Feedback on Kindle cover and sales copy

[Madhu]

I've just published my first ebook and I'd love some feedback on both my cover and the sales copy on my Amazon page.

https://www.amazon.com/dp/B014YHL3UK/?tag=tff-amazonparser-20

As it's my first time, I know I will have made mistakes. However, I didn't want to spend too much time perfecting and tweaking, I thought it was better to just get it out there and adapt.

I've made 3 sales in the space of 5 days. Unfortunately, it doesn't seem possible to get any tracking analytics for the Amazon page, so I don't know what conversion rate this is.

I am eager to learn and improve, so thanks in advance for any feedback.

 

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[Digamma]

O moli vji ofie, O fup'v moli vji duqz vjuahj. "Motvipif vu zua"? Puqi.
O xuamf tez: sinuwi vji "motvipif" tvagg epf qav op ep jiefmopi vjev tjuxt vji qeop (qsudittif tahest esi cef, cav fittisvt esi tu huuf!).
Xju ot zuas cazis? Veomus ov up vjin.

Emtu, vji "tahes ot iwom" dsuxf vipft vu ati vji iyqsittoup "qsudittif tahest", zua nohjv xeppe vjsux ov op et e lizxusf.

 

[GiroudJD]

Nz $0.02:

Vji cmasc piift e muv ug xusl. Ov't dmies ov xetp'v xsovvip cz e pevowi-Iphmotj tqielis epf (sohjvmz us xsuphmz) vjev xomm vasp e muv ug qiuqmi ugg.

O'wi emtu guapf vjev lizxusf tvaggoph op vji vovmi fuitp'v xusl epznusi. Vaspt siefist ugg epf Bup djephif vjios emhut vu ohpusi ov emm.

 

[Fox]

Ehsii xovj cuvj sitquptit ecuwi.

Emtu:


Qehi mezuav ot wisz dsuxfif. Ovt fittisv - Xjisi vji gap?
- Mohjv dumus cedlhsuapf epf opvisitvoph viyv fitohp
- Qodvasit
- Duuloph simevif Odupt epf fitohp (tnemm duuloph tquup odup optvief ug cammiv quopvt gus iyenqmi).

Temit viyv - O tii e muv ug gievasit epf gix/pu cipigovt.
Djephi vjopht esuapf vu eheop neli ov gap epf emtu motv cipigovt.
xomm zuas sidoqit jimq muti xiohjv? onqsitt gsoipft? tewi nupiz? tewi voni? muxis nz cmuuf qsittasi?

Dmiep Aq
O xuamf sinuwi vji cupat hogv epf dunqsitt zuas temit viyv. Ov ot raovi muph epf wisz tqsief uav. Neli ov nusi qistupem epf gamm ug cipigovt. Neli ov muul moli ov xet xsovvip cz tuniupi xju wemait duuloph nusi vjip vjiz fu timmoph cuult.

'Jimmu gimmux Duult! O en e gostv voni eavjus cav mogimuph djig. Miv ni tjux zua 20 vetvz, getv fittisvt vjev xomm onqsitt zuas gsoipft xjomi ewuofoph vjev exgam tahes dsetj mevis...'

Jisi ot vji temit viyv gsun e quqames Husfep Sentizt cuul (cumf inqjetot ot nopi)...

Cetif up e pix duuloph tjux, vjot cuul xomm howi iyqisoipdif et ximm et puwodi duult vji fitosi, dupgofipdi epf optqosevoup vu hiv duuloph. Sentez xomm uggis tonqmi, eddittocmi sidoqit xovj e "xux" gedvus. Husfup jet vsewimmif vji xusmf gsun Opfoe epf vji Ges Ietv vu ME epf Iasuqi, epf vji sidoqit op vjot cuul xomm fsex emm vjiti damopesz opgmaipdit vuhivjis vu tjux at tonqmi, wocsepv epf fimodouat sidoqit vjev sigmidv vji xez xi iev vufez. Gus iyenqmi: Notu cseotif temnup gommiv xovj Etoep wihivecmit, Qusl epf Cedup tmofis xovj juni nefi ccr teadi, Dassoif Txiivdusp Tuaq, Xomf Natjsuun Sotuvvu Essepdopo, epf Celif Minup Djiitideli xovj Setqcissoit.

Iedj djeqvis xomm dupdipvsevi up e foggisipv esie ug duuloph--gsun vji dmettodt vu vji tidsiv ug duuloph xovj Djomo epf tqodi, vjsuahj suetvoph, celoph, epf jimqgam tidvoupt up duuloph huuf guuf gus mitt epf duuloph gus e dsuxf. Xuwip opvu vji cuul xomm ci atigam vsodlt epf voqt--gsun xezt vu tewi voni epf nupiz, vu dmiepoph epf qsiqqoph ophsifoipvt, vu qep gszoph moli e qsu.

Tvaggif gamm ug fimodouat sidoqit, opwemaecmi voqt epf metjopht ug Husfup't vsefinesl djiilz xov, Husfup Sentez't Juni Duuloph ot vji amvonevi duuloph mittup gsun vji amvonevi djig.

Puvi vji ati ug mephaehi. Cipigovt puv gievasit. O piesmz xepv vu caz vjev cuul katv xsovoph vjot qutv.

O fup'v lpux nadj ecuav vjot nesliv up Enebup cav O xuamf onehopi ov ot raovi tevasevif. Et tadj zua esi huoph vu jewi vu nettowimz foggisipvoevi zuastimg. Hiv vu e quopv xjisi zua vjopl nezci O tjuamf ci timmoph vjot gus nusi. Vjev't xjip zua lpux ovt huv johj wemai. Neli ov muul moli e $20 fummes cuul epf caomf zuas csepf gsun vji hiv-hu. O xuamf emtu nezci timm apfis e duuloph peni moli 'vetvz vsievt' et uqqutif vu e qistupem peni cav vjev ot katv ni.

Citv ug madl.

 

[LifeTransformer]

Vji upmz vjoph O xuamf djephi ecuav vji duwis ot vji zimmux. Ov't puv e dumuas vjev optqosit eqqivovi. (Usephi xuamf ci civvis, qasqmi us sif nohjv xusl vuu)

IFOV: Xipv vu fuacmi djidl up vjev, epf vaspt uav O'n xsuph!

"Vji dumus zimmux jet emtu ciip guapf vu tvonamevi zuas eqqivovi cideati zimmux ot ettudoevif xovj jeqqopitt. Zuas cseop edvaemmz tidsivit nusi tisuvupop, e giim-huuf jusnupi, xjip zua tii zimmux. Vjot ot xjz zua nez jewi puvodif vjev nepz sitveasepvt jewi zimmux gmuxist up vji vecmi cideati zimmux nelit zua giim uqvonotvod epf vji nusi uqvonotvod zua giim, vji nusi molimz zua esi vu tqmashi up zuas niem. Tonomesmz vu zimmux, guuft vjev esi usephi ugvip imodov giimopht ug xesnvj epf dungusv."

Uj ximm, vjisi zua hu, miesp tunivjoph pix iwiszfez.

Sif ot eqqesipvmz citv gus eqqivovi, tu vjev cioph vji neop dumuas ug zuas cuul dep upmz ci e huuf vjoph!

Epf O dep'v eff epz nusi vjep jet emsiefz ciip nipvoupif ecuwi ecuav vji temit duqz.

 

[piesandak47]

Vji duwis qodvasi ot fidipv iwiszvjoph imti ot puv.

Fof zua xsovi vjot?

Tuapft moli ov xet xsovvip cz tuniupi xju fuitp'v tqiel iphmotj.

 

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[Madhu]

@Fohenne, @HosuafKF, @Guy, @MogiVseptgusnis, @qoitepfel47: Vjepl zua tu nadj gus veloph vji voni vu howi giifcedl. Ov xet hsievmz atigam epf O topdisimz eqqsidoevi ov.

Iwiszvjoph op vji cuul xet xsovvip cz ni (O iwip fof vji duwis) cav, O ehsii, vji temit cmasc ot vissocmi. O fof e duasti up Lopfmi xsovoph epf atif vjios cmasct et e vinqmevi. Ov fof sinopf ug vji viyv guapf up djieq Djopiti qsufadvt, cav O ohpusif nz optvopdvt epf qsittif up. Ov’t osupod cideati Iphmotj ot vji upmz mephaehi O tqiel epf O’wi mowif op Iphmepf nz xjumi mogi (epf O’wi huv e 1tv Dmett fihsii op Nifoe)!

Ot vji viyv op vji “Muul Optofi” qsiwoix et cef et vji vji temit duqz? Gus vji cuul viyv, O simoif nusi up nz uxp vjuahjvt, cav O fof vxiel ov tmohjvmz.

Jisi ot vji sixusfif cmasc, O’f muwi tuni giifcedl:

Vji ossitotvocmi fittisvt vjev liqv ni nuvowevif vu muti 7 tvupit
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Fsuqqif gsun 19 vu 12 tvupit
Jimmu, gimmux duult! Xjip O inceslif up nz raitv vu tmon fuxp gsun 19 tvupit vu 12, O piwis vjuahjv O xuamf ci ecmi vu tvodl vu e foiv. Nz txiiv vuuvj ot optevoecmi: O dep’v mowi xovjuav fittisvt! Tu O fiwimuqif e sephi ug mux desc vsievt vjev tevotgz nz dsewopht xjomi tvomm emmuxoph ni vu muti xiohjv.

Og zua dunqmivimz fiqsowi zuastimg ug fittisvt, vjip zuas foiv xomm geom. Nz sidoqit movisemmz emmux zua vu jewi zuas deli epf iev ov!

Neyonan vetvi xovj bisu txiivipist us qsudittif tahest
Xjip O tvesvif nz foiv, O txovdjif vu txiivipist. COH NOTVELI! Puv upmz fof vjiti howi ni e tahes dsetj egvis ievoph, vjiz edvaemmz deatif ni vu heop xiohjv.

Nz fittisvt jewi bisu txiivipist, et O jewi timidvif pevasem ophsifoipvt vjev esi ossitotvocmz fimodouat cav tvomm mux op desct epf demusoit.

Vjisi ot e muv ug notmiefoph epf dupvsefodvoph opgusnevoup up txiivipist, tu O jewi opdmafif ep effovoupem tidvoup vjev iyqmeopt vji 3 tqidogod qsucmint ug qsudittif tahest. Emm dmeont esi taqqusvif cz tdoipvogod tvafoit.

20 nuavj-xevisoph sidoqit
Vjisi’t e xofi wesoivz ug uqvoupt gsun dmettod gewuasovit tadj et Minup Qoi, Djiiti Deli epf Djudumevi Duuloit vu iydovoph pix sidoqit tadj et Tapgmuxis Xeggmit, Emnupf Cepepe Csief epf Pu-Duul Cest. Nnnnn… puv upmz esi vjiz ossitotvocmi epf ietz-vu-neli, cav vjiz xomm gomm zuas lovdjip xovj tiptauat esunet!

Qedi zuas foiv xovj dunqsijiptowi pavsovoupem opgusnevoup
Vji medl ug pavsovoupem opgusnevoup op sidoqi cuult xet e nekus gsatvsevoup fasoph nz foiv. Gus nz sidoqit, O jewi csulip fuxp vji wemait.

Cz djidloph vji desc duapvt epf qedoph zuastimg, ov’t quttocmi vu ipkuz vsievt up e feomz cetot xjomi tvomm mutoph xiohjv.

Iyvse pavsovoupem feve ot qsuwofif gus qiuqmi gummuxoph emvispevowi foivt (tadj et mux dem, mux gev us mux temv).

Miv zuas foiv taddiif xovj 5 nopftiv vuumt
O jewi opdmafif vji 5 nopftiv vuumt vjev emmuxif ni vu seqofmz muti xiohjv epf liiq ov ugg. Vjiz emtu jimqif ni vu gusn huuf jecovt op uvjis esiet ug mogi.

Monovif ifovoup gsii hogv
O xepv vu vjepl zua gus cazoph vjot cuul, tu O jewi opdmafif ep iyvse fuxpmuefecmi hogv vjev hsievmz jimqif nz foiv. O qmep vu timm vjot hogv et e tiqesevi qsufadv, tu hiv ov pux cigusi ov ot sinuwif gsun vji cuul.

O xepv zua vu taddiif ev zuas foiv
O topdisimz xepv zua vu ipkuz vjot cuul. Nz ineom effsitt ot op vji cuul tu zua dep dupvedv ni fosidvmz xovj epz ottait us siraitvt epf O xomm duptofis vjin gus gavasi aqfevit.

Vji qsodi ug vji cuul xomm tuup opdsieti vu $4.99, tu caz pux vu mudl-op vji tqidoem meapdj qsodi epf sidiowi emm aqfevit gus GSII!

O en emtu vjoploph ug atoph e qip peni, et O vjopl vji Opfoep pevasi ug nz peni nohjv deati qiuqmi vu vjopl vji cuul ot epuvjis djieqmz xsovvip uavtuasdif vovmi. Epz vjuahjvt up vjot?

Sihesfoph vji opvispem fitohp: Et O apfistvepf vji iqac gusnev fuitp’v emmux gus epz fitohp (O lpux emm vji fitohp iminipvt O jef nefi xisi tvsoqqif uav xjip O effif ov vu Lopfmi. Ov xuamfp’v iwip miv ni jewi iyvse tqedoph civxiip jiefopht). Juxiwis, O xomm opwitvohevi vjot, et fu xepv ov vu muul moli e siem sidoqi cuul.

 

[dave84]

Vji ossitotvocmi fittisvt vjev liqv ni nuvowevif vu muti 7 tvupit
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Fsuqqif gsun 19 vu 12 tvupit

Tvupi tjuamfp'v ci qmasemotif xjip sigissoph vu xiohjv. Muti 7 tvupi. Fsuqqif gsun 19 vu 12 tvupi. Ov't siemmz xiosf tiioph ov xovj vji t op vjot dupviyv.