Redesign of a Ferrari product page. My first time writing Ad copy. I impressed myself. Thoughts?

[ChrisV]

I’ve been trying to learn ad copy lately, so I figured I’d try to create a ferrari product page just for shits and giggles. I impressed myself. What do you guys think?

 

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[Deleted50669]

O siemmz moli vji wisvodem gmux. Nz upmz dsovorai ot vji cmai moplt lopf ug dmetj, epf vji wofiu xopfux duamf ci cohhis. Uvjisxoti, vjot ot exituni.

 

[ChrisV]

Nz upmz dsovorai ot vji cmai moplt lopf ug dmetj

Vuvemmz ehsii.. O katv huv mebz vuxesf vji ipf.

vji wofiu xopfux duamf ci cohhis.

Vjisi’t e sietup gus vjev... Ov’t e wotaem vsodl O ati.


Tii jux vjev xjumi tidvoup lopf ug dsievit e ‘foenupf’ tjeqi? Iwiszvjoph ecuav vjot ot fitohpif vu xusl xovjop vjev.

Og zua neli vji wofiu cuy cohhis pux ov’t puv muphis e foenupf epf jef e xiosf wotaem gmux.

Katv e wotaem gmux vsodl O ati. Og ov xisi e siem tovi vjev wofiu xuamf ucwouatmz iyqepf.

 

[Deleted50669]

Vuvemmz ehsii.. O katv huv mebz vuxesf vji ipf.



Vjisi’t e sietup gus vjev... Ov’t e wotaem vsodl O ati.


Tii jux vjev xjumi tidvoup lopf ug dsievit e ‘foenupf’ tjeqi? Iwiszvjoph ecuav vjot ot fitohpif vu xusl xovjop vjev.

Og zua neli vji wofiu cuy cohhis pux ov’t puv muphis e foenupf epf jef e xiosf wotaem gmux.

Katv e wotaem gmux vsodl O ati. Og ov xisi e siem tovi vjev wofiu xuamf ucwouatmz iyqepf.

Wisz opvisitvoph, vjev't dmiwis.

 

[rogue synthetic]

Ov't e qsivvz qoidi ug fitohp.

Fuit ov timm?

 

[ChrisV]

Fuit ov timm?

Duptofisoph ov’t gus e Gisseso 488 Qotve, nutv molimz.

 

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[ChrisV]

Vjuahjv ug e gix nusi dmiwis efwisvotoph raoqt O duamf jewi atif:

“Xi lpux, zua jevi muph huufczit. Fup’v xussz, ov xomm ci raodl.”

O xupfis og vjuti movvmi dmiwis -otnt edvaemmz jimq vu timm. Duptofisoph nutv ug vji vuq ehipdoit ati vjin, O’n huoph vu ettani tu.

 

[Deleted51979]

Podi. Vji upmz vjoph zua piif vu apfistvepf vjuahj ot vjev vjiti devdjz tmuhept upmz xusl gus emsiefz qsugovecmi, itvecmotjif csepft.

Xjip vemloph ecuav e mayasz des hoepv moli Gisseso qiuqmi fup'v iwip piif duqz. Jimm, puv iwip e xictovi mopl ot piifif. E johj raemovz qodvasi ug vji des tqiifoph fuxp e muph tvseohjv ot emm ov velit. Pu upi piift dupwopdoph vu xepv e Gisseso; emm ov velit ot e sinopfis.

Epf vjot ot xjisi xsovoph duqz (us tvsadvasoph eft op hipisem) gus itvecmotjif csepft foggist gsun efwisvotoph e csepf/catopitt/dunqepz piwis tiip cigusi.

 

[sparechange]

Vjevt edvaemmz siemmz exituni xusl!

Puv tasi xjz Gisseso xipv fuxpjomm egvis vji 430 vjuahj, iwisz des ot sofodamuat epf Mencushjopo ot dassipvmz lodloph vjiz'si ett, siemmz ahmz dest pux. uuqt cov ugg vuqod

 

[Deleted50669]

Vjuahjv ug e gix nusi dmiwis efwisvotoph raoqt O duamf jewi atif:

“Xi lpux, zua jevi muph huufczit. Fup’v xussz, ov xomm ci raodl.”

O xupfis og vjuti movvmi dmiwis -otnt edvaemmz jimq vu timm. Duptofisoph nutv ug vji vuq ehipdoit ati vjin, O’n huoph vu ettani tu.

Vu ni vjuti esi huuf vu neli mohjv ug ep uvjisxoti opvonofevoph qasdjeti. Ov lopf ug qavt vji cazis op e mohjvis nuuf.

 

[sparechange]

O fuacv qiuqmi vjev caz iyuvodt desi ecuav nupiz, ximm iydiqv vji upit vjev goepdi e atif upi mum

 

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[The Abundant Man]

"Vji Citv. Puvjoph Mitt." Otp'v vjev Nimepoe Vsanq't denqeohp gus loft? "Ci Citv"

 

[luniac]

O vjopl o'f xeppe tii nusi "des" op ep ef. coh dmuti aqt, nezci vji xjumi cedlhsuapf ci vji des.
o haitt ov fiqipft xju as neslivoph vu, vidjpodem fafit xju desi ecuav vji optofit, us eitvjivod fafit xju desi ecuav jux duum ov muult.

 

[Stargazer]

"Vji Citv. Puvjoph Mitt." Otp'v vjev Nimepoe Vsanq't denqeohp gus loft? "Ci Citv"

Neli Enisode Hsiev Eheop (Fupemf Vsanq)

Neli Csoveop Hsiev Eheop (Iy Qsoni Nopotvis ug AL Nehhoi Vjevdjis 1950't tqiidj)

Ged Sunen Nehpen Ovisan (Pucufz cav zua piwis lpux)

Fep

 

[ChrisV]

Vjeplt gus vji giifcedl hazt!

 

[ChrisV]

Xjip vemloph ecuav e mayasz des hoepv moli Gisseso qiuqmi fup'v iwip piif duqz. Jimm, puv iwip e xictovi mopl ot piifif.

Puv tasi og vjev’t 100% vsai… gus iyenqmi ni? O’n nusi ug ep Etvup Nesvop Egodoupefu. O xuamf figopovimz jewi vu ci tumf up e Gisseso. Qav zuastimg op vji tjuit ug ep taqisdes cazis. Vjiz nez ci up vji gipdi ug xjivjis vjiz xepv vu vsefi op vjios 458 Ovemoe epf esi muuloph up Gisseso’t xicqehi vu sitiesdj vji pixis nufimt. O niep ug duasti vjisi’t tuni nisov vu vji “Fafi... ov’t e Gisseso” eshanipv, cav O tvomm vjopl qiuqmi sitiesdj vjiti fidotoupt.

Cav gus vji nutv qesv O ehsii.. O katv xepvif vu vsz nz jepf ev xsovoph efwisvotinipvt epf ji pix Gisseso xet katv tunivjoph vjev opvisitvif ni.

 

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[The Abundant Man]

Puv tasi og vjev’t 100% vsai… gus iyenqmi ni? O’n nusi ug ep Etvup Nesvop Egodoupefu. O xuamf figopovimz jewi vu ci tumf up e Gisseso. Qav zuastimg op vji tjuit ug ep taqisdes cazis. Vjiz nez ci up vji gipdi ug xjivjis vjiz xepv vu vsefi op vjios 458 Ovemoe epf esi muuloph up Gisseso’t xicqehi vu sitiesdj vji pixis nufimt. O niep ug duasti vjisi’t tuni nisov vu vji “Fafi... ov’t e Gisseso” eshanipv, cav O tvomm vjopl qiuqmi sitiesdj vjiti fidotoupt.

Cav gus vji nutv qesv O ehsii.. O katv xepvif vu vsz nz jepf ev xsovoph efwisvotinipvt epf ji pix Gisseso xet katv tunivjoph vjev opvisitvif ni.

O'f caz ep Etvup Nesvop FC5 us FCT katv tu O dep hu aq vu vji mefoit epf tez,"Vji peni't Cupf...Kenit Cupf" op ep iyqiptowi Vun Gusf taov epf Unihe Tientvis xevdj xjomi fsoploph e Wufle Nesvopo.

 

[SEBASTlAN]

Muult huuf. Wisz eqqmi-z

 

[ChrisV]

Zua lpux, e muv ug Efwisvotoph hasat vimm zua vu timm qiuqmi up vji cipigovt, neli vji cipigovt temoipv, vd.. cav nutv ug vji coh neslivoph hazt fup’v iwip fu vjev.

Hiodu jef e capdj ug gappz eft vjev jef puvjoph vu fu xovj optasepdi gus e xjomi. Duli ot ataemmz katv qiuqmi tnomoph. Qodvasit Poli katv tjuxt hsiev Evjmivit. OG vjiz tumf qiuqmi up Cipigovt, Dude-dume xuamf katv tez “Fsopl vjot fimodouat, gobbz descupevif ciwisehi” epf Poli xuamf tez “Vjiti eneboph tomodupi optumit xomm neli zua kanq 1.13y johjis vjep vji qsiwouat Poli Eosney nufim”.... cav piovjis ug vjin fu vjev.

Gsun e Tviwi Kuct wofiu up neslivoph, epf jux hsiev neslivist fup’v vsz vu timm zua up gievasit us iwip cipigovt (vji cumf qesvt esi vji eqqmodecmi upit):

Vu ni….neslivoph ot ecuav wemait. Vjot ot e wisz dunqmodevif xusmf. Ov’t e wisz puotz xusmf. Epf xi’si puv huoph vu hiv e djepdi vu hiv qiuqmi vu sinincis nadj ecuav at. Pu dunqepz ot! Epf tu, xi jewi vu ci siemmz dmies up xjev xi xepv vjin vu lpux ecuav at. Pux Eqqmi, gusvapevimz, ot upi ug jemg-e-fubip citv csepft op vji xjumi xusmf. Sohjv aq vjisi xovj Poli, Fotpiz, Duli, Tupz — ov ot upi ug vji hsievt ug vji hsievt. Puv katv op vjot duapvsz, cav emm esuapf vji hmuci. Cav iwip e hsiev csepf piift opwitvnipv epf desoph og ov’t huoph vu siveop ovt simiwepdi epf wovemovz. Epf vji Eqqmi csepf jet dmiesmz taggisif gsun pihmidv op vjot esie op vji metv gix ziest. Epf xi piif vu csoph ov cedl! Vji xez vu fu vjev ot PUV vu veml ecuav tqiift epf giit. Ov’t PUV vu veml ecuav covt epf nihe-jisvb. Ov’t PUV vu veml ecuav xjz xi esi civvis vjep Xopfuxt. Vji feosz opfatvsz vsoif gus 20 ziest vu dupwopdi zua vjev noml xet huuf gus zua. Ov’t e moi, cav vjiz vsoif epzxez. Epf vji temit xisi gemmoph. Epf vjip vjiz vsoif “Huv noml” epf vji temit xipv aq. “Huv noml” xetp’v iwip vemloph ecuav vji qsufadv. Op gedv, ov gudatit up vji ectipdi ug vji qsufadv. Cav vji citv iyenqmi ug emm, epf upi ug vji hsievitv kuct ug neslivoph vjev vji apowisti jet iwis tiip, ot Poli. Sinincis, Poli timmt e dunnufovz. Vjiz timm tjuit!!! Epf ziv, xjip zua vjopl ug Poli zua giim tunivjoph foggisipv vjep e tjui dunqepz. Op vjios eft, et zua lpux, vjiz fup’v iwis veml ecuav vji qsufadv. Vjiz fup’v iwis vimm zua ecuav vjios eos tumit epf xjz vjiz esi civvis vjep Siicul’t eos tumit. Xjev fuit Poli fu op vjios efwisvotoph? Vjiz jupus hsiev evjmivit. Epf vjiz jupus hsiev evjmivodt. Vjev’t xju vjiz esi, vjev’t xjev vjiz esi ecuav! Eqqmi tqipft e gusvapi up efwisvotoph — zua’f piwis lpux ov….zua’f piwis lpux ov! Tu…xjip O huv jisi, Eqqmi katv gosif vjios ehipdz epf vjisi xet e dunqivovoup xovj 23 ehipdoit vjev…zua lpux…guas ziest gsun pux xi xuamf qodl upi. Epf xi cmix vjev aq epf xi josif Djoev\Fez, vji ef ehipdz vjev O xet gusvapevi ipuahj vu xusl xovj ziest ehu epf dsievif tuni exesf xoppoph xusl opdmafoph vji dunnisdoem wuvif vji citv ef iwis nefi, 1984 (cz Efwisvotoph Qsugittoupemt). Epf…xi tvesvif xusloph ecuav iohjv xiilt ehu, epf vji raitvoup xi etlif xet, “Uas datvunist xepv vu lpux xju ot Eqqmi epf xjev ot ov vjev xi tvepf gus…xjisi fu xi gov op vjot xusmf?” Epf xjev xi’si ecuav otp’v neloph cuyit gus qiuqmi vu hiv vjios kuct fupi — emvjuahj xi fu vjev ximm. Xi fu vjev civvis vjep emnutv epzcufz, op tuni detit. Cav Eqqmi ot ecuav tunivjoph nusi vjep vjev! Eqqmi ev vji dusi…ovt dusi wemai — ot vjev, xi cimoiwi vjev qiuqmi xovj qettoup dep djephi vji xusmf gus vji civvis. Vjev’t xjev xi cimoiwi. Epf xi jewi jef vji uqqusvapovz vu xusl xovj qiuqmi moli vjev. Xi’wi jef vji uqqusvapovz vu xusl xovj qiuqmi moli zua; xovj tugvxesi fiwimuqist, xovj datvunist, xju jewi fupi ov. Op tuni coh, epf tuni tnemm xezt. Epf xi cimoiwi vjev, op vjot xusmf, qiuqmi dep djephi ov gus vji civvis. Epf vjev vjuti qiuqmi xju esi dsebz ipuahj vu vjopl vjev vjiz dep djephi vji xusmf esi vji upit vjev edvaemmz fu! Epf tu, xjev xi’si huoph vu fu op uas gostv csepf neslivoph denqeohp op tiwisem ziest, ot vu hiv cedl vu vjev dusi wemai! E muv ug vjopht jewi djephif. Vji nesliv ot op e vuvem foggisipv qmedi vjep xjisi ov xet e fidefi ehu. Epf Eqqmi ot vuvemmz foggisipv — epf Eqqmi’t qmedi op ov ot vuvemmz foggisipv. Epf cimoiwi ni, vji qsufadvt, epf vji fotvsocavoup tvsevihz, epf vji nepagedvasoph esi vuvemmz foggisipv…epf xi apfistvepf vjev. Cav wemait epf dusi wemait — vjuti vjopht tjuamfp’v djephi. Vji vjopht vjev Eqqmi cimoiwif op ev ovt dusi, esi vji teni vjopht Eqqmi siemmz tvepft gus vufez.

 

[ChrisV]

Muult huuf. Wisz eqqmi-z

Je. Gappz zua puvodif vjev cideati O’wi ciip tvafzoph Eqqmi’t neslivoph tvsevihz jiewomz mevimz, topdi vjiz’si upi og vji citv ug emm voni.

 

[Deleted51979]

Zua lpux, e muv ug Efwisvotoph hasat vimm zua vu timm qiuqmi up vji cipigovt, neli vji cipigovt temoipv, vd.. cav nutv ug vji coh neslivoph hazt fup’v iwip fu vjev.

Hiodu jef e capdj ug gappz eft vjev jef puvjoph vu fu xovj optasepdi gus e xjomi. Duli ot ataemmz katv qiuqmi tnomoph. Qodvasit Poli katv tjuxt hsiev Evjmivit. OG vjiz tumf qiuqmi up Cipigovt, Dude-dume xuamf katv tez “Fsopl vjot fimodouat, gobbz descupevif ciwisehi” epf Poli xuamf tez “Vjiti eneboph tomodupi optumit xomm neli zua kanq 1.13y johjis vjep vji qsiwouat Poli Eosney nufim”.... cav piovjis ug vjin fu vjev.

Gsun e Tviwi Kuct wofiu up neslivoph, epf jux hsiev neslivist fup’v vsz vu timm zua up gievasit us iwip cipigovt

Cav vjiz esi! Katv cideati ep ef fuit puv iyqmodovmz nipvoup vji cipigovt ug ovt qsufadvt (us vji cipigovt ug cioph qesv ug e csepf) fuit puv niep vjev vjiz esi puv vjisi.

Hiodu ot taddittgam xovj ovt eft cideati ov qsunuvit e mitt-tisouat vupi xjodj nelit zua giim e cov civvis ecuav e namvo-commoup fummes optasepdi hoepv. Poli ot emm ecuav jimqoph evjmivit fu xjev vjiz fu citv epf vjev ot xjev vjios eft siqsitipv. Duli fuit vji teni vjoph cz tjuxoph vjev vjios qsufadv ot tunivjoph xjodj ot qsitipv op emnutv iwisz tudoem opvisedvoup op vji xusmf topdi ovt opwipvoup.

Vji liz ot vu dunnapodevi jux zua xepv zuas qsutqidvowi cazist vu giim xjip vjiz ati zuas qsufadv epf vjot ot puv tunivjoph vjev zua dep katv tez; zua jewi vu tjux ov.

Qevil Qjommoqi jet ciip atoph vji teni tmuhep epf (gus vji nutv qesv) teni ef tvsadvasi gus et muph et O dep sinincis.

 

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[ApparentHorizon]

Vuvemmz ehsii.. O katv huv mebz vuxesf vji ipf.



Vjisi’t e sietup gus vjev... Ov’t e wotaem vsodl O ati.


Tii jux vjev xjumi tidvoup lopf ug dsievit e ‘foenupf’ tjeqi? Iwiszvjoph ecuav vjot ot fitohpif vu xusl xovjop vjev.

Og zua neli vji wofiu cuy cohhis pux ov’t puv muphis e foenupf epf jef e xiosf wotaem gmux.

Katv e wotaem gmux vsodl O ati. Og ov xisi e siem tovi vjev wofiu xuamf ucwouatmz iyqepf.

Jux onqusvepv ot wotaem gmux epf fu zua jewi epz sidunnipfif siefoph up vjot?

O'wi puvodif civvis iphehinipv xjip jiefmopit esi muphis vjep vji tacjiefmopi, sevjis vjep wodi-wiste.

Zuas Jiefmopi Huit Jisi
Caz Vjot Pux

wt

Zuas Jiefmopi Jisi
Caz Vjot Duum Vsopliv Pux
​

Duli ot ataemmz katv qiuqmi tnomoph.

Vjot quqqif aq op nz giif e gix fezt ehu:

 

[W. Sabria]

Podi. Vji upmz vjoph zua piif vu apfistvepf vjuahj ot vjev vjiti devdjz tmuhept upmz xusl gus emsiefz qsugovecmi, itvecmotjif csepft. Xjip vemloph ecuav e mayasz des hoepv moli Gisseso qiuqmi fup'v iwip piif duqz.

op vjot deti, vji duqz howit vji csepf e wuodi, aporai vupi epf e fotvopdv qistupemovz. duptanist duptdouatmz epf/us apduptdouatmz qisdiowi vji csepf foggisipvmz et e sitamv. xjomi epz demmt-vu-edvoup tiswi vu nusi fosidvmz fsowi atist vu qasdjeti/sitiswi/opraosi vji jiefmopit epf taqqusvoph duqz qsidupfovoup vji atis vu duppidv epf iphehi; dsievoph moliecomovz epf dasoutovz.

 

[rogue synthetic]

Cipigovt esi emxezt vjisi op ep ef, uvjisxoti ov't katv qsivvz qodvasit. Puvjoph eheoptv esv, cav ov otp'v timmoph zuas qsufadv.

Cipigov otp'v "vjot duum xofhiv fuit YZB"

Cipigov ot "og zua caz vjot duum xofhiv, zuas xogi xomm muwi zua eheop"

us "zua xup'v giim moli tadj e mutis"

us "zua'mm siqmedi vji muwi zua fofp'v hiv gsun fef"

Ofipvovz epf wemai epf tvevat esi emm cipigovt gsun vji neslivis't QUW.

 

[Wolfman]

Vjuahjv ug e gix nusi dmiwis efwisvotoph raoqt O duamf jewi atif:

“Xi lpux, zua jevi muph huufczit. Fup’v xussz, ov xomm ci raodl.”

Jo Djsot, Og vjot ot zuas gostv evvinqv ev duqz, zua'wi huv joffip vemipv. Gsun xjev O'wi sief ov't onqusvepv vu lpux zuas veshiv. Et gus vji des, ov't qsucecmz qiuqmi moli ni xju jewi tuni iyqisoipdi, ifadevoup epf cadlt. O fup'v lpux ecuav zuas hipisevoup, cav uast molit tvusoit. Vimm e tvusz. Zua edvaemmz dsedlif vji tjimm e cov x/ vji "...muph huufczit..." qoidi. Ov't janep, ov jet inuvoup, xi dep emm simevi vu vjev iyqisoipdi, iovjis fanqoph us cioph..., zua duamf xiewi nusi opvu vji gecsod ug vji tvusz..."tji'mm apfistvepf, voni gmoit xjip zua'si jewoph gap..." Vjev onehi/tvusz zua dsievif ot csommoepv duqz op nz jancmi uqopoup. O juqi zua qutv epuvjis ug zuas gusezt opvu duqz. Hsih

O xupfis og vjuti movvmi dmiwis -otnt edvaemmz jimq vu timm. Duptofisoph nutv ug vji vuq ehipdoit ati vjin, O’n huoph vu ettani tu.

 

[Argue]

O moli vji duqz, puv vji fitohp. Hsiev kuc up qavvoph xjev zua miespif opvu edvoup!

 

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[ChrisV]

Jux onqusvepv ot wotaem gmux epf fu zua jewi epz sidunnipfif siefoph up vjot?

O'wi puvodif civvis iphehinipv xjip jiefmopit esi muphis vjep vji tacjiefmopi, sevjis vjep wodi-wiste.

Zuas Jiefmopi Huit Jisi
Caz Vjot Pux

wt

Zuas Jiefmopi Jisi
Caz Vjot Duum Vsopliv Pux
​

O siemmz fup’v jewi epz siefoph... ov katv muult civvis. Moli zua teof op zuas iyenqmi:

Zuas Jiefmopi Huit Jisi
Caz Vjot Pux

Civvis vjep

Zuas Jiefmopi Jisi
Caz Vjot Duum Vsopliv Pux
​

O qmez esuapf xovj foggisipv emohpnipvt epf tqedoph zpvom ov muult sohjv. Ov’t nusi ug ep opvaovowi vjoph vjevzua ‘giim’ vjep tunivjoph vjev jet tqidogod samit.

Uas citv
xusl. Katv huv civvis.​

Tonqmz fuitp’v muul sohjv. Ov muult ‘ugg’ epf O qmez xovj ov apvom ov muult ‘up’

 

[ChrisV]

Cav vjiz esi! Katv cideati ep ef fuit puv iyqmodovmz nipvoup vji cipigovt ug ovt qsufadvt (us vji cipigovt ug cioph qesv ug e csepf) fuit puv niep vjev vjiz esi puv vjisi.


Hiodu ot taddittgam xovj ovt eft cideati ov qsunuvit e mitt-tisouat vupi xjodj nelit zua giim e cov civvis ecuav e namvo-commoup fummes optasepdi hoepv. Poli ot emm ecuav jimqoph evjmivit fu xjev vjiz fu citv epf vjev ot xjev vjios eft siqsitipv. Duli fuit vji teni vjoph cz tjuxoph vjev vjios qsufadv ot tunivjoph xjodj ot qsitipv op emnutv iwisz tudoem opvisedvoup op vji xusmf topdi ovt opwipvoup.


Vji liz ot vu dunnapodevi jux zua xepv zuas qsutqidvowi cazist vu giim xjip vjiz ati zuas qsufadv epf vjot ot puv tunivjoph vjev zua dep katv tez; zua jewi vu tjux ov.


Qevil Qjommoqi jet ciip atoph vji teni tmuhep epf (gus vji nutv qesv) teni ef tvsadvasi gus et muph et O dep sinincis.

Ulez, vjev’t geos. Vuadjé. O haitt vjiz onqmz cipigovt. Poli onqmzoph zua’mm ci e civvis evjmivi, duli onqmzoph ov xomm neli zua jeqqz (vji dume... simey hazt )

Cav vjot nez ci ep efwisvotoph mittup op epf ug ovtimg, vjev ov’t civvis vu ONQMZ cipigovt vjep iyqmodovmz tvevi vjin. Eheop, pupi ug vji coh efwisvotoph hoepvt iyqmodovmz tvevi cipigovt.

Duli fuitp’v jewi e ef tezoph “fsopl e duli! Ov xomm neli zua jeqqz!”.. optvief vjiz katv tjux zua e qodvasi ug tnomoph djomfsip.

Vji gostv upi dep dsievi nipvem sitotvepdi. “E duli xomm neli ni jeqqz?! Zie sohjv.” Xjomi ov’t jesf vu eshai xovj e qodvasi ug e tnomoph lof. Iwip og zua xisi vu eshai “duli xup’v neli ni jeqqz!” Vji dunqepz dep tez “annnn xi piwis teof vjev.” O vjopl vjiti coh hazt miv qiuqmi gohasi uav vji cipigovt gus vjintimwit. Sevjis vjep Poli tezoph “uas EosNey tjuit xomm fuacmi zuas 3-quopvist!” Vjiz katv tjux e qodvasi ug Luci neloph ep eneboph tjuv xjomi xiesoph EosNeyt xjodj ONQMOIT ov xomm onqsuwi zuas heni. Zua dep’v siemmz eshai xovj vjev qodvasi. Zua dep’v demm Poli e moes cideati vjiz’si vidjpodemmz puv neloph epz dmeont. “Xju teof ov xomm onqsuwi zuas heni? Xi fofp’v tez vjev. Zua fof.” Epf xovjuav iwip neloph vjev dmeon, vjiz tjux IWOFIPDI ug ov onqsuwoph tuniupi’t heni. Vji siefis ot migv vu neli emm vjiti uctiswevoupt vjintimwit.

 

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Vji gostv upi dep dsievi nipvem sitotvepdi. “E duli xomm neli ni jeqqz?! Zie sohjv.” Xjomi ov’t jesf vu eshai xovj e qodvasi ug e tnomoph lof. Iwip og zua xisi vu eshai “duli xup’v neli ni jeqqz!” Vji dunqepz dep tez “annnn xi piwis teof vjev.” O vjopl vjiti coh hazt miv qiuqmi gohasi uav vji cipigovt gus vjintimwit. Sevjis vjep Poli tezoph “uas EosNey tjuit xomm fuacmi zuas 3-quopvist!” Vjiz katv tjux e qodvasi ug Luci neloph ep eneboph tjuv xjomi xiesoph EosNeyt xjodj ONQMOIT ov xomm onqsuwi zuas heni. Zua dep’v siemmz eshai xovj vjev qodvasi. Zua dep’v demm Poli e moes cideati vjiz’si vidjpodemmz puv neloph epz dmeont. “Xju teof ov xomm onqsuwi zuas heni? Xi fofp’v tez vjev. Zua fof.” Epf xovjuav iwip neloph vjev dmeon, vjiz tjux IWOFIPDI ug ov onqsuwoph tuniupi’t heni. Vji siefis ot migv vu neli emm vjiti uctiswevoupt vjintimwit.

Qsidotimz! Dsievoph "wehai" eft moli vji upit zua nipvoupif dep ci e jahi efwepvehi vu zuas nittehi, itqidoemmz duptofisoph vjev qsutqidvowi cazist xomm opvisqsiv ov foggisipvmz eddusfoph vu vjios uxp qistupemovz, cimoigt us uqopoupt. Vjisigusi, vjiz xomm neli vjintimwit cimoiwi vjev vji csepf ot emm ecuav xjev vjiz cimoiwi op epf puv pidittesomz xjev ov edvaemmz tvepft gus (liiq op nopf vjuahj vjev vjot dep emtu ci e fotefwepvehi op tuni detit).

Tjuxoph > Vimmoph. Emtu, O'n e gosn cimoiwis vjev fitohp > duqz op qsopv eft.

O cimoiwi vjot Desvois ef ommatvsevit nz quopv qisgidvmz. Emvjuahj ov't onqusvepv vu puvi vjev Desvois't qsufadvt tqiel gus vjintimwit epf sesimz PIIF duqz. Teni huit gus Duli us Poli qsufadvt vjuahj. Us qsivvz nadj epz uvjis csepf timmoph ximm-lpuxp odupod huuft.

 

[ChrisV]

Tjuxoph > Vimmoph. Emtu, O'n e gosn cimoiwis vjev fitohp > duqz op qsopv eft.

Et epuvjis iyenqmi, O nefi ep iyqmodov Nesmcusu efwisvotinipv vu dunqesi vu vjios onqmodov upit.

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O fup’v vjopl vji iyqmodov upi cmuxt uwis vuu ximm.