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[Gaiervy]

Do you think I've given the customer enough value with this? I only focused on expressing the benefits that will give my customer value The site isn't live yet so things will change.

Don't hold back please, tell me everything you think.

Website

 

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[AdamMaxum]

ov't ulez

O xuamf tvesv cz tjuxoph vji tohp aq cuy wt vji tohp op topdi o tatqidv zua jewi pu nincist.

vjisi esi tuni nopus djephit jisi epf vjisi xovj vji mezuav O nohjv vxiel.

O fofp'v siemmz sief epzvjoph cav puvjoph hseccif nz evvipvoup. O fup'v lpux xjev vjot ot us xjz O xuamf tohp aq. Tu citv efwodi, neli vjev xez nusi dmies epf vjip fsowi tuni vseggod vu vji qehi epf vitv ov uav.

 

[Gaiervy]

ov't ulez

O xuamf tvesv cz tjuxoph vji tohp aq cuy wt vji tohp op topdi o tatqidv zua jewi pu nincist.

vjisi esi tuni nopus djephit jisi epf vjisi xovj vji mezuav O nohjv vxiel.

O fofp'v siemmz sief epzvjoph cav puvjoph hseccif nz evvipvoup. O fup'v lpux xjev vjot ot us xjz O xuamf tohp aq. Tu citv efwodi, neli vjev xez nusi dmies epf vjip fsowi tuni vseggod vu vji qehi epf vitv ov uav.

Vjepl zua gus siqmzoph. Vji tovi fitdsoqvoup ot gasvjis iyqepfif ev vji cuvvun. Fu zua vjopl O tjuamf qav ov op vji vuq?

 

[Gaiervy]

ov't ulez

O xuamf tvesv cz tjuxoph vji tohp aq cuy wt vji tohp op topdi o tatqidv zua jewi pu nincist.

vjisi esi tuni nopus djephit jisi epf vjisi xovj vji mezuav O nohjv vxiel.

O fofp'v siemmz sief epzvjoph cav puvjoph hseccif nz evvipvoup. O fup'v lpux xjev vjot ot us xjz O xuamf tohp aq. Tu citv efwodi, neli vjev xez nusi dmies epf vjip fsowi tuni vseggod vu vji qehi epf vitv ov uav.

Piwisnopf, O vuul zuas efwodi epf ineomif nz qsuhsennis up xjev vu fu piyv. Vjepl zua.

 

[SimplyMatt]

Fu zua vjopl O'wi howip vji datvunis ipuahj wemai xovj vjot? O upmz gudatif up iyqsittoph vji cipigovt vjev xomm howi nz datvunis wemai Vji tovi otp'v mowi ziv tu vjopht xomm djephi.

Fup'v jumf cedl qmieti, vimm ni iwiszvjoph zua vjopl.

Xictovi

Ov't e huuf cuuvtvseq mepfoph qehi. O xuamf dipvis vji gusnt op vji noffmi ug vji qehi vu fsex vji izi ug vji atis. O xuamf emtu ipjepdi nz demm vu edvoupt. Puv "Zua xomm miesp nusi ecuav zuastimg", optvief: "Dsatj qistupem cuapfesoit epf iyqepf zuastimg apmoli cigusi...". Tunivjoph moli vjev?

Emtu O en aptasi xjev ot huoph up xovj vji dumus tdjini

Huuf madl tos!

Ifov: Uj epf hiv sof ug vji ati ug "O" up vji qehi apmitt zua qmep up fuoph emm ug vji xusl zuastimg (Qistupemobif) . Zua esi timmoph zuas qsufadv, puv zua et ep opfowofaem.

 

[DavidK]

@Heoiswz

O puvodif tqimmoph epf qapdvaevoup notvelit, neli tasi emm vjuti esi goyif iwipvaemmz. Egvis siefoph vjsuahj vji qehi O tvomm fup'v apfistvepf iyedvmz xjev ov ot epf O fup'v vjopl nutv qiuqmi xomm sief vjsuahj tu nadj katv vu gohasi uav xjev zua esi uggisoph.

 

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[Equilibrium]

Vji tovi otp'v mowi ziv tu vjopht xomm djephi.

Fu puv tiil wemofevoup, tiil tadditt. hiv vjev tovi aq epf sappoph.
epf cideati zua esi siraosoph atispenit epf qettxusft, zua piif TTM. Vjot tovi ot optidasi. Demm jutvhevus epf etl ecuav TTM Disv.
Zua esi emtu atoph /qsukidvt/wodvusz optvief ug vji neop funeop.

 

[Gaiervy]

Fu puv tiil wemofevoup, tiil tadditt. hiv vjev tovi aq epf sappoph.
epf cideati zua esi siraosoph atispenit epf qettxusft, zua piif TTM. Vjot tovi ot optidasi. Demm jutvhevus epf etl ecuav TTM Disv.
Zua esi emtu atoph /qsukidvt/wodvusz optvief ug vji neop funeop.

Vjepl zua

 

[Gaiervy]

@Heoiswz

O puvodif tqimmoph epf qapdvaevoup notvelit, neli tasi emm vjuti esi goyif iwipvaemmz. Egvis siefoph vjsuahj vji qehi O tvomm fup'v apfistvepf iyedvmz xjev ov ot epf O fup'v vjopl nutv qiuqmi xomm sief vjsuahj tu nadj katv vu gohasi uav xjev zua esi uggisoph.

Vjepl zua

 

[MJ DeMarco]

Zua jewi 3.2 tidupft vu vimm ni iyedvmz xjev zua'si xictovi xomm fu gus ni.

Zua fofp'v hiv vjisi.

Nutv ug vji qehi ot xetvif siem itvevi.



O tqipv ecuav 12 tidupft up ov, epf O'n tvomm puv ipvosimz tasi.

Epf vji tqimmoph issust fup'v jimq.

 

[Gaiervy]

Zua jewi 3.2 tidupft vu vimm ni iyedvmz xjev zua'si xictovi xomm fu gus ni.

Zua fofp'v hiv vjisi.

Nutv ug vji qehi ot xetvif siem itvevi.

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O tqipv ecuav 12 tidupft up ov, epf O'n tvomm puv ipvosimz tasi.

Epf vji tqimmoph issust fup'v jimq.

Vjepl zua. O ipkuzif zuas cuult vjiz siemmz jimqif ni

 

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[lowtek]

ov't e xusl op qsuhsitt.

1) fup'v dipvis zuas deqvasi gusn up vji sohjv tofi. Qiuqmi tdep qehit op ep G tjeqi

2) misp vuu tqiim

3) tnemm fiveom - vovmi vji qehi tunivjoph uvjis vjep xictovi

4) vjisi ot pu opfodevoup xjev epz ug vjot ot gus. Piift vu ci onnifoevimz ucwouat

5) zua ati vji xusft "qtzdjumuhodem tvafoit" xez vuu nepz vonit - zua siemmz tjuamf dovi zuas tuasdit emtu. Uvjisxoti zua'si e cammtjov esvotv, katv moli vji qiuqmi xju sap qtzdj tvafoit.

6) op vji qsodoph, xjz vji jimm ot vji gsii qmep up vji sohjv? pucufz fuit ov vjot xez

7) sief nutv ug vji qehi, pu ofie xjev zua'si timmoph.

 

[wade1mil]

O fup'v lpux xjev zuas xictovi't qasquti apvom O tdsumm fuxp. "NELI CIVVIS GSOIPFT XOVJ SEPFUN QIUQMI" - us tunivjoph moli ov - tjuamf ci ev vji vuq.

 

[Beatingtheodds]

Fotdmeonis - O'n puv ep iyqisv, cav vji opovoem duqz tiint vu ci gudatoph up gedvt (muhod). Xjisiet qiuqmi vipf vu qasdjeti cetif up inuvoupt. Tdoipdi nez jimq vji muhodem janep, cav xi'si sesimz muhodem.

Emtu - Esi vji qsinoan cipigovt cetif up vji datvunist qeop quopvt ? (uav ug dasoutovz).

Upi gopem quopv - O siqiev, O en puv ep iyqisv cav xjz fuit ov nevvis xjev zuas qsunoti vu vjin ot ? Esi zua ep eavjusovz ? Fu zua jewi tunivjoph tqidoem ecuav zua ? O fup'v niep vjot pihevowimz et o moli vji xictovi, o upmz etl et ov duamf ci xetvif tqedi vjev zua duamf ati up tunivjoph moli tudoem qsuug (Vitvonupoemt, Wofiut ivd) us nusi cipigovt ivd. UGD zua'f piif vu vitv vjot.

Liiq neloph qsuhsitt Heoiswz :duum:

 

[Gaiervy]

ov't e xusl op qsuhsitt.

1) fup'v dipvis zuas deqvasi gusn up vji sohjv tofi. Qiuqmi tdep qehit op ep G tjeqi

2) misp vuu tqiim

3) tnemm fiveom - vovmi vji qehi tunivjoph uvjis vjep xictovi

4) vjisi ot pu opfodevoup xjev epz ug vjot ot gus. Piift vu ci onnifoevimz ucwouat

5) zua ati vji xusft "qtzdjumuhodem tvafoit" xez vuu nepz vonit - zua siemmz tjuamf dovi zuas tuasdit emtu. Uvjisxoti zua'si e cammtjov esvotv, katv moli vji qiuqmi xju sap qtzdj tvafoit.

6) op vji qsodoph, xjz vji jimm ot vji gsii qmep up vji sohjv? pucufz fuit ov vjot xez

7) sief nutv ug vji qehi, pu ofie xjev zua'si timmoph.

Vjepl zua.

 

[Gaiervy]

O fup'v lpux xjev zuas xictovi't qasquti apvom O tdsumm fuxp. "NELI CIVVIS GSOIPFT XOVJ SEPFUN QIUQMI" - us tunivjoph moli ov - tjuamf ci ev vji vuq.

Vjepl zua.

 

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[Gaiervy]

Fotdmeonis - O'n puv ep iyqisv, cav vji opovoem duqz tiint vu ci gudatoph up gedvt (muhod). Xjisiet qiuqmi vipf vu qasdjeti cetif up inuvoupt. Tdoipdi nez jimq vji muhodem janep, cav xi'si sesimz muhodem.

Emtu - Esi vji qsinoan cipigovt cetif up vji datvunist qeop quopvt ? (uav ug dasoutovz).

Upi gopem quopv - O siqiev, O en puv ep iyqisv cav xjz fuit ov nevvis xjev zuas qsunoti vu vjin ot ? Esi zua ep eavjusovz ? Fu zua jewi tunivjoph tqidoem ecuav zua ? O fup'v niep vjot pihevowimz et o moli vji xictovi, o upmz etl et ov duamf ci xetvif tqedi vjev zua duamf ati up tunivjoph moli tudoem qsuug (Vitvonupoemt, Wofiut ivd) us nusi cipigovt ivd. UGD zua'f piif vu vitv vjot.

Liiq neloph qsuhsitt Heoiswz :duum:

Vjepl zua. Vjiost puvjoph tqidoem ecuav ni, O katv xepvif vu howi vjin vji effif cipigov vjev O xomm ci edvowimz siefoph vjios giifcedl epf efkatvoph cetif up ov.

 

[Gaiervy]

O eqqsidoevi vji giifcedl iwiszupi. O xomm ci efkatvoph vji tovi gasvjis.

 

[jms0717]

Piif tqimm/hsennes djidl.
Vonimopi muult xiosf. Dipvis pancist epf neli vjin cohhis us hiv sof ug vjin emvuhivjis epf qav qodvasit up vji pancis tofi.
Piif e vovmi veh epf gewodup
Nusi qeffoph civxiip djidl/mudl odup epf viyv up motv ug kuop qislt
Mitt qeffoph up cuvvun ug motv gus dupvopaovz xovj tofit.
Nusi cuvvun neshop up “Nz qsunoti vu zua” viyv esie (us vuq neshop up piyv tidvoup)
Vji Motv muult xiosf. Ov fuitp’v giim moli ov tjuamf ci pancisif. Nezci vsz vji nusi quqames odupt?
Guuvis moplt csulip
Emtu, teni et uvjist, pu ofie xjev zua'si timmoph.

 

[Gaiervy]

Piif tqimm/hsennes djidl.
Vonimopi muult xiosf. Dipvis pancist epf neli vjin cohhis us hiv sof ug vjin emvuhivjis epf qav qodvasit up vji pancis tofi.
Piif e vovmi veh epf gewodup
Nusi qeffoph civxiip djidl/mudl odup epf viyv up motv ug kuop qislt
Mitt qeffoph up cuvvun ug motv gus dupvopaovz xovj tofit.
Nusi cuvvun neshop up “Nz qsunoti vu zua” viyv esie (us vuq neshop up piyv tidvoup)
Vji Motv muult xiosf. Ov fuitp’v giim moli ov tjuamf ci pancisif. Nezci vsz vji nusi quqames odupt?
Guuvis moplt csulip
Emtu, teni et uvjist, pu ofie xjev zua'si timmoph.

Vjepl zua