Need Help With Ad Copy (Real Estate Niche)

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So I'm going to be promoting a real estate offer and I'm looking for help with my ad copy.

Any real estate investors or copy gurus that could help me fine-tune the copy and make it just right for the target market?!

Thank you kindly!

This is the offer: BirdDogBot - The Search Engine for Real Estate Investors

This is the copy:

"Tired of spending countless hours going through craigslist, realtor, zillow and other sites trying to find the best real estate investment deals?

Then try this easy to use online search engine that will automate the process for you! Think of all the hours it will save you each week!!!

Try it today risk free!"

Target demo: Real estate investors

Site where I'll be advertising: Facebook.

 

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"Stop pending countless hours going through craigslist, realtor, zillow and other sites trying to find the best real estate investment deals!

Use this search engine and save 10+ hours each week!

That's 10+ extra hours that you you can spend with friends & family, on yourself, or working on other aspects of your real estate empire!

Try it risk free today for just $7."


Little bit better, me thinks.

 

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"Stop pending countless hours going through craigslist, realtor, zillow and other sites trying to find the best real estate investment deals!

Use this search engine and save 10+ hours each week!

That's 10+ extra hours that you you can spend with friends & family, on yourself, or working on other aspects of your real estate empire!

Try it risk free today for just $7."


Little bit better, me thinks.

What's the end result your service is going to give?
What is saving 10+ hours going to do for them?
What does finding the best real estate investment deal translate too?
What does a real estate investor care about the most?

Answer those questions, then break it down into one short, but benefit packed headline without sounding cheesy or like a scam.