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Hello there,

I am very glad that've joined this forum and want to give you a look on my penny stock related project: http://www.bestpennystocks2017.com/

What do you think of the design? Is the layout good? We are targeting the global market so please do not judge strictly on written english. Does the website call you to actions?
 

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First 30 second impression:
Generic domain
Generic headline
Generic images
Generic design
Lost me at the mention of "guru"
Who are you and why should I care?
Generic link inserted way too often
"getting rid of financial pressure" - What kind of talk is that? GIMME THE MONEY

It seems like you're going for the "average income, average young man stumbled upon a secret"-angle. IMO if you choose to go that route, you need to make it more relatable. Dangle the money carrot in front of them. This is what my life was like, I couldn't even buy a F*cking McDonalds, then one day after my obese GF left me, I KNEW!! DEEP DOWN that things needed to change. TO FULFILL MY FANTASIES I NEED MONEEEEEEY. So I started searching the web.... and so on
 

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hi

i will tell you what i think : i left in 5 seconds

why ? your headline is too general and vague


i prefer reading specific headline like " do this and win 200 bucks within 2 weeks "

rather than headline like yours:

" 7 Sound Reasons Why the Penny Stock Market Is the Best Investment in 2017 "

this is too vague

i want money now ! not in 30 years

not somewhere in the future when i am old or dead or after world war 3

so you have to appeal to people best interest in the short term



 
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Does the market demand another "get rich by investing in XYZ" website?
 

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Are you sure you're actually here for advice...

Or are you assuming this forum is full of people "trying to get rich, but never will" and you're just trying to plug your website...

Hmmm
 

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Or are you assuming this forum is full of people "trying to get rich, but never will" and you're just trying to plug your website...
I gotta say, whenever I see a URL in the first few posts from a new member, I just assume they are trying to get away with something like this.

Obviously it's not always the case (and at least here they are asking for feedback, so I'm happy to give the benefit of doubt) but it does always set off a red flag in my mind.

That being said, I agree with the others - the website looks generic and slapped together. It doesn't even look like it was designed using a modern blog platform - even the contact page is just an email address that isn't even clickable! I learned the "mailto" html code back in 6th grade! And that's ignoring the fact that the whole thing should be a form with submit button, not an email address in the first place.

(And the email is a bloody gmail account! Gmail! REALLY?!?!?)
 

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(And the email is a bloody gmail account! Gmail! REALLY?!?!?)
Yeah I'm with @JAJT on this one. Never use a personal email. You lose credibility this way. Change your email to a business one asap.

Secondly, you need a logo. Get creative. I also got vexed with the "click here" link scattered though the page. It's redundant. The website itself is stale. Typical and unoriginal, in my opinion.

The fake photos of cars and the mansion screams BS to me. If you're credible, post a pic from your Instagram of your real lambos and house. Social proof.
 
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So your website will be useless in 2018?
no, later we will use more generic name such as pennystocks dot something
 

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hi

i will tell you what i think : i left in 5 seconds

why ? your headline is too general and vague


i prefer reading specific headline like " do this and win 200 bucks within 2 weeks "

rather than headline like yours:

" 7 Sound Reasons Why the Penny Stock Market Is the Best Investment in 2017 "

this is too vague

i want money now ! not in 30 years

not somewhere in the future when i am old or dead or after world war 3

so you have to appeal to people best interest in the short term


Thanks a lot! What a useful input!
 

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Thanks a lot! What a useful input!
you are welcome

you want honest feedback and i try to do that for you

by the way, the headline is very important

legendary copywriter Ted Nicholas says that he writes up to 250 headlines for a sales letter before choosing the good one !!

and the guy has been writing sales letters for 50 years...
 

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My guess is this is a spammer -- he's not legitimately looking for feedback, but looking for "marks" for his program.

The jury is in session to determine potential deletion...
 

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The liquidity is low and so is the leverage. You simply buy shares on their way up and sell them on their down.
Wait what? How the hell do you simply sell shares if the liquidity is low? Some stocks on the pink sheets have zero transactions a day.

The only ones that have any significant liquidity are the ones that people like Jordan Belfort (Wolf of Wall Street) are pumping and dumping.

My guess is this is a spammer -- he's not legitimately looking for feedback, but looking for "marks" for his program.

The jury is in session to determine potential deletion...
Elon Musk would certainly leave the forum if he saw this thread.
 

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He's been here nearly 3 years, made 2 threads about his businesses (I'm assuming the first one failed due to it being a dead URL) and has made 0 contribution to anyone else's threads.

It's a real shame some people don't see the value in this community. If you stuck around and actually read and contributed to what's going on here then you could actually be successful.
 

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Nobody buys from a webpage like this without coming from a sales video on youtube or something. If you are serious, start making videos
 

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I think that good copywriting explains a complex product in simple ways, and vice versa. With long copy and tangents I don't see that happening here. Also your reverse psychology headline on this thread is horrible... it's an insult to peoples' intelligence. I read the whole page, but to be honest I personally shy away from any "investment products" if they are sold with traditional copy... it's just .. fishy. Wish you the best of luck on your venture though, and I hope you succeed - anyways welcome!
 

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