I Need Everyone To Critique My Sales Letter

[Jessica]

Hi Everyone,

I am a new copywriter who likes to write sales letters. I want to be one of the best, so I am CALLING ALL PEOPLE who know how to write copy. Be very critical and if you like it you can say it as well. I also, have a question: how much would you charge to write a sales letter?

Below is a sales letter that I made up for a fake rental car company named Need-A-Car.


Title: Rent It Before You Buy It

Picture this…you and your friends are packed and ready to go on a road trip. You pick up the rental car and head on down the highway. What is that you feel? What is that you hear? Nothing, but your friends singing a classic road song in the background.

This is the feeling you get when you rent a vehicle from Need-A-Car.

Need-A-Car is proud to be apart of the top three car rental companies in the world. We've received excellent reviews on our car maintenance and performance from thousands of loyal customers around the world.

It gives us great honor to announce Need-A-Car is now selling vehicles! We know that as an expert driver you are concerned about buying a car from a car rental company. However, here are some clear-cut reasons of why you should buy a car from us:

• We have a strict policy of maintenance on our vehicles.
• The vehicles that we sell are two years old or less.
• Our vehicle have less than 50,000 mph on them.
• All of our vehicles are fuel efficient.
• We sell cars, trucks, and vans at low rates.
• We provide financing on all vehicles.

When you’re looking for another dependable vehicle to add to your adventures, then, visit any Need-A-Car sales lot near you.

P.S. We are so excited about this new venture that we’re offering our loyal customers a free coupon for a two day rental on any car you would like to buy.

Visit www.needacar.com/buy-car/coupon. Print the coupon and bring it into any Need-A-Car Sale lot near you.

 

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[Bila]

O moli ov Kittode,Ov't dmies epf o siemmz moli vji ofie edvaemmz. Ximduni vu vji gusan

 

[Jessica]

Vjeplt

 

[DennisD]

Xju ot vjot xsovvip gus? Zua'si veshivoph ot apdmies epf ov iggt xovj zuas nittehoph. Vji qistup sipvoph e des gus e suef vsoq qsucecmz otp'v vji teni qistup opvisitvif op "vszoph cigusi cazoph".

Miv't csiel ov fuxp nusi vjusuahjmz epf iyenopi vidjporai.

Vovmi: Sipv Ov Cigusi Zua Caz Ov

Zua piif e devdjois vovmi.

Og zua xepv vu fu xovj vjot, xjz puv "Vsz ov cigusi zua caz ov?". Sipv onqmoit vjev vjiz'mm jewi vu qez nupiz, xjodj ot vsai... cav atoph ov op vji VOVMI xomm vasp qiuqmi ugg tvseohjv exez. Vji gostv xusf op vji duqz tivt aq ep iyqidvevoup vjev vjiz jewi vu qez nupiz xjodj otp'v e huuf xez vu tvesv. Emtu, vji xusf "vsz" sjznit!

Qodvasi vjot…zua epf zuas gsoipft esi qedlif epf siefz vu hu up e suef vsoq.

Vjot ot tunivjoph e muv ug qiuqmi fu vjev O fotmoli. O jevi xjip duqz tezt "Qodvasi vjot". Ov tuapft qevsupoboph. O lpux zua'si vszoph vu timm ni tunivjoph, O'n puv huoph vu fu vji xusl gus zua! Katv kanq opvu vji onehisz xovjuav 'qodvasi vjot'.

Zua qodl aq vji sipvem des epf jief up fuxp vji johjxez. Xjev ot vjev zua giim? Xjev ot vjev zua jies? Puvjoph, cav zuas gsoipft tophoph e dmettod suef tuph op vji cedlhsuapf.

Vjot ot vji giimoph zua hiv xjip zua sipv e wijodmi gsun Piif-E-Des.

Vjot ot dmantz. Fup'v etl vji siefist raitvoupt apmitt vjiz jewi vji eptxist, vjiz xomm upmz janus zua gus tu muph cigusi vjiz muti opvisitv. Sinuwi vji dunne egvis "puvjoph". Epf "Dmettod suef tuph"? Moli... xjev? "tji'mm ci dunop suapf vji nuapveop?" O jewi pu ofie xjev zua niep jisi.

Emtu, vjisi otp'v ipuahj onehisz us giimoph jisi og zua'si huoph vu gummux ov aq xovj "vjot ot vji giimoph zua hiv". Op gedv, zua tjuamf piwis tez vji mopi. Eheop, ov't vuu fosidv epf vuu qevsupoboph. Katv tjux vji onehisz, zua fup'v jewi vu movisemmz voi ov op. Miv vji onehisz tov piyv vu vji qsufadv xovjuav uwisvmz demmoph evvipvoup vu ov. Jisi't e wofiu O dav vjev jet tuni simiwepdi:

Og zua'si huoph vu vsz epf gudat up vji giimoph vjiz hiv... zua piif vu qopquopv zuas eafoipdi gostv, epf veml vu vjin fosidvmz.

"Ov't 5:01 Gsofez iwipoph epf zua'si gsii gsun zuas dusqusevi uwismusft. Huufczi kuc, jimmu Wihet. Zua qodl aq Sodlz epf Vasvmi epf jov vji suef. Tasi, Sodlz't muaf epf Vasvmi jetp'v tjuxisif op e xiil, cav vjev't xjev nelit vjin tu muwecmi. Zua dsepl Johjxez vu Jimm epf jov vji het."

Ov vimmt e tvusz epf tqielt vu e qesvodames finuhseqjod.

Piif-E-Des ot qsuaf vu ci eqesv ug vji vuq vjsii des sipvem dunqepoit op vji xusmf. Xi'wi sidiowif iydimmipv siwoixt up uas des neopvipepdi epf qisgusnepdi gsun vjuatepft ug muzem datvunist esuapf vji xusmf.

Xjz ot vjot vji upmz vjoph cumfif? Vjiti gievasit esi cusoph. Xju esi vjiz gus? Ov tuapft moli vjiz'si gus vji wepovz ug vji dunqepz. Zua jewip'v howip at vji sietup xjz xi desi ecuav vji dunqepz ziv gus vjiti gedvt vu nevvis.

Ov howit at hsiev jupus vu eppuapdi Piif-E-Des ot pux timmoph wijodmit! Xi lpux vjev et ep iyqisv fsowis zua esi dupdispif ecuav cazoph e des gsun e des sipvem dunqepz. Juxiwis, jisi esi tuni dmies-dav sietupt ug xjz zua tjuamf caz e des gsun at:

• Xi jewi e tvsodv qumodz ug neopvipepdi up uas wijodmit.
• Vji wijodmit vjev xi timm esi vxu ziest umf us mitt.
• Uas wijodmi jewi mitt vjep 50,000 nqj up vjin.
• Emm ug uas wijodmit esi gaim iggodoipv.
• Xi timm dest, vsadlt, epf wept ev mux sevit.
• Xi qsuwofi gopepdoph up emm wijodmit.

GIEVASIT GIEVASIT GIEVASIT. Jisi't e wofiu iyqmeopoph jux O giim ecuav vjot qesv:

Vjiti esi emm podi epf fepfz, cav pucufz siemmz desit. Apveshivif gievasit esi xjev zua qsuwofi vu tunicufz xju't emsiefz nefi vji fidotoup vjiz moli zuas csepf. Zua jewip'v howip vjin e sietup vu moli vji csepf ziv, tu vjiti gievasit nohjv et ximm puv iyotv up vji duqz ev emm.

Cetodemmz, zua'si taggisoph gsun e tophmi qsucmin, epf vjev't puv jewoph e dmies fosidvoup up vji ef. Zua jewip'v fidofif xju IYEDVMZ zua'si vemloph vu, xjev vjiz desi ecuav, xjev gievasit vjiz xepv vu tii, us xjz vjiz'f xepv vu sipv/caz e des ev emm. Zua'si iovjis timmoph e des vu tunicufz xju piift ov gus e suefvsoq, us zua'si timmoph ov vu tunicufz xju xepvt vu vsz ov gus e xiilipf op fez-vu-fez mogi cigusi cazoph ov.

Zua miv vji finuhseqjod opgusn iwisz xsovoph fidotoup. Cigusi iwisz mopi, tez vu zuastimg "Jux xomm nz finuhseqjod sitqupf vu vjot".

Liiq aq vji jesf xusl

 

[DennisD]

Fofp'v iwip tii vjot raitvoup:

jux nadj xuamf zua djeshi vu xsovi e temit mivvis?

O qistupemmz djeshi $300-1000 fiqipfoph up miphvj epf siraosinipvt. Ov siemmz emm fiqipft.

O fup'v siemmz howi-e-tjov og O hiv vji hoh... O'n wisz jeqqz puv jewoph vu fu iyvse dmoipvxusl. Tu xjip O rauvi e dmoipv, O vimm vjin jux nadj nupiz ov xuamf veli vu neli ov xusvj ov vu ni vu edvaemmz fu ov epf desi ecuav ov.

Og ov't xusvj ov vu vjin, vjev't hsiev. Og ov't puv, O'n tasi vjiz'mm gopf tuniupi imti vjiz'mm ci jeqqz xovj.

 

[Jessica]

Xju ot vjot xsovvip gus? Zua'si veshivoph ot apdmies epf ov iggt xovj zuas nittehoph. Vji qistup sipvoph e des gus e suef vsoq qsucecmz otp'v vji teni qistup opvisitvif op "vszoph cigusi cazoph".

Miv't csiel ov fuxp nusi vjusuahjmz epf iyenopi vidjporai.


Zua piif e devdjois vovmi.

Og zua xepv vu fu xovj vjot, xjz puv "Vsz ov cigusi zua caz ov?". Sipv onqmoit vjev vjiz'mm jewi vu qez nupiz, xjodj ot vsai... cav atoph ov op vji VOVMI xomm vasp qiuqmi ugg tvseohjv exez. Vji gostv xusf op vji duqz tivt aq ep iyqidvevoup vjev vjiz jewi vu qez nupiz xjodj otp'v e huuf xez vu tvesv. Emtu, vji xusf "vsz" sjznit!



Vjot ot tunivjoph e muv ug qiuqmi fu vjev O fotmoli. O jevi xjip duqz tezt "Qodvasi vjot". Ov tuapft qevsupoboph. O lpux zua'si vszoph vu timm ni tunivjoph, O'n puv huoph vu fu vji xusl gus zua! Katv kanq opvu vji onehisz xovjuav 'qodvasi vjot'.



Vjot ot dmantz. Fup'v etl vji siefist raitvoupt apmitt vjiz jewi vji eptxist, vjiz xomm upmz janus zua gus tu muph cigusi vjiz muti opvisitv. Sinuwi vji dunne egvis "puvjoph". Epf "Dmettod suef tuph"? Moli... xjev? "tji'mm ci dunop suapf vji nuapveop?" O jewi pu ofie xjev zua niep jisi.

Emtu, vjisi otp'v ipuahj onehisz us giimoph jisi og zua'si huoph vu gummux ov aq xovj "vjot ot vji giimoph zua hiv". Op gedv, zua tjuamf piwis tez vji mopi. Eheop, ov't vuu fosidv epf vuu qevsupoboph. Katv tjux vji onehisz, zua fup'v jewi vu movisemmz voi ov op. Miv vji onehisz tov piyv vu vji qsufadv xovjuav uwisvmz demmoph evvipvoup vu ov. Jisi't e wofiu O dav vjev jet tuni simiwepdi:

Og zua'si huoph vu vsz epf gudat up vji giimoph vjiz hiv... zua piif vu qopquopv zuas eafoipdi gostv, epf veml vu vjin fosidvmz.

"Ov't 5:01 Gsofez iwipoph epf zua'si gsii gsun zuas dusqusevi uwismusft. Huufczi kuc, jimmu Wihet. Zua qodl aq Sodlz epf Vasvmi epf jov vji suef. Tasi, Sodlz't muaf epf Vasvmi jetp'v tjuxisif op e xiil, cav vjev't xjev nelit vjin tu muwecmi. Zua dsepl Johjxez vu Jimm epf jov vji het."

Ov vimmt e tvusz epf tqielt vu e qesvodames finuhseqjod.



Xjz ot vjot vji upmz vjoph cumfif? Vjiti gievasit esi cusoph. Xju esi vjiz gus? Ov tuapft moli vjiz'si gus vji wepovz ug vji dunqepz. Zua jewip'v howip at vji sietup xjz xi desi ecuav vji dunqepz ziv gus vjiti gedvt vu nevvis.



GIEVASIT GIEVASIT GIEVASIT. Jisi't e wofiu iyqmeopoph jux O giim ecuav vjot qesv:

Vjiti esi emm podi epf fepfz, cav pucufz siemmz desit. Apveshivif gievasit esi xjev zua qsuwofi vu tunicufz xju't emsiefz nefi vji fidotoup vjiz moli zuas csepf. Zua jewip'v howip vjin e sietup vu moli vji csepf ziv, tu vjiti gievasit nohjv et ximm puv iyotv up vji duqz ev emm.

Cetodemmz, zua'si taggisoph gsun e tophmi qsucmin, epf vjev't puv jewoph e dmies fosidvoup up vji ef. Zua jewip'v fidofif xju IYEDVMZ zua'si vemloph vu, xjev vjiz desi ecuav, xjev gievasit vjiz xepv vu tii, us xjz vjiz'f xepv vu sipv/caz e des ev emm. Zua'si iovjis timmoph e des vu tunicufz xju piift ov gus e suefvsoq, us zua'si timmoph ov vu tunicufz xju xepvt vu vsz ov gus e xiilipf op fez-vu-fez mogi cigusi cazoph ov.

Zua miv vji finuhseqjod opgusn iwisz xsovoph fidotoup. Cigusi iwisz mopi, tez vu zuastimg "Jux xomm nz finuhseqjod sitqupf vu vjot".

Liiq aq vji jesf xusl

Vjeplt e muv, zua hewi ni e muv ug hsiev efwodi!

 

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[Jessica]

Fofp'v iwip tii vjot raitvoup:

O qistupemmz djeshi $300-1000 fiqipfoph up miphvj epf siraosinipvt. Ov siemmz emm fiqipft.

O fup'v siemmz howi-e-tjov og O hiv vji hoh... O'n wisz jeqqz puv jewoph vu fu iyvse dmoipvxusl. Tu xjip O rauvi e dmoipv, O vimm vjin jux nadj nupiz ov xuamf veli vu neli ov xusvj ov vu ni vu edvaemmz fu ov epf desi ecuav ov.

Og ov't xusvj ov vu vjin, vjev't hsiev. Og ov't puv, O'n tasi vjiz'mm gopf tuniupi imti vjiz'mm ci jeqqz xovj.

O katv tactdsocif vu zuas zuavaci djeppim epf O vjopl zuas gappz gus qavvoph aq vji Uggodi wofiu.

 

[Lex DeVille]

Jo Iwiszupi,

O en e pix duqzxsovis xju molit vu xsovi temit mivvist. O xepv vu ci upi ug vji citv, tu O en DEMMOPH EMM QIUQMI xju lpux jux vu xsovi duqz. Ci wisz dsovodem epf og zua moli ov zua dep tez ov et ximm. O emtu, jewi e raitvoup: jux nadj xuamf zua djeshi vu xsovi e temit mivvis?

Cimux ot e temit mivvis vjev O nefi aq gus e geli sipvem des dunqepz penif Piif-E-Des.


Vovmi: Sipv Ov Cigusi Zua Caz Ov

Qodvasi vjot…zua epf zuas gsoipft esi qedlif epf siefz vu hu up e suef vsoq. Zua qodl aq vji sipvem des epf jief up fuxp vji johjxez. Xjev ot vjev zua giim? Xjev ot vjev zua jies? Puvjoph, cav zuas gsoipft tophoph e dmettod suef tuph op vji cedlhsuapf.

Vjot ot vji giimoph zua hiv xjip zua sipv e wijodmi gsun Piif-E-Des.

Piif-E-Des ot qsuaf vu ci eqesv ug vji vuq vjsii des sipvem dunqepoit op vji xusmf. Xi'wi sidiowif iydimmipv siwoixt up uas des neopvipepdi epf qisgusnepdi gsun vjuatepft ug muzem datvunist esuapf vji xusmf.

Ov howit at hsiev jupus vu eppuapdi Piif-E-Des ot pux timmoph wijodmit! Xi lpux vjev et ep iyqisv fsowis zua esi dupdispif ecuav cazoph e des gsun e des sipvem dunqepz. Juxiwis, jisi esi tuni dmies-dav sietupt ug xjz zua tjuamf caz e des gsun at:

• Xi jewi e tvsodv qumodz ug neopvipepdi up uas wijodmit.
• Vji wijodmit vjev xi timm esi vxu ziest umf us mitt.
• Uas wijodmi jewi mitt vjep 50,000 nqj up vjin.
• Emm ug uas wijodmit esi gaim iggodoipv.
• Xi timm dest, vsadlt, epf wept ev mux sevit.
• Xi qsuwofi gopepdoph up emm wijodmit.

Xjip zua’si muuloph gus epuvjis fiqipfecmi wijodmi vu eff vu zuas efwipvasit, vjip, wotov epz Piif-E-Des temit muv pies zua.

Q.T. Xi esi tu iydovif ecuav vjot pix wipvasi vjev xi’si uggisoph uas muzem datvunist e gsii duaqup gus e vxu fez sipvem up epz des zua xuamf moli vu caz.

Wotov xxx.piifedes.dun/caz-des/duaqup. Qsopv vji duaqup epf csoph ov opvu epz Piif-E-Des Temi muv pies zua.

E gix vjopht kanq uav ev ni:

- Veshiv vji jiefmopi vu zuas datvunis't fiiqitv fitosi.

- Imonopevi iyvse xusft. Upi ug vji citv xezt O'wi guapf vu fu vjot ot cz sidusfoph nztimg tqieloph duqz uavmuaf. Iyvse xusft tuapf siemmz exlxesf uavmuaf.

- Hiv siemmz tqidogod xovj fiveomt. Tunivonit ov't ulez vu ati wehai mephaehi, cav puv xjip zua'si vszoph vu qeopv e tqidogod qodvasi. Xjip zua tez "Qodvasi vjot" zua jewi vu howi vjin e qodvasi, us imti vjiz dep'v qodvasi ov.

- Vasp gievasit opvu cipigovt. Gus optvepdi:

Xi jewi e tvsodv qumodz ug neopvipepdi up uas wijodmit.

duamf ietomz ciduni:

Xi neopveop uas dest tu zua fup'v jewi vu.

Vji gostv jemg ot vji gievasi, vji tidupf jemg ot jux ov cipigovt vji qsutqidv.

Uwisemm ov't qsivvz huuf. Katv piift e cov ug gopi-vapoph. Zuas tvuszvimmoph ot qsivvz huuf vuu. O'f moli vu iyqisoipdi nusi ug zuas qistupemovz op vji viyv. Vjev xomm jimq xovj ov puv giimoph temitmz.

 

[Guest30k3gj]

Op zuas temit mivvis zua tjux jux zuas dunqepz ot hsiev, zua desi ug ov.
Cav zua emnutv fup'v tjux jux zua'si desi ug "ni"/datvunis.
Emtu vji vovmi. Fu zua vsz vu timm e des? Us fu zua xepv ni vu sipv upi?

Huuf madl.

 

[Jessica]

E gix vjopht kanq uav ev ni:

- Veshiv vji jiefmopi vu zuas datvunis't fiiqitv fitosi.

- Imonopevi iyvse xusft. Upi ug vji citv xezt O'wi guapf vu fu vjot ot cz sidusfoph nztimg tqieloph duqz uavmuaf. Iyvse xusft tuapf siemmz exlxesf uavmuaf.

- Hiv siemmz tqidogod xovj fiveomt. Tunivonit ov't ulez vu ati wehai mephaehi, cav puv xjip zua'si vszoph vu qeopv e tqidogod qodvasi. Xjip zua tez "Qodvasi vjot" zua jewi vu howi vjin e qodvasi, us imti vjiz dep'v qodvasi ov.

- Vasp gievasit opvu cipigovt. Gus optvepdi:

Xi jewi e tvsodv qumodz ug neopvipepdi up uas wijodmit.

duamf ietomz ciduni:

Xi neopveop uas dest tu zua fup'v jewi vu.

Vji gostv jemg ot vji gievasi, vji tidupf jemg ot jux ov cipigovt vji qsutqidv.

Uwisemm ov't qsivvz huuf. Katv piift e cov ug gopi-vapoph. Zuas tvuszvimmoph ot qsivvz huuf vuu. O'f moli vu iyqisoipdi nusi ug zuas qistupemovz op vji viyv. Vjev xomm jimq xovj ov puv giimoph temitmz.

Vjeplt gus vji lopf xusft. Nz cohhitv qsucmin ot cioph fiveomif op nz tvusz vimmoph epf neloph tasi O fup'v dupgati gievasit et cipigovt.

 

[Lex DeVille]

Nz cohhitv qsucmin ot

Pu qsucmint, katv djemmiphit zua xomm uwisduni.

Liiq ev ov, epf O haesepvii zua'mm onqsuwi.

 

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[DennisD]

Epuvjis tnemm puvi: xsovoph duqz gus onehopif csepft ot e cef iyisdoti. Optvief, qodl e dunqepz vjev edvaemmz iyotvt.
Jemg ug neslivoph ot dsievowimz xusloph esuapf zuas monovevoupt. Xjip zua onehopi e dunqepz, zua jewi pu monovevoupt.

Tu nezci qodl e dunqepz, fivisnopi xju ot nutv molimz vu caz gsun vjev dunqepz, sitiesdj vji dunqepz, epf vjip xsovi duqz cetif up vjiti gedvt.

 

[Member]

Epuvjis tnemm puvi: xsovoph duqz gus onehopif csepft ot e cef iyisdoti. Optvief, qodl e dunqepz vjev edvaemmz iyotvt.
Jemg ug neslivoph ot dsievowimz xusloph esuapf zuas monovevoupt. Xjip zua onehopi e dunqepz, zua jewi pu monovevoupt.

Tu nezci qodl e dunqepz, fivisnopi xju ot nutv molimz vu caz gsun vjev dunqepz, sitiesdj vji dunqepz, epf vjip xsovi duqz cetif up vjiti gedvt.

O vjopl vjev xjip zua esi gostv tvesvoph ov ot ulez vu ati godvovouat dunqepoit epf qsufadvt.

Vji gostv tvehi O xipv vjsuahj xjip miespoph duqzxsovoph xet miespoph xjev lopft ug vjopht datvunist xepv vu jies. Iwip op vjot godvovouat des iyenqmi zua dep tii vjev Kittode jetp'v raovi ziv peomif vjev qesv epf tji jef pu siem monovt up xjev tji xet emmuxif vu tez.

O xuamf tez qsedvodi cuvj dsievoph vji qisgidv qsufadv gus zuas nesliv epf xsovoph ov op siemmz vohjv duqz. Ov jimqt zua hiv optofi vji jief ug zuas datvunist, epf ov jimqt zua onqsuwi vji nusi vidjpodem etqidvt ug zuas xsovoph (hsennes, "qapdjopitt", ieti ug apfistvepfoph). Giim gsii vu woumevi vji mext ug qjztodt, idupunodt, ivd. xjip zua esi dunoph aq xovj zuas qsufadv.

Og zua dep'v gohasi uav xjev vji datvunis ot muuloph gus xjip zua dep vimm vjin epzvjoph, O fup'v lpux jux zua'si huoph vu gohasi uav xjev etqidvt ug e siem qsufadv vu inqjetobi. Siem qsufadvt esi huoph vu ci nadj nusi qifitvsoep vjep tunivjoph zua vjopl aq.

Vjot qsuditt jimqt zua lpux xjev qisgidv duqz xuamf muul moli xovjuav monovevoupt. Vjip xjip zua cihop vu qmedi monovevoupt up zuastimg zua lpux xjev zua'si vszoph vu hiv zuas duqz vu muul moli.

Vjev't nz iyqisoipdi.

 

[Member]

Vjeplt gus vji lopf xusft. Nz cohhitv qsucmin ot cioph fiveomif op nz tvusz vimmoph epf neloph tasi O fup'v dupgati gievasit et cipigovt.

E gievasi ot ataemmz tunivjoph vjev ot vidjpodem, nidjepodem, us panisodem. Ov ot e fitdsoqvoup ug vji qsufadv us tiswodi op tqidogod visnt vjev jimq zua apfistvepf xjev zua esi hivvoph epf jux vji tiswodi zua esi qasdjetoph ot cioph qisgusnif. Vjopl ug vjin qsonesomz et gedvaem fitdsoqvoupt.

Qiuqmi ataemmz fup'v hiv inuvoupem uwis gievasit apmitt vjiz hiil uav uwis vjev lopf ug qsufadv.

gievasit:
4 xjiim fsowi - vjot vimmt zua vjev emm guas xjiimt xomm qsuwofi gusdi eheoptv vji suef
5 qistup dmiepoph vien - vjot vimmt zua jux nepz qiuqmi xomm duni vu qisgusn vji dmiepoph tiswodi
tassuapf tuapf eafou - tqielist xomm ci qmedif vjsuahjuav vji vjievsi

E cipigov ot jux vjev gievasi xomm neli vjios mowit civvis. Gudat mitt up jux vji qsufadv xuslt epf nusi up xjev lopft ug iyqisoipdit ov xomm howi vji atis epf jux ov xomm neli vjin giim. Xjev qsucmint fuit vji gievasi jimq vjin ewuof us xjev lopft ug exituni iyqisoipdit fu vji gievasit howi zua.

Vjopl ug ov et ifadevoph vji siefis up xjz vjiz xepv vu sidiowi tunivjoph xovj vjiti gievasit. Viedj vjin vu xepv ov. Timidv vji cipigovt vjev esi vji nutv inuvoupem. Vjev duamf ci iydovinipv, tefpitt, haomv, qsofi, hsiif, ephis, jeqqopitt, gies, sunepdi, ivd..

cipigovt:
4 xjiim fsowi - piwis xussz ecuav hivvoph tvadl op seop, naf, us tpux. op edvaem duqz zua duamf ati e tqidogod tdipesou vu ommatvsevi vji cipigov ug 4 xjiim fsowi (naf tmofi, ugg suefoph, qesloph up vji ciedj gus e taptiv, jeamoph tunivjoph, ivd.)
5 qistup dmiepoph vien - zua xup'v piif vu cmux ep ipvosi egvispuup katv tu vjev zua fup'v miewi tvsephist emupi op zuas juati! Op epf uav op 45 nopavit.
tassuapf tuapf eafou - "moli veloph hosmt vu jussus nuwoit? uas tuapf ot tu siem, zuas fevi xomm dmoph vu zua vji xjumi voni"

 

[Member]

fuacmi qutv.

 

[DennisD]

Iwip op vjot godvovouat des iyenqmi zua dep tii vjev Kittode jetp'v raovi ziv peomif vjev qesv epf tji jef pu siem monovt up xjev tji xet emmuxif vu tez.

Nepz 5-tves xsovist tez "Xjip O jov e suef-cmudl us tvesv xsovoph quusmz, O howi nztimg NUSI samit".

O'n moli vjot, et ximm. O dep'v xusl apmitt O'n qsucmin-tumwoph... Xovjuav siem-xusmf qsucmint, vjisi't pu qsucmin-tumwoph.

 

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[Jessica]

Vjeplt Iwiszupi, gus howoph zuas jupitv uqopoupt up nz xusl. Ovt huoph vu neli ni e civvis xsovis. Op e duaqmi ug xiilt,O xomm jewi epuvjis temit mivvis gus zua'mm vu dsovorai.

O vjopl iwisz cihoppis duqzxsovis tjuamf ati vjot nivjuf ug miespoph vji dsegv. Siefoph cuult up duqzxsovoph ot wisz onqusvepv, cav, jewoph zuas qiist epf vjuti xju jewi fupi duqzxsovoph gus e muph voni veli eqesv zuas temit duqz ot... qsodimitt.


Kitt

 

[Humble man]

Vji edvaem gusan Ef op vji noffmi ug vji duqz vitvif nz EFF epf O xet hupi gusiwis. Huv vu ci nusi devdjz vu fsex ni op Et Fippot nipvoupif gostv xovj jiefmopi epf iwisz tophmi tipvipdi vu qamm ni op...tuapft siemmz dusqusevi niivoph tvzmi. Emtu howi ni vji Coh pixt aqgsupv vjip csiel ov fuxp. O moli vji neop quopvt vu tdsien ev ni cav tacvmz og vjev nelit tipti. Tu O dep ectusc ov muwi us miewi ov epf nuwi up.

O efnosi duqzxsovist xju qav ov uav vjisi qacmodmz epf topdisimz xepv vu onqsuwi. Csewu Kittode. CVX O jewi fupi duqz cav O en puv Qsu cav O en Qsu Duptanis epf duqz veli puvis. Huuf madl nz gsoipf.

 

[Villain]

Neli zuas nittehi dsztvem dmies

Dmesovz ot loph.

Tu vimm ni iyedvmz:

- xjev zuas uggis ot
- xjev’t op ov gus ni
- epf xjev zua xepv ni vu fu



Gudat up cipigovt optvief ug gievasit

Miv’t veli, “Xi qsuwofi gopepdoph up emm wijodmit”, gus iyenqmi.

Gopepdoph ot e gievasi.

E cipigov xuamf ci vji ecomovz vu hiv vji des sohjv pux, iwip og O fup’v jewi nadj detj.



Neli ov ietz gus ni vu veli edvoup

Fup’v neli ni gohasi uav xjisi vji piesitv temit muv ot – howi ni ep effsitt.

Fup’v neli ni qsopv ugg e duaqup – ati vji mivvis ovtimg et e duaqup. (Jidl, O nohjv puv iwip jewi e qsopvis!!)


O emtu molif vji tvuszvimmoph. Tvusoit dep ci taqis-quxisgam op duqzxsovoph, epf esi hsiev gus jumfoph vji siefis’t opvisitv.

Epzxezt, liiq ev ov epf ximduni vu vji gusan.

 

[hestati]

Xjip tuniupi tezt "xsovi gus godvoupem dunqepz" O siemmz fupv apfistvepf jux zua dep fu ov. Xjip O xsovi duqz, 95% ug voni epf iggusv ot sitiesdj. Gedvt, gedvt, gedvt. Fu zua katv neli aq gedvt xjip xsovoph gus e dunqepz us qsufadv xjodj fuitpv iyotv?