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All,
I've been reading like a fiend to learn both about my target industries and to gain awareness about the copywriting process. I was never illusioned that copywriting would be an easy pursuit, and I am still humbled by the difficulty of the art.
What I've attached is my first attempt at some practice copy. I am very interested in the evolution of the virtual reality industry, and its specific potential to transform healthcare and education. I would be gracious if people more knowledgeable in copy would rip it in half and provide some critique so I can understand where I'm weak.
The scenario: This ad is intended to communicate to med school educators that virtual reality can drastically improve their ability to teach surgical competencies.
Thanks in advance to anyone who takes the time to review / provide feedback.
- Cheers
I've been reading like a fiend to learn both about my target industries and to gain awareness about the copywriting process. I was never illusioned that copywriting would be an easy pursuit, and I am still humbled by the difficulty of the art.
What I've attached is my first attempt at some practice copy. I am very interested in the evolution of the virtual reality industry, and its specific potential to transform healthcare and education. I would be gracious if people more knowledgeable in copy would rip it in half and provide some critique so I can understand where I'm weak.
The scenario: This ad is intended to communicate to med school educators that virtual reality can drastically improve their ability to teach surgical competencies.
Thanks in advance to anyone who takes the time to review / provide feedback.
- Cheers
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