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Hey guys,

At the moment I am writing an ebook on dating advice, as well as an accompanying sales page. This is my first venture into Fastlane and copywriting, and I plan for it to be very much a trial-and-error learning experience.

My question is this: from experience, is it a good idea to use a headline along the lines of

"GET LAID IN 30 DAYS...OR YOUR MONEY BACK!"

On one hand, some people will surely take advantage of this guarantee as not everybody will be successful. It also alerts the reader straight away that this is a sales page. Perhaps it would be better to write "GET LAID IN 30 DAYS...GUARANTEED!"

On the other hand, surely not all people will request their money back even if they don't succeed. This is a very striking headline and hopefully it would draw more sales than something like "which of these habits are killing your chances with women?".

Any advice here would be greatly appreciated!

Thanks
 
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