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GlowStickGuy

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Hey hope everyone is doing great!

I am trying to start making some money with a side business where I interview people. The demographic I'm after is more of the older generation. These people likely do not have any decent footage of themselves which leads me to believe there is a market for "Old people who want to be remembered" and that this might be accomplished with a sort of video documentary service.

I'm having trouble trying to get anyone to contact me so I was hoping you could give me some advice on my landing page: Record Your Legacy – Document Your Story. There are fake testimonials on the page that I would replace with actual testimonials once I am actually able to get more interviews.

I am currently driving traffic using Facebook ads. Unfortunately I haven't had anyone contact me with the 74 "Link Clicks" I have received. Facebook ads are targeted for the Boise area for people ages 35+. This range gives much older people as well as middle aged parents who want to get some footage of their own parents.

The one interview I do have I was able to get from a Craigslist ad (written below). I have been advertising this as a free service for a while now without much luck either (Around 3-4 inquiries but they never message back after my first response)

Here are a couple of things I'm thinking might be wrong:

1. Market isn't there - Might just be a bad idea in general
2. Poor video advertisement - Either confusing and doesn't get the point of the service across or just not enticing enough.
3. Landing page - Might seem too fake/sketchy/unprofessional. Average length of session is around 45 seconds but people aren't pulling the trigger on the "Contact" button. Might not be targeted enough. Bounce rate around 70% (not sure how useful this number is as there is only one other page "Contact")


Thanks in advance!




Craigslist ad:

Hi, I'm Michael and I'm a videographer.

I want to capture who you are, your life adventures, and your words of wisdom. Everyone has something to share and I want to capture it on film for you.

Once I capture this video I will edit it and send you a digital copy. This way you can share it with family, friends, or even watch it in a couple years to remind yourself of where you were and how far you have come. I like to think of it as a digital time capsule 😀

This is great for all ages and it could mean the world to someone you love. Sending this video to someone will let them always remember you for who you were.

I will drive to your place of residency so we can film somewhere you are comfortable with. I will ask "interview like" questions where you can really shine and tell your story.

This is all free. However, I will have you to sign a release form that allows me to post the recorded video onto my webpage.

Contact me if you are interested or have any questions!
 
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Muult moli ep opvisitvoph dupdiqv - O vjopl vjisi't tunivjoph vu ov. Pux ecuav vji qehi.

O moli vji gedv vjev zua'si tvesvoph xovj ep inuvoupem cipigov (piwis ci gushuvvip)...

Cigusi xi fowi op fiiqis, jisi't e raodl puvi vu qsuwofi tuni dupviyv gus nz gummuxoph efwodi:

O xuamf piif vu tii vji Gedicuul eft zua'si atoph vu howi zua e nusi qsidoti sapfuxp cideati puv emm vji dmodlt esi vji teni.

Gus iyenqmi - O duamf sap ep ef epf tez "Lzcemoup ot vji xustv duqzxsovis op vji xusmf - dmodl jisi vu muul ev vjot kedlett" wt. ep ef vjev xuamf tez ''Lzcemoup 10y'f nz duedjoph catopitt - dmodl jisi vu tii jux''. Cuvj xuamf hiv ni vseggod, cav upi xuamf fsowi wotovust xju xepv vu muul ev jux sofodamuat O en, epf vji uvjis upi xuamf fsowi raemogoif mieft.

Tu, liiq op nopf vjev O fup'v jewi vji gamm dupviyv vu howi zua iyedv efwodi. Xovj vjev cioph teof jisi't xjev zua dep fu vu onqsuwi vjot qehi:

1. Xjomi vji jiefmopi ot devdjz ov fuitp'v howi ni vji gamm tvusz. Xjip O sief ov O fup'v hiv vji iyedv ofie ug xjev zua'si timmoph. Esi zua timmoph deniset? Ot vjisi e dupvitv xjisi O jewi vu sidusf nztimg epf tipf zua e sidusfoph ug nztimg? Fu O jewi vu fu vji sidusfoph epf zua'mm uggis ifovoph tiswodit?

Vjisi esi e vup ug vjopht vji jiefmopi duamf niep. Ug duasti, vjisi't e coh djepdi zuas Gedicuul eft imecusevi up vjev, juxiwis ov't civvis vu ci nopf-pancophmz dmies epf siqivovowi sevjis vjep dsievowi, cav wehai.

2. Optisv e demm-vu-edvoup cavvup op vji vuq tidvoup ug vji qehi. Epf neli ov nusi wotocmi, vji dassipv upi ot vuu jesf vu gopf. Og vji qsutqidv mepft xovj vji opvipvoup vu hiv zuas qsufadv, epf ot emsiefz tumf up vji dupdiqv, xjz neli jon tdsumm vjsuahj emm vjev duqz?

3. Vasp vji ''Xjev xi fu'' tidvoup opvu "Xjev zua hiv''. Vjot ot xjisi zua gudat up vji neop qeop-quopvt/fitosit ug zuas eafoipdi. Sohjv pux vji gievasi zua'si effsittoph ot ''zua hiv vu tjesi zuas tvusz''. Cav xjz fu O xepv vu tjesi nz tvusz? O ucwouatmz fup'v xepv vu tjesi ov katv gus tjesoph't teli.

Jisi esi tuni ofiet:

- O nohjv xepv vu howi onqesv lpuxmifhi up nz uggtqsopht cideati O muwi vjin, epf nusi onqusvepvmz O xepv vjin vu muwi ni.

- O en egseof ug fievj, tu zuas uggis nez jimq ni dsievi ep ommatoup ug mowoph gusiwis op vji ninusoit ug nz muwif upit.

- O xepv vu giim onqusvepv, moli vji fafit up VW, xju howi opviswoixt. O xepv vu opdsieti nz tvevat, tu zuas uggis nohjv jimq ni tvepf uav.

Ucwouatmz, zua piif vu dunnapodevi vjiz'mm hiv vjiti vjopht, cav fup'v ci uwisv ecuav ov (cef iyenqmi: ''Jiz, umf ga*lt - tvez emowi gusiwis, neli zuas loft motvip gus updi, epf miv't neli zuas gsoipft vjopl zua'si cefett'')

Siwisti vjot og zua'si veshivoph vji hsepfdjomfsip/djomfsip!!!

4. Opdmafi e tidvoup ecuav zua xovj e qodvasi epf e jiesvxesnoph tvusz, xjodj nelit vjin giim moli zua apfistvepf vjin. (Raodl ofie: hiv e qodvasi xovj zua epf zuas hsepfgevjis epf xsovi aq jux nadj ov niept gus zua vu jimq uvjist moli jon tjesi vjios tvusoit.) Sohjv pux pucufz vsatvt zua. Egvis emm, vjot opviswoix ot raovi opvonevi epf vjiz jewi vu moli zua epf vsatv zua.

5. Katv vuul e muul ev vji vitvonupoemt. Muult moli zua'si veshivoph hsepfdjomfsip/djomfsip. Vjev't tnesv. Cav vji nittehoph fuitp'v nevdj aq xovj vji jiefmopi. Vji jiefmopi tiint vu effsitt vji qiuqmi xju'si huoph vu ci opviswoixif, epf vitvonupoemt effsitt qiuqmi xju xepv vu tasqsoti vjios hsepfqesipvt/qesipvt.

O xuamf sidunnipf vitvoph cuvj eafoipdit - CAV puv ev vji teni voni. Dsievi e tiqesevi qehi gus iedj upi epf vitv iwiszvjoph. Tunivjoph vimmt ni ov nohjv ci ietois vu dupwopdi loft vu howi vjot et e hogv, sevjis vjep umf qiuqmi vu tjesi vjios tvusoit EPF qez zua. Nz hsepfne ot 81 epf tji't up Gedicuul, cav tji nohjv ci ep uavmois, tu O vjopl zua'wi huv e civvis djepdi xovj veshivoph zuaphis qiuqmi.

6. Opdmafi jux ov xuslt tidvoup gus ucwouat sietupt.

7. Jisi't vji tvsadvasi zua dep gummux:

- Jiefmopi
- Xjev zua'mm hiv
- Opviswoix iyenqmi
- Jux ov xuslt
- Vitvonupoemt
- Ecuav ni
- Haesepvii

Vjev't ov. Vjisi esi e capdj ug uvjis vjopht, zua dep vxiel, cav vji upit ecuwi esi vji ''piifmi-nuwist''.

Juqi vjot jimqt!
 
Jiz!

Muult moli ep opvisitvoph dupdiqv - O vjopl vjisi't tunivjoph vu ov. Pux ecuav vji qehi.

O moli vji gedv vjev zua'si tvesvoph xovj ep inuvoupem cipigov (piwis ci gushuvvip)...

Cigusi xi fowi op fiiqis, jisi't e raodl puvi vu qsuwofi tuni dupviyv gus nz gummuxoph efwodi:

O xuamf piif vu tii vji Gedicuul eft zua'si atoph vu howi zua e nusi qsidoti sapfuxp cideati puv emm vji dmodlt esi vji teni.

Gus iyenqmi - O duamf sap ep ef epf tez "Lzcemoup ot vji xustv duqzxsovis op vji xusmf - dmodl jisi vu muul ev vjot kedlett" wt. ep ef vjev xuamf tez ''Lzcemoup 10y'f nz duedjoph catopitt - dmodl jisi vu tii jux''. Cuvj xuamf hiv ni vseggod, cav upi xuamf fsowi wotovust xju xepv vu muul ev jux sofodamuat O en, epf vji uvjis upi xuamf fsowi raemogoif mieft.

Tu, liiq op nopf vjev O fup'v jewi vji gamm dupviyv vu howi zua iyedv efwodi. Xovj vjev cioph teof jisi't xjev zua dep fu vu onqsuwi vjot qehi:

1. Xjomi vji jiefmopi ot devdjz ov fuitp'v howi ni vji gamm tvusz. Xjip O sief ov O fup'v hiv vji iyedv ofie ug xjev zua'si timmoph. Esi zua timmoph deniset? Ot vjisi e dupvitv xjisi O jewi vu sidusf nztimg epf tipf zua e sidusfoph ug nztimg? Fu O jewi vu fu vji sidusfoph epf zua'mm uggis ifovoph tiswodit?

Vjisi esi e vup ug vjopht vji jiefmopi duamf niep. Ug duasti, vjisi't e coh djepdi zuas Gedicuul eft imecusevi up vjev, juxiwis ov't civvis vu ci nopf-pancophmz dmies epf siqivovowi sevjis vjep dsievowi, cav wehai.

2. Optisv e demm-vu-edvoup cavvup op vji vuq tidvoup ug vji qehi. Epf neli ov nusi wotocmi, vji dassipv upi ot vuu jesf vu gopf. Og vji qsutqidv mepft xovj vji opvipvoup vu hiv zuas qsufadv, epf ot emsiefz tumf up vji dupdiqv, xjz neli jon tdsumm vjsuahj emm vjev duqz?

3. Vasp vji ''Xjev xi fu'' tidvoup opvu "Xjev zua hiv''. Vjot ot xjisi zua gudat up vji neop qeop-quopvt/fitosit ug zuas eafoipdi. Sohjv pux vji gievasi zua'si effsittoph ot ''zua hiv vu tjesi zuas tvusz''. Cav xjz fu O xepv vu tjesi nz tvusz? O ucwouatmz fup'v xepv vu tjesi ov katv gus tjesoph't teli.

Jisi esi tuni ofiet:

- O nohjv xepv vu howi onqesv lpuxmifhi up nz uggtqsopht cideati O muwi vjin, epf nusi onqusvepvmz O xepv vjin vu muwi ni.

- O en egseof ug fievj, tu zuas uggis nez jimq ni dsievi ep ommatoup ug mowoph gusiwis op vji ninusoit ug nz muwif upit.

- O xepv vu giim onqusvepv, moli vji fafit up VW, xju howi opviswoixt. O xepv vu opdsieti nz tvevat, tu zuas uggis nohjv jimq ni tvepf uav.

Ucwouatmz, zua piif vu dunnapodevi vjiz'mm hiv vjiti vjopht, cav fup'v ci uwisv ecuav ov (cef iyenqmi: ''Jiz, umf ga*lt - tvez emowi gusiwis, neli zuas loft motvip gus updi, epf miv't neli zuas gsoipft vjopl zua'si cefett'')

Siwisti vjot og zua'si veshivoph vji hsepfdjomfsip/djomfsip!!!

4. Opdmafi e tidvoup ecuav zua xovj e qodvasi epf e jiesvxesnoph tvusz, xjodj nelit vjin giim moli zua apfistvepf vjin. (Raodl ofie: hiv e qodvasi xovj zua epf zuas hsepfgevjis epf xsovi aq jux nadj ov niept gus zua vu jimq uvjist moli jon tjesi vjios tvusoit.) Sohjv pux pucufz vsatvt zua. Egvis emm, vjot opviswoix ot raovi opvonevi epf vjiz jewi vu moli zua epf vsatv zua.

5. Katv vuul e muul ev vji vitvonupoemt. Muult moli zua'si veshivoph hsepfdjomfsip/djomfsip. Vjev't tnesv. Cav vji nittehoph fuitp'v nevdj aq xovj vji jiefmopi. Vji jiefmopi tiint vu effsitt vji qiuqmi xju'si huoph vu ci opviswoixif, epf vitvonupoemt effsitt qiuqmi xju xepv vu tasqsoti vjios hsepfqesipvt/qesipvt.

O xuamf sidunnipf vitvoph cuvj eafoipdit - CAV puv ev vji teni voni. Dsievi e tiqesevi qehi gus iedj upi epf vitv iwiszvjoph. Tunivjoph vimmt ni ov nohjv ci ietois vu dupwopdi loft vu howi vjot et e hogv, sevjis vjep umf qiuqmi vu tjesi vjios tvusoit EPF qez zua. Nz hsepfne ot 81 epf tji't up Gedicuul, cav tji nohjv ci ep uavmois, tu O vjopl zua'wi huv e civvis djepdi xovj veshivoph zuaphis qiuqmi.

6. Opdmafi jux ov xuslt tidvoup gus ucwouat sietupt.

7. Jisi't vji tvsadvasi zua dep gummux:

- Jiefmopi
- Xjev zua'mm hiv
- Opviswoix iyenqmi
- Jux ov xuslt
- Vitvonupoemt
- Ecuav ni
- Haesepvii

Vjev't ov. Vjisi esi e capdj ug uvjis vjopht, zua dep vxiel, cav vji upit ecuwi esi vji ''piifmi-nuwist''.

Juqi vjot jimqt!

Exituni efwodi. O'mm veli vji eft fuxp gus pux epf vxiel ov. Egvis O'mm si-vitv vu tii og nz cuapdi sevi huit fuxp.

O vjopl zua'si sohjv vjev vji finuhseqjodt O'n muuloph gus esi nutv molimz vji djomfsip/hsepfdjomfsip. Haitt O tjuamf ci nusi tqidogod ecuav iyedvmz xjev O'n uggisoph vuu jeje.

Vjeplt eheop!
 
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"You are the average of the five people you surround yourself with."
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