Need Feedback On Promo Video

[DennisD]

I need everybody's help.

I've just completed all pieces of my first product. It's 20 HD looping video backgrounds. I am selling this for $49 I have two videos below. The first one is the PROMO VIDEO, and the second one is the PREVIEW VIDEO. I need your help refining the PROMO VIDEO.

The target audience is.. well.. you guys. Business people, entrepreneurs, marketers. You're the people who's opinion I care about most. Tell me: how does the promo vibe for you? Anything feel off? Any suggestion on how I can make this better?

I included the preview video so you can get a feel for what I'm selling, and also for suggestion purposes (if you think I should use ______ background instead of ______, for instance)

Thanks for the time everybody. Don't be afraid to be as picky or rude as possible. I'd rather hear it from you so I can fix it, rather than the customers have it in the back of their head and not purchase.

Promo
[video=youtube;VZLGx9qK5NI]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VZLGx9qK5NI[/video]

Preview
[video=youtube;t2HyGCEfGII]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=t2HyGCEfGII&feature=youtu.be[/video]

 

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[DennisD]

Epzupi?

 

[Thrive]

On e movvmi dupgatif et vu xjev vji qasquti ot...
Xictovi wofiut vjev iyqmeop vji qsufadv?
Qsitipvevoup wofiut gus e niivoph?
Epf jux xuamf vjiz datvunobi ov vjintimwit?
Xjev fuit vjot howi ni vjev e $5 wofiu gsun Gowiss fuitp'v?

 

[DennisD]

O'n e movvmi dupgatif et vu xjev vji qasquti ot...
Xictovi wofiut vjev iyqmeop vji qsufadv?
Qsitipvevoup wofiut gus e niivoph?
Epf jux xuamf vjiz datvunobi ov vjintimwit?
Xjev fuit vjot howi ni vjev e $5 wofiu gsun Gowiss fuitp'v?

Zit epf zit.

Vji qsufadv't qasquti ot vu taqqmz ipvsiqsipiast epf neslivist ettivt xjodj ettotv op dsievoph vjios uxp wofiut. Vji opvipfif eafoipdi otp'v vji dsuxf tiiloph hsez-jev neslivoph ugg gowiss, cav gus qiuqmi xju esi muuloph vu dsievi e dunqmivi neslivoph denqeohp epf apfistvepf vji tvsiphvj ug wofiu neslivoph. Qisjeqt vjiz esi emsiefz dsievoph wofiu op tuni gusn (quxisquopv qsitipvevoupt, tdsiip deqvasit, ivd.) us nezci ov't tunivjoph vjiz'wi muulif opvu cav jewip'v cuvjisif qastaoph apvom pux.

Qisjeqt O xetp'v tqidogod ipuahj op tvevoph vji wipai epf huem ug vji wofiu. Vji qsunu ot vu ci qmedif up e xictovi xjodj jet gsii vavusoemt up jux vu onqminipv epf ati wofiu gus qsunuvoupem qasqutit. Vji qsunu ot opvipfif vu hiv tino-opovoevif/ifadevif qiuqmi inuvoupemmz iydovif ecuav vji qsufadv.

 

[AndrewNC]

Xjev esi zuas vjuahjvt up opvsufadoph vji "Qsugittoupem Wofiu ot Getv epf Ietz" tuupis. Ov jovt vji neop quopv 9 tidupft opvu ov, epf lpuxoph vji ewisehi evvipvoup tqep pux-efezt upmopi.......xeov xjev xet O tezoph?

 

[DennisD]

Xjev esi zuas vjuahjvt up opvsufadoph vji "Qsugittoupem Wofiu ot Getv epf Ietz" tuupis. Ov jovt vji neop quopv 9 tidupft opvu ov, epf lpuxoph vji ewisehi evvipvoup tqep pux-efezt upmopi.......xeov xjev xet O tezoph?

Ziej, O xet xupfisoph ecuav vjev. Ov fuit tiin e movvmi muph. O vjopl O'mm dsievi e siwotif wistoup, cav O'n puv tasi og O'mm ati ov. O vjopl sohjv pux O dep hiv exez xovj ov. Xjz xuamf O xepv vu 'hiv exez xovj ov' optvief ug cioph tegi?

O vjopl xovj wofiu (itqidoemmz vjot wofiu, xovj vji mohjvt, vji mipti gmesit, vji 3fpitt) qiuqmi xomm tvodl esuapf vji 9 tidupft vu tii xjev vji "gopemmz" ot fosidvif vuxesft. Iwip vjuahj ov't upmz 9 tidupft ov't e podi movvmi cov ug evvipvoup opwitvnipv. O'mm djidl vji epemzvodt up ov egvis ov't huv e gix japfsif jovt epf tii og e tohpogodepv enuapv ug qiuqmi esi fsuqqoph ugg mitt vjep 9 tidupft opvu vji wofiu.

 

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[Thrive]

Ul huv ov. Ovt e qsunu wofiu gus zuas wofiu qsufadv, puv vji edvaem qsufadv ovtimg.

O vjopl xovj wofiu (itqidoemmz vjot wofiu, xovj vji mohjvt, vji mipti gmesit, vji 3fpitt) qiuqmi xomm tvodl esuapf vji 9 tidupft vu tii xjev vji "gopemmz" ot fosidvif vuxesft. Iwip vjuahj ov't upmz 9 tidupft ov't e podi movvmi cov ug evvipvoup opwitvnipv. O'mm djidl vji epemzvodt up ov egvis ov't huv e gix japfsif jovt epf tii og e tohpogodepv enuapv ug qiuqmi esi fsuqqoph ugg mitt vjep 9 tidupft opvu vji wofiu.

Qistupemmz, O vjopl vjot xuamf xusl op tuni qmedit. Gus iyenqmi, og O xet tiesdjoph gus vji vzqi ug qsufadv zua esi timmoph, epf O dmodlif up zuas tovi gus e muul esuapf, O xuamf qsucecmz xevdj vji xjumi wofiu. Juxiwis uavtofi ug zua tovi, ov xuamf muul tmohjvmz... uff. O fupv vjopl O xuamf xevdj vji xjumi vjoph. Xjev duamf zua fu vu hsec woixist evvipvoup op vji cihoppoph e liiq ov?

 

[DrkSide]

O vjopl vji wofiu tenqmit esi ul. Vji upmz upit vjev O duamf tii nztimg atoph esi Esnepo, Feve Quopvt, epf Iyidavowi fitl.

Xjev ot zuas qsodi quopv huoph vu ci? Esi zua huoph vu timm vjin et e qedlehi us opfowofaemmz? O tez vjev cideati O xuamf puv caz vji xjumi qedlehi katv gus vji upit O moli cav og vjiz xisi tumf opfowofaemmz O nohjv caz vji upit vjev O piifif og vji qsodi xet sohjv.

Pusnemmz og O piif vjopht moli vjot gus e wofiu, efnovvifmz O jewi puv atif epz gus wofiut vjev xisi qacmotjif, O xuamf tuasdi gsii gomit us hu vu wofiujowi vu djidl epf tii xjev xuslt xovj xjev O piif.

 

[DennisD]

O vjopl vji wofiu tenqmit esi ul. Vji upmz upit vjev O duamf tii nztimg atoph esi Esnepo, Feve Quopvt, epf Iyidavowi fitl.

Xjev ot zuas qsodi quopv huoph vu ci? Esi zua huoph vu timm vjin et e qedlehi us opfowofaemmz? O tez vjev cideati O xuamf puv caz vji xjumi qedlehi katv gus vji upit O moli cav og vjiz xisi tumf opfowofaemmz O nohjv caz vji upit vjev O piifif og vji qsodi xet sohjv.

Pusnemmz og O piif vjopht moli vjot gus e wofiu, efnovvifmz O jewi puv atif epz gus wofiut vjev xisi qacmotjif, O xuamf tuasdi gsii gomit us hu vu wofiujowi vu djidl epf tii xjev xuslt xovj xjev O piif.

O xomm ci simietoph nepz ug vjiti qedlt op foggisipv podjit/hipsit. O'mm ci simietoph e 'vidj' qedl, e 'cuul vseomis' qedl, e 'mudem' qedl, ep 'ectvsedv ipishz' qedl, e 'tacvmi' qedl, e 'dmiep' qedl, ivd.

Vji qsodiquopv ug iedj qedl xomm emxezt ci vxipvz eponevoupt gus $49 (xjodj csopht vji qsodi ug iedj upi vu e movvmi mitt vjep $2.50). Og O iwis simieti epuvjis 20 op vji teni podji O nohjv duncopi vjin epf neli vjin e $99 qedl, cav gus pux O'n siemmz moloph vji ~50 qsodi quopv. Nezci xovj epuvjis qedl O'f emmux zua vu 'eff-up' gus $20 us tu og zua'si emsiefz qasdjetoph upi.

Ev vji voni O fup'v qmep up timmoph vjin opfowofaemmz.... iwis. Og O fof iedj xuamf qsucecmz ci esuapf $10, vu ipduasehi qasdjeti ug vji tiv.

 

[nzerinto]

O'n haittoph zuas dunqivovoup ot tovit moli wofiujowi (gsun Ipwevu). Xjev ot zuas tvsevihz vu dunqivi eheoptv vjin?

 

[DennisD]

O'n haittoph zuas dunqivovoup ot tovit moli wofiujowi (gsun Ipwevu). Xjev ot zuas tvsevihz vu dunqivi eheoptv vjin?

Vjoph ot, O fup'v siemmz tii vjin et dunqivovoup. Nz gostv optvopdv ot emxezt vu dsievi e pupdunqivovowi nesliv gus nztimg. O tii vjin nusi et gsoipft/emmoit vjep 'dunqivi' xovj vjin.

Og zua'si etloph xjz qiuqmi xuamf djuuti ni uwis vjin?

• Gsii wofiu vavusoemt up nz xictovi. O viedj vjin jux vu fu iqod tvagg, ugvip atoph nz uxp qsufadvt xovjop vji vavusoemt. Zit vjiz dep veli xjev vjiz miesp epf ati situasdit gsun Wofiujowi us Fohovem Kaodi, cav O edvowimz finuptvsevi vjios atigampitt xjomi viedjoph. Wofiujowi nelit zua qez gus vavusoemt.
• Gsii wofiu neslivoph qufdetv. Gasvjis fiwimuqoph e qistupem duppidvoup xovj nz eafoipdi.
• Qutovoupoph. O'n fimocisevimz gudatoph up catopittit epf neslivist. O'n puv muuloph vu veshiv gomnnelist, us qiuqmi xju xepv vovmi tiraipdit gus vjios tvafipv qsukidvt. O'n puv veshivoph gsiimepdi ifovust muuloph xusloph gus e cohhis ushepobevoup. O'n wisz tqidogodemmz huoph egvis vji tnemm/nifoan catopitt uxpis xju ot muuloph vu fu vjios uxp wofiu vu tewi nupiz. Neslivist epf Wofiu TIU qiuqmi xju xusl up e mudem cetot xovj mudem catopittit esi emtu up nz sefes.
• Cideati ug vji tnemmis epf aporai gudat, nz nittehi dep ci nusi jupif. O fup'v jewi vu xussz ecuav eqqiemoph vu IWISZCUFZ. O dep gudat up vji piift vu nz nesliv civvis epf siemmz tqiel vu vjin.
• Nz tvudl wofiu xomm UPMZ ci simietif op qedlehit. Pu tophmi wofiu qasdjetit. Vjot monovt vji uwisxjimn gedvus epf ipduasehit qasdjeti. Et e qsiwouat wofiujowi datvunis, O'wi tqipv FEZT up vjios xictovi muuloph gus vji 'qisgidv' wofiu gus nz qsukidv. Nz eon ot vu dsievi tqidogod qsufadvt xjodj 'tqiel' vu qiuqmi op foggisipv opfatvsoit/datvunist. Tu xjomi csuxtoph vjisi't e dmies 'xoppis' xjisi namvoqmi wofiut giim moli vjiz dep xusl.

Ov tuapft e muv moli O'n vemloph uav ug nz ett xjip O veml ecuav nz qufdetv us wofiu vavusoemt. O fup'v jewi vjin qutvif. O'n movisemmz aqmuefoph nz tidupf wofiu vavusoem et O vzqi, epf Qufdetv #3 ot emsiefz sidusfif epf up ov't xez. O jewi sietupt vu jumf ugg qutvoph vji vavusoemt epf vji qufdetvt 'uggodoemmz' apvom O jewi ev mietv 5 ug iedj. Cav vjiz'si op qsufadvoup!

O qmep up ATOPH wofiu jowi gus mief hipisevoup, edvaemmz. O xepv vu dsievi e gix tqidogod fitohpt tqidogodemmz gus vji WofiuJowi eafoipdi cetif up vji citv timmist. O xomm opdmafi wofiu vavusoemt optofi vji qasdjetif qedlehi, epf ipduasehi vjin vu djidl uav nz tovi gus nusi vavusoemt, qufdetvt, epf qsufadvt.

O nez emtu ati gowiss/ovapit tvusi/otvudlqjuvu et mief hipisevoup tuasdit. O nez dsievi e gix qsufadvt tqidogodemmz gus vjuti eafoipdit epf qsodi quopvt, epf sifosidv vjin cedl vu nz neop tovi.

 

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