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Great to get feedback on this idea

Anything considered a "hustle" and not necessarily a CENTS-based Fastlane

nigel21

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Hi all,
I'll start by saying I'm a newly "woken" guy from the small islands of the Seychelles. I'm in my late thirties and have recently discovered the Fastlane while all the time I was brain numb and zombieing in the slowlane. I have been living in my comfort zone for as long as I can remember mainly because I'm getting a 'decent' salary.
I have started working on an idea that I've had for quite a long time now. It would be great if I could get a few feedbacks on my landing page just to see if it is understandable of what I'm offering. I know this is not what's going to take me off the Slowlane but I do believe it's a definitive start as before I would always procrastinate on any idea I get.
vacationconnects.com
Thanks in advance for any input.

Heads up: I'm really a newbie in web design in fact using WordPress just to get this off the ground though, also getting a few obstacle as to what I want to offer in terms of features on the website.
 
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Looks well designed but I think you need to tweak your main headline and offer. You have 3 seconds to tell the visitor what you do. I was unable to do that.
 

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@nigel21 Take this line on your website and put it above the fold. Which is where you currently have what appears to be your logo and tagline.

"Vacation Connects brings to visitors, a genuine chance to meet locals that is [are?] ready and willing to share common interests."

With that, you have a value proposition which a visitor can easily understand immediately they arrive on your home page.
 

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Looks well designed but I think you need to tweak your main headline and offer. You have 3 seconds to tell the visitor what you do. I was unable to do that.
Great point... thanks, means a lot coming from the men himself.
 
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