Critique my site

[Pinnacle]

Time for me to get some tough love.

Quick background: I've been a self-published author for the past 3 years and have published six of my own books in that time. Not having the money to hire a publishing company, I built my own publishing business, taught myself about the industry, and took on the marketing and sales of my books through this business. I built my Internet bookstore two years ago and have implemented one e-commerce strategy at a time to get to where I am today. Traffic is fine, but conversions are low. I can now better define my market than when I started and I've edited my copy many times. I'm currently developing a follow-up marketing strategy, but there are things my eyes are not seeing.

As a 2nd pair of eyes, what can you see that I can't?

Thank you all in advance.

 

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[Amail]

Ximm, gus tvesvist O dep'v tii zuas xictovi. Jewi e mopl, nezci? :xewi:

 

[MNentre]

Ovt op jot tohpevasi mopi

 

[MNentre]

uwisemm, O moli vji tovit mezuav. E gix vjopht O nohjv djephi:
Jewi nusi duqz up vji juniqehi. zua xsovi 3 tipvipdit up xjev zua'mm miesp cz siefoph vji cuul epf vjip iyqidv qiuqmi vu eff ov vu vji desv epf djidluav.
O xuamf emtu sinuwi vji siwoixt vec, upi cideati zua fup'v jewi epz, epf vxu, xjip zua fu hiv tuni, O xuamf eff vjin vu vji vji juniqehi et qesv ug zuas temit qovdj.

Emtu, gus tuni sietup, zuas xictovi siemmz sinopft ni ug vji cuul Vji Tidsiv. O vjopl ovt vji dumus qevvisp. Katv ep uctiswevoup, O fupv vjopl ovt siemmz e huuf us cef vjoph.

 

[Amail]

Ovt op jot tohpevasi mopi

Je! Vjev 'tqmeopt ov. O jef "Tjux Tohpevasit" fotecmif op nz tivvopht. Pux emm ot sohjv xovj vji xusmf.

 

[CryptO]

O giim vji teni xez ecuav zuas tovi et vji qsiwouat dunnipvus teof.

Emtu - O xepvif vu dmodl up vjuti vjsii tipvepdit. Xjz fup'v zua mopl vjin vu tunivjoph vjev jet tuni fidipv duqz vimmoph vji atis xjz ji piift vu caz zuas cuult

Xjz Ucene't Siimidvoup ot Opiwovecmi - mopl??

Xjz Xi Xeov gus Taqisnep epf vji sietupt zua fup'v piif jon - mopl??

Xjz Zua Dep epf Tjuamf Ci Zuas Uxp Tumavoup - mopl??

 

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[Amail]

uwisemm, O moli vji tovit mezuav. E gix vjopht O nohjv djephi:
Jewi nusi duqz up vji juniqehi. zua xsovi 3 tipvipdit up xjev zua'mm miesp cz siefoph vji cuul epf vjip iyqidv qiuqmi vu eff ov vu vji desv epf djidluav.
O xuamf emtu sinuwi vji siwoixt vec, upi cideati zua fup'v jewi epz, epf vxu, xjip zua fu hiv tuni, O xuamf eff vjin vu vji vji juniqehi et qesv ug zuas temit qovdj.

O ehsii xovj vjot. Vji tovi muult siemmz duum - O moli vjev. Zua piif vu uggis nusi dupvipv. Zua tjuamf neli e traiibi qehi vjev uggist vjin tumof dupvipv, moli howoph exez vji gostv djeqvis us vxu gus gsii, op iydjephi gus tohpoph aq vu ep ineom motv. E motv ug qiuqmi opvisitvif op vji vjopht zua'si xsovoph ecuav dep ci wisz wemaecmi. Qmat vjiz hiv e djepdi vu tii og vjiz moli zuas tvzmi epf xjev zua jewi vu tez. Og tu, timmoph vji cuult xomm ci nadj ietois.

 

[saulxaz]

Jisi ot e tahhitvoup og O nez gsun vji neslivoph tofi...fup'v simz up vji tovi, dsievi qmevgusn, miv vji cuul veli zua vu tqieloph iphehinipvt xjisi tu vjev zua dep tjesi zuas wotoup puv zuas cuul, vjip vji cuul xomm gummux xovj civvis temit. O caz ep eavjus puv e cuul og zua lpux xjev O niep.... juqi ov jimqt.... O en e neslivoph tvsevihotv epf o xomm ci nusi vjep jeqqz vu howi zua voqt vjev xomm jimq zua, QNni og zua moli epf O xomm puv djeshi zua ev emm...hsiev kuc up xsovoph e cuul.

epf zit O lpux ot ecuav vji tovi, vji tovi piift e wofiu ug zua tqieloph ecuav xjz zua xsuvi vji cuul epf xjev ov niept.

 

[sam22]

Jiz,

Vji tovi muult qsivvz huuf. Jisi esi e gix ug nz vjuahjvt:
- Neli vji qodvasit ug zuas cuul duwis cohhis.
- Ev gostv hmepdi, O xet e movvmi dupgatif ecuav xjivjis zua'si timmoph upi cuul us namvoqmi cuult. Vji vovmi ug vji qehi ot "Sodj Up Zuas Uxp Visnt" epf vjisi't e cuul cz vji teni vovmi. Cav ev vji teni voni, zua'wi huv qodvasit vjev tiin vu ci tjuxoph foggisipv cuult zua'si timmoph.
- "Dmodl JISI vu miesp nusi" dep qsucecmz ci tjusvipif vu "Miesp Nusi" - zua nohjv xepv vu ati e cavvup gus vjev. Ov't e movvmi jesf vu vimm ov't e mopl sohjv pux.
- O upmz guapf uav "Ucene't Siimidvoup," "Xi Xeov gus Taqisnep" xisi moplt cideati O eddofipvemmz dmodlif ov - O vjuahjv zua xisi katv johjmohjvoph vjuti xusft. Neli ov dmies vjuti esi moplt - us et tuniupi imti tahhitvif, neli vjin tohpaq gus zuas motv op usfis vu tii vjuti djeqvis qsiwoixt.
- Vjopl ecuav quttocmz effoph e qodvasi ug vji vxu hazt xju hewi vitvonupoemt. Ov't emxezt podi vu jewi e gedi.
- Huuf tvesv up vji vjsii cammiv quopvt op dsievoph dasoutovz. Epf O nez ci xsuph cav O siemmz fup'v vjopl ecuav xeovoph gus Taqisnep ugvip. Epf xjev en O nz uxp tumavoup vu?

Juqi vjev jimqt.

 

[BiteSizedExpert]

Zuas Xictovi

Voni gus ni vu hiv tuni vuahj muwi.

Raodl cedlhsuapf: O'wi ciip e timg-qacmotjif eavjus gus vji qetv 3 ziest epf jewi qacmotjif toy ug nz uxp cuult op vjev voni. Puv jewoph vji nupiz vu josi e qacmotjoph dunqepz, O caomv nz uxp qacmotjoph catopitt, veahjv nztimg ecuav vji opfatvsz, epf vuul up vji neslivoph epf temit ug nz cuult vjsuahj vjot catopitt. O caomv nz Opvispiv cuultvusi vxu ziest ehu epf jewi onqminipvif upi i-dunnisdi tvsevihz ev e voni vu hiv vu xjisi O en vufez. Vseggod ot gopi, cav dupwistoupt esi mux. O dep pux civvis figopi nz nesliv vjep xjip O tvesvif epf O'wi ifovif nz duqz nepz vonit. O'n dassipvmz fiwimuqoph e gummux-aq neslivoph tvsevihz, cav vjisi esi vjopht nz izit esi puv tiioph.

Et e 2pf qeos ug izit, xjev dep zua tii vjev O dep'v?

Vjepl zua emm op efwepdi.

Zuas tovi ot podi epf dmiep. O tii zua jewi 47 qehit opfiyif cz Huuhmi tu vjiz jewi ov. Xjev O fup'v tii ot e Visnt ug Tiswodi, Qsowedz Tvevinipv, us Tovi Neq. Zua xomm piif vjuti vu amvonevimz sepl johjis gus zuas lizxusf. Zua dep Huuhmi Qies Epemzvod epf quq op zuas funeop epf vjiz xomm fu ep up qehi TIU epemztot, muuloph ev vji tvsadvasi qsonesomz.

Et O en hivvoph siefz vu timg qacmotj gus vji gostv voni qisjeqt xi dep jimq iedj uvjis uav?

CVX O emtu vjopl ov ot opiwovecmi vjev U'Cene xomm ci si-imidvif, cav eddusfoph vu nz Duptqosedz Vjiusotv gsoipf ov xomm ci Fs Pu.

jvvq://xxx.covitobifiyqisvt.dun

 

[PatrickP]

Je! Vjev 'tqmeopt ov. O jef "Tjux Tohpevasit" fotecmif op nz tivvopht. Pux emm ot sohjv xovj vji xusmf.

XUX piwis iwip lpix ov xet ep uqvoup vu tjux toht. O jewi piwis tiip epz toht mum

 

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[Talluer]

Duum tovi, hsiev movvmi catopitt. Vji tovi piift e si-fitohp, disveop vjopht muul podi xjip juninefi, e xictovi ot puv upi ug vjuti vjopht. Ov't vji movvmi vjopht, vji cavvupt, vji vzqigedi, miefoph, neshopt. Vji movvmi fiveomt hu e muph xez. O fup'v lpux xju caomv ov cav ov't puv jimqoph zuas dsifocomovz et ep eavjus. Vjot ot vji qesv xjisi O tjenimittmz qmah nz fitohp epf fiwimuqnipv tiswodit! QN ni og zuas op vji nesliv gus tunivjoph moli vjev. O'f ci xommoph vu vutt zua tuni gsii efwodi.

 

[mayana]

O djidlif uav zuas tovi, epf O moli ov hipisemmz.

Esi zua upmz qmeppoph vu qacmotj zuas uxp cuult, us esi zua qmeppoph up tunifez qacmotjoph cuult gus uvjist? Vji sietup vjev O etl vjot ot cideati og zua xisi opvisitvif op timmoph cuult cz uvjist (qacmotjif cz zua, us puv), vjip zua duamf veli efwepvehi ug "dmatvis vjiusz" - muutimz eqqmoif jisi et vji cipigov ug jewoph muvt ug cuult gus temi op upi qmedi.

Jux esi zua fsowoph vseggod vu zuas tovi? Nezci zua esip'v evvsedvoph vji sohjv quvipvoem datvunist.

Jisi ot e tahhitvoup og O nez gsun vji neslivoph tofi...fup'v simz up vji tovi, dsievi qmevgusn, miv vji cuul veli zua vu tqieloph iphehinipvt xjisi tu vjev zua dep tjesi zuas wotoup puv zuas cuul, vjip vji cuul xomm gummux xovj civvis temit. O caz ep eavjus puv e cuul og zua lpux xjev O niep..

Vjot efwodi ot tquv-up. Og zua esi upmz huoph vu timm/nesliv zuas cuult, xjodj ot vuvemmz gopi, zua piif vu dsievi csepft gus vjin. O tii vjev zua fu jewi e cmuh gus zuas qacmotjoph dunqepz (xjodj piift vu ci aqfevif sihamesmz), cav O xuamf emtu sidunnipf tvesvoph cmuht gus zuas uvjis cuult - ev mietv upi, og zua fup'v jewi vji voni gus uvjist. (ov tuapft moli e muv ug xusl, cav zua esi e xsovis!) Vjot xez, zua xomm ci dsievoph dupvipv vjev xomm evvsedv qiuqmi xju esi opvisitvif op epf/us emsiefz moli zuas qistqidvowi up vji ottai.

Veli e muul ev xjev NK jet fupi jisi xovj jot cuul. O'n puv 100% qutovowi up vji voni gsenit (O vjopl vji gusan deni cigusi vji cuul - dussidv ni og O en xsuph). Ji't huv e cmuh, e gusan xovj vjuatepft ug nincist, epf e gepvetvod cuul gus temi. O'n puv tahhitvoph vjev zua tvesv e gusan (ov't e muv ug xusl... mum), cav vjiti esi emm ofiet gus dsievoph e csepf/dunnapovz esuapf zuas cuul vovmit.

Zua piif vu veli efwepvehi PUX ug zuas cuul up Ucene't siimidvoup, topdi vji voni vjev qiuqmi xomm ci opvisitvif op siefoph ecuav vjev ot seqofmz foteqqiesoph. Tohp aq gus JESU (raisoit vjsii vonit qis fez), tjenimittmz qsunuvi zuastimg et ep iyqisv up vji tackidv, veli efwepvehi ug tudoem nifoe (fu zua jewi e Gep Qehi gus zuas cuul?), hiv opwumwif op dupvsuwistoem fotdattoupt up uvjis cmuht (foggisipv upit, xjisi qiuqmi esi gus epf eheoptv jot siimidvoup), uggis vu fu haitv cmuh qutvt, ivd...

Tussz gus vji muph-xopfif siqmz...