a few sentences instead of hours of courses, thank you..Hey @Fab89,
Here are some of my thoughts.
1. Your original email is lacking. Here's why:
Subject: How can I help your organization? (Vague Subject Line)
Note: You want to use a better headline. Make it personalized.
- For example: SuperPizza, We Can Help You...
My name is Fab
and I live in [my local area].
- Don't write where you live. Instead, introduce yourself as the company.
- Example: My name is Fab and I'm from [add company name].
I am looking to become an entrepreneur
I have a background in software development and mechanical engineering.
- Remove this. Companies want professionals, not beginners.
I was wondering if you would be able to share any problems or frustrations [organization] has at all.
Example: I see that you have a high bounce rate that's causing a decrease in revenue. My company helps create more traffic. We help optimize websites to keep bounce rates low. (Don't write this. This is just an example.) Of course, you want to keep the writing personalized. Avoid technical jargon.
- Remove this. Do your homework before writing to a company. Instead, present the company's problems.
I'm hoping to find a solution and sharing it with you so you can make a profit or become more efficient.
Example: Our focus is to help maintain traffic to your site. We help keep bounce rates low. We generate more traffic through referrals. Lastly, we create more long-term clients through our SEO techniques. We can help achieve this for you. You save time and money!
- Avoid saying this. This statement tells the reader you have no clue what you're doing. Instead, talk about how your company can help provide solutions to their problem.
(Don't say this, I'm trying to illustrate a point.)
Maybe there is a better solution with ordering stock or dealing with customers. Please share anything and I will be happy to look into it.
2. Do your homework. Here's why:
- The reader may interpret this the wrong way. In their perspective, your company looks lazy. You did no homework (research). Failed to address their pain points and frustrations. You failed to provide solutions to their problems.
Before writing to any company, research what kind of company are they.
- Draw up a User Persona.
- Who: Pizza company with mobile app that guarantees fast delivery.
- Goals: Their goal is to get subscribers to their app.
- Frustrations: Customers use the app one time, and don't subscribe. Customers leave the app because of slow delivery time.~~~~
In summary, these are a few examples. These tips help you get an idea for your next e-mail campaign.
- Solution: Our team at Legend Developers help generate new subscribers and avoid slow delivery times.
- How: We offer special rewards to help get new long-term subscribers. We use special referral programs subscribers love. Lastly, our new technology helps speed up delivery time.
I would suggest reading more about cold-emails.
- search the forum
- search Google
- search Amazon