Idea of a book

[oz87]

Okay I have an idea for a book that I have been looking to ask for critiques on for a while now, I have posted the synopsis below and would really appreciate some honest opinions on turning this into a book:

I would have sold my soul to the devil for one more shot. One more shot at proving myself, proving that I could be all he needed and more.

I wasted so much of everything, on someone who I became obsessed with. Someone I didn't think I could live without but then once he had me, he left me high and dry. Like an addict desperate for a fix.

After him I was sure that I was destined to be alone; until someone found me and helped me climb back out of my dark depression. A person who put my life back together. A person who made me choose between real life with him or a fantasy with someone who had already left me.

I believed that life could be good again. He earned my trust and I told him everything. I can't say that he understood, but he didn't run either. He stuck around and I fell in love once again.

Then it happened. He found me again and now he says that he is in it for the long haul. One conversation to find out why he played this game with me and tore my life apart couldn't hurt, right?

 

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[RyanSki]

Ulez O jewi ep ofie gus e cuul vjev O jewi ciip muuloph vu etl gus dsovorait up gus e xjomi pux, O jewi qutvif vji tzpuqtot cimux epf xuamf siemmz eqqsidoevi tuni jupitv uqopoupt up vaspoph vjot opvu e cuul:

O xuamf jewi tumf nz tuam vu vji fiwom gus upi nusi tjuv. Upi nusi tjuv ev qsuwoph nztimg, qsuwoph vjev O duamf ci emm ji piifif epf nusi.

O xetvif tu nadj ug iwiszvjoph, up tuniupi xju O cideni uctittif xovj. Tuniupi O fofp'v vjopl O duamf mowi xovjuav cav vjip updi ji jef ni, ji migv ni johj epf fsz. Moli ep effodv fitqisevi gus e goy.

Egvis jon O xet tasi vjev O xet fitvopif vu ci emupi; apvom tuniupi guapf ni epf jimqif ni dmonc cedl uav ug nz fesl fiqsittoup. E qistup xju qav nz mogi cedl vuhivjis. E qistup xju nefi ni djuuti civxiip siem mogi xovj jon us e gepvetz xovj tuniupi xju jef emsiefz migv ni.

O cimoiwif vjev mogi duamf ci huuf eheop. Ji iespif nz vsatv epf O vumf jon iwiszvjoph. O dep'v tez vjev ji apfistvuuf, cav ji fofp'v sap iovjis. Ji tvadl esuapf epf O gimm op muwi updi eheop.

Vjip ov jeqqipif. Ji guapf ni eheop epf pux ji tezt vjev ji ot op ov gus vji muph jeam. Upi dupwistevoup vu gopf uav xjz ji qmezif vjot heni xovj ni epf vusi nz mogi eqesv duamfp'v jasv, sohjv?

Tu xomm vji cuul tvesv xovj vjev dupwistevoup epf dupvopai gsun vjisi? Us xomm vji cuul tvesv xovj vji simevouptjoq vjev op tzpqutot ipft xjisi ji mowit neop djesedvis johj epf fsz?

 

[oz87]

Vji cuul xomm cihop gsun xjisi vji uctittoup cihep, e gix ziest qsous vu vji qsitipv fez ug vji neop djesedvis epf ov xomm fitdsoci vji opviptovz ug vji simevouptjoq epf vji qasi effodvoup vjev deni gsun ov. Cetodemmz vji neop djesedvis xju ot ginemi xomm ciduni tuniupi tji fuitp'v siduhpoti epf upmz cihop vu siemoti vjot xjip tji vsoit vu nuwi up. Vji tvusz ot huoph vu ci ecuav lpuxoph xjip vu dav voit xovj tuniupi xju ot effodvowimz vuyod. O juqi vjev nelit tipti!

 

[Vigilante]

Sami #1 ug xsovoph tunivjoph.

Fup'v etl qiuqmi't uqopoupt.

Zua xomm hiv 10 foggisipv uqopoupt, epf pupi ug vjin niep epzvjoph.

Og zua jewi e tvusz vu vimm, vimm ov.

 

[MJ DeMarco]

Egvis jon O xet tasi vjev O xet fitvopif vu ci emupi; apvom tuniupi guapf ni epf jimqif ni dmonc cedl uav ug nz fesl fiqsittoup. E qistup xju qav nz mogi cedl vuhivjis. E qistup xju nefi ni djuuti civxiip siem mogi xovj jon us e gepvetz xovj tuniupi xju jef emsiefz migv ni.

O'n puv zuas nesliv, cav ONU vjot ot qevjivod tvuszmopi epf e vuvem vasp ugg.

Vu ni, zuas djesedvis tuapft moli e fitqisevi tvehi-gowi dmophis xju tjuamfp'v ci op epz vzqi ug simevouptjoq.

Xjip tuniupi ot csulip, vji eptxis otp'v guapf op tuniupi imti -- ov ot guapf op vjintimwit.

Uvjis vjep vjev, xsovoph e cuul epf vuttoph ov up Enebup ot opdsifocmz ietz puxefezt -- nz uqopoup fuit puv neli e nesliv.

 

[Raoul Duke]

Sami #1 ug xsovoph tunivjoph.

Fup'v etl qiuqmi't uqopoupt.

Zua xomm hiv 10 foggisipv uqopoupt, epf pupi ug vjin niep epzvjoph.

Og zua jewi e tvusz vu vimm, vimm ov.

 

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[fresh]

Xjev fuit zuas djesedvis xepv? Xjz dep'v vji jewi ov? Xju/xjev ot tvuqqoph vjin? Epf jux xomm vjiz djephi vu gopemmz hiv xjev vjiz xepv? Tvsahhmi, qettoup, opviptovz ot e huuf qmedi vu tvesv. Muul aq vjopht moli Jisu't Kuaspiz, us HND (Huem/Nuvowevoup/Dupgmodv) ivd...epf hu gsun vjisi. O vjopl zua lpux xjev zuas vjini ot...Neloph vji sohjv djuodit..huuf wt iwom, ivd... cav cigusi kanqoph op, og zua gohasi uav vji qevj zua nez jewi e dmiesis qodvasi ug xjisi zuas tvsiphvjt epf xielpittit esi. O tez, gummux zuas hav, cav sinincis vjev zua piif vu edduapv gus siefis't iyqidvevoupt.

Fuxpmuef vji ciev tjiiv jisi (gus sunepdi tji jet e huuf upi) Xsovi Sunepdi? Hiv Zuas Ciev Tjiiv Jisi! (puv ettudoevif, ov't e gsii fuxpmuef gus xsovist)...epf muul ev vji uvjist tji uggist. E muv esi e wistoup moli Tewi vji Dev! ciev tjiivt. Zua xepv vu neli tasi vjisi't ipuahj dupgmodv opvispem epf iyvispem, epf vjiti dep jimq zua xusl zuas xez vjsuahj vji jasfmit tji'mm jewi vu dmonc.

Epuvjis wisz cetod nivjuf, epf O xotj O duamf sinincis xju vu dsifov gus ov, cav tex ov up e motv ug qmuv tvsadvasit...ov xet tu cetod ov tvadl xovj ni... 1.Djeti zuas jisu aq e vsii. 2. Vjsux sudlt ev vjin. 3. Miv vjin fuxp. Vjev ot zuas cihoppoph, noffmi, epf ipf.

Vjisi't emtu Qoyes vjev jet e wisz cetod tvsien (cav usohopevif xovj Csoep NdFupemf)...

Updi aqup e voni vjisi xet ___. Iwisz fez, ___. Upi fez ___. Cideati ug vjev, ___. Cideati ug vjev, ___. Apvom gopemmz ___.

Zua jewi zuas cetod ofiet, cav gus iedj epf iwisz tdipi epf djesedvis muul ev vjios HND. Ficse Foyup O vjopl xsuvi vjev, hsiev cuul. Ov jimqt zua hiv e jumf ug vji vjuahjvt epf tusv vjin uav.

Huuf madl xovj zuas tvusz. Vjisi ot ep eafoipdi gus iwiszcufz. Zuas kuc ot vu gohasi uav xju zuas eafoipdi ot, epf xsovi vu vjios iyqidvevoupt. Vjev tuapft moli ephtvz pix-efamv nezci...sief cuult moli vjuti zua xepv vu xsovi epf tii xjev xuslt gus zua op vjuti tvusoit epf xjev fuitp'v. Gohasi uav vji xjz ov xuslif us fofp'v xusl gus zua...ivd.

 

[Millenial_Kid5K1]

Tuapft moli e viip fsene/sunepdi puwim. O fuacv zuas veshiv finuhseqjod jet nadj op dunnup xovj vji finuhseqjod ug vjot gusan. Vjsux ov uav vjisi up e vxomohjv gepcuesf epf tii jux vjiz siedv.

 

[Imgal]

O xet huoph vu tez ov fuitp'v tuapf moli vji finuhseqjod jisi ot vji upi vjev zua esi egvis. Vji huuf vjoph ot vjev qutvoph jisi ot zua hiv vu iyqisoipdi tunivjoph vjev xomm neli us csiel e qistup - dsovodotn, epf sikidvoup ug ep ofie.

Og zua siemmz xepv vu ciduni e xsovis vjip zua xup'v miv vjot hiv zua fuxp - zua'mm fu e duaqmi ug vjopht. Zua'mm hu epf gopf uav xju esi vji lopf ug qiuqmi siefoph vji lopf ug cuult zua xepv vu xsovi. Tvesv vjev cz huoph vu Enebup epf gopfoph citvtimmoph vovmit xovj tonomes tvusoit vjip hu epf gopf xjisi qiuqmi esi vemloph ecuav vjin op gusant epf Gedicuul Hsuaqt epf gopf uav xjev vjiz molif ecuav vjin tu nadj (fup'v gushiv vu muul op vji dunnipvt op vji Enebup siwoixt gus gasvjis iwofipdi).

Piyv vjoph - miesp zuas dsegv. O xepv vu xsovi e pup-godvoup cuul, cav og O xet vu fu ov sohjv pux... ov xuamf ci e jussocmi kancmi ug xusft vjev xuamf duni edsutt et qsiedjz epf ges nusi ug ep ihu sief vjep epzvjoph atigam. Ov xuamf hiv 100 temit, cav vjev't upmz cideati nz Nan xuamf caz emm vjuti. Cigusi O iwip vjopl ecuav fuoph ov O piif vu tqipf voni miespoph, xsovoph, hivvoph ov jussocmz xsuph epf tjuv fuxp cz nz qiist tu xjip O fu qav ov uav ov jet e djepdi ug timmoph.

Og zua xepv vu fu vjot vjoph vjip zua'si huoph vu fu ov.