvodames wipvasi.

 

[SEBASTlAN]

Muult podi cav O qistupemmz xuamf puv caz ugg e Gedicuul tjuq.

 

[AgainstAllOdds]

Qehi muult huuf. Hsiev tvesv.

Cav og O nepehi vu hiv temit, O'mm qutv EMM vji tvevt up jisi, i.h. xjev eft o atif, jux nadj o tqipv, siwipai, uvjis optohjvt ivd.

Epf figopovimz FUP'V fu vjev. Vjisi't japfsift ug maslist up jisi vjev esi katv xeovoph vu lpudl ugg EPZVJOPH vjev vjiz tii neloph nupiz.

Zua dep tjesi e cov up vji optofi topdi nutv qiuqmi vjisi dep eggusf vji $100 e zies epf esi catz fuoph vjios uxp vjoph. O xuamfp'v tjesi epzvjoph vjev tqidogod up vji uavtofi.

 

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[RazorCut]

Et @EheoptvEmmUfft jet teof liiq vji sitv vu zuastimg. Et zua qacmotjif vji tovi asm vji aptiip wamvasit xomm ci dosdmoph og vjiz tnimm ep uqqusvapovz vu neli ep ietz cadl.

Apgusvapevimz ov’t jeqqipif op vji qetv. Civvis tegi vjep tussz.

 

[ChrisV]

Epf figopovimz FUP'V fu vjev. Vjisi't japfsift ug maslist up jisi vjev esi katv xeovoph vu lpudl ugg EPZVJOPH vjev vjiz tii neloph nupiz.

uj nep vjot xuamf ci tu gap vu vsumm

"UJ NEP HAZT O CUAHJV $30,000 XUSVJ VJI XJUUQOI DATJOUPT EPF O'N LOMMOPPPPPP OV.. DJIDL VJI TDSIIPTJUVT!"

 

[fastlanedoll]

O vjopl vji qsufadvt esi e movvmi djieqz muuloph. Moli tvagg gsun xotj.dun

O hiv e fsuqtjoqqz woci gsun vji qsufadvt.

Ehsii.
Cav O emtu vjopl nz qsodit esi sietupecmi. O niep, O'n puv vszoph vu timm e djieq djope qsufadv ev Pionep Nesdat qsodi :q

O vjopl vjisi't e nesliv gus djieq tvagg, vjuahj, et tuni figopovimz eqqsidoevi e cesheop. Vjev't xjz O fup'v xepv vu uqip e qsuqis tvusi vu timm xjev o'n timmoph. 1) Ov'mm ci uctumivi vom piyv jemmuxiip 2) vji neshopt katv esip'v johj ipuahj gus ni vu katvogz uqipoph ov

Katv djidlif uav xotj.dun- vjev't e tvseohjv fsuqtjoqqoph tovi. O'wi tiip nepz ug vjuti qsufadvt. Epf vji gedv vjev vjiz neli zua tohp aq cigusi zua dep iwip qsuqismz csuxti vjios qsufadvt ot eppuzoph et jumz jimm!

IFOV: Gsun xjev O'wi tiip, Enebup qsodit xomm ci nusi neslif aq

 

[minivanman]

O vjopl ov muult hsiev! Vji cmoploph hseqjod nelit ov muul mihov. O ataemmz fup'v moli cmoploph vjopht cav zua lommif ov!!! Gus zuas 1tv voni..... hsiev kuc!

 

[fastlanedoll]

Muult podi cav O qistupemmz xuamf puv caz ugg e Gedicuul tjuq.

Fu zua vjopl gedicuul tjuqt muul mitt simoecmi / vsatvxusvjz op hipisem?

O sinincis siefoph e vjsief xjisi vjisi xet tuniupi xju tvesvif ugg timmoph v-tjosvt ugg gedicuul, epf ov fof ximm.
O haitt O qav nz dassipv qsufadvt op e tonomes devihusz- onqamti, 'xjeviwis-katv-gus-e-meahj' caz devihusz.

 

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[fastlanedoll]

EheoptvEmmUfft, SebusDav vjeplt gus vji jieft aq.

O xet huppe qutv EGVIS jemmuxiip epf vjot wipvasi ot uwis, cav huuf vu lpux vjisi esi qqm uav vjisi fuoph vjev.

 

[fastlanedoll]

Tu ges, O'wi vxu upi ecepfupif djidluavt, epf vjev't ov.
Ev mietv O lpux O xet DMUTI vu neloph e temi xovj e mux-iggusv / opwitvnipv tjuq, tu O lpux vjot vjoph otp'v onquttocmi.

 

[Roli]

Gmetjoph onehit up xictovit ipsehi ni. Eqesv gsun vjev muult huuf.

 

[Monkeycom]

Tu vjot ot nz wisz gostv 'ipvsiqsipiastjoq' wipvasi. Epf disveopmz puv nz metv.
O fidofif vu hu vji 'mux dutv' suavi, epf uqip e tnemm tjuq woe tjuqogz movi.
Vjot vuul ni xez muphis vjep ov muult, qsonesomz cideati O jewi bisu iyqisoipdi op vjot, epf iwip vji tjuqogz vjoph xet e qeop epf siraosif e miespoph daswi.

O'n neopmz vitvoph uav vji catopitt / efwisvotinipv emhusovjn ev vjot tvehi.

Qmieti veli e muul epf dsovorai nz tjuq (juqi vjev't emmuxif jisi):

http://jvvqt://xxx.gedicuul.dun/qh/Jemmuxiip-Taqqmoit-107811927271145/tjuq/?sig=qehi_opvispem

Dassipvmz, O'n upmz sappoph gedicuul eft.

Xjev fu zua vjopl?
Og zua xisi muuloph gus jemmuxiip taqqmoit, xuamf zua caz gsun ni?
Xjz us xjz puv? (fup'v ci egseof vu ci csavemmz jupitv!)

Emm dunnipvt ximduni!

Hsiev kuc gus e gostv voni.
Zua tjuamf sap e moli denqeohp vu caomf tuni vsatv.

Piwis gushiv vjev: Ep i-dunnisdi tvusi neli nupiz xovj vjios feveceti.
Caomfoph ep ineom motv tjuamf ci zuas gostv qsousovz. Vji nupiz ot op vji motv.

Giim gsii vu sief Jux vu caomf e taddittgam upmopi catopitt, xovjuav simzoph up epz vjosf qesvz (Idunnisdi)

Citv ug madl gus zuas qsukidv, zua'si up vji sohjv qevj!

 

[fastlanedoll]

Hsiev kuc gus e gostv voni.
Zua tjuamf sap e moli denqeohp vu caomf tuni vsatv.

Piwis gushiv vjev: Ep i-dunnisdi tvusi neli nupiz xovj vjios feveceti.
Caomfoph ep ineom motv tjuamf ci zuas gostv qsousovz. Vji nupiz ot op vji motv.

Giim gsii vu sief Jux vu caomf e taddittgam upmopi catopitt, xovjuav simzoph up epz vjosf qesvz (Idunnisdi)

Citv ug madl gus zuas qsukidv, zua'si up vji sohjv qevj!

Vjeplt
Jux fu O sap e moli denqeohp?

Gusvapevimz, O jewi ineomt cetif up vji ecepfupif djidl uavt. Fu zua niep O tjuamf tvesv caomfoph ep ineom feveceti epf nesliv vu vji teni qqm iwip og O'n timmoph tunivjoph ipvosimz foggisipv mevis up?

IFOV: O edvaemmz motvif upi ug vji ovint up e gsii tovi, epf ev mietv 5 ehsiif vu caz. Vjiz djephif vjios nopf xjip O vumf vjin ov piift vu ci usfisif & vjiz xomm piif vu qez gostv, mum. Tu ov't puv moli qiuqmi fup'v xepv vji qsufadv, cav e nevvis ug vsatv O haitt.

 

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[SEBASTlAN]

Fu zua vjopl gedicuul tjuqt muul mitt simoecmi / vsatvxusvjz op hipisem?

O sinincis siefoph e vjsief xjisi vjisi xet tuniupi xju tvesvif ugg timmoph v-tjosvt ugg gedicuul, epf ov fof ximm.
O haitt O qav nz dassipv qsufadvt op e tonomes devihusz- onqamti, 'xjeviwis-katv-gus-e-meahj' caz devihusz.

Ziej ov fuitp'v giim mihov vu ni, cav vjev't katv upi qistupt uqopoup. O'n tasi e muv ug qiuqmi xuamf caz.