Need advices.

[devine]

Hello guys, we're currently relocating our business and the problem is - neither of us is a native English speaker.
The substance of our business is minimization of expenses and dramatic improvement of efficiency.
The current HCP for our slogan is "Skyrocket Efficiency. Minimize Expenses." - how would you rephrase it to improve it?

 

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[jon.a]

Cut Your Cost

 

[ZMan26]

Hello guys, we're currently relocating our business and the problem is - neither of us is a native English speaker.
The substance of our business is minimization of expenses and dramatic improvement of efficiency.
The current HCP for our slogan is "Skyrocket Efficiency. Minimize Expenses." - how would you rephrase it to improve it?

Im not a native English speaker but I love your slogan, its simple to understand and to the point.

 

[devine]

Cut Your Cost

Just perfect. Do you mind one more question?
Do you think that Efficiency part is weak to put emphasis on?

Thank you again.

 

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