Feedback for outreach for email marketing services?

[Hadrian9]

I noticed a lot of E-Commerce stores neglect to send welcoming emails to people who subscribe to their newsletter, even though it's a crucial part of email marketing.

I found a bunch of businesses with this problem and made an example welcome email for each one that I could replicate in their email marketing software, therefore bringing them much more brand engagement and revenue from email.

I have the list of founders to contact, and this is the general template I was going to use for the email outreach to them.

Subject line: Say hi and stop rejecting customers

Hello,

I was on the ___ site a while ago, and I subscribed to your newsletter. After waiting a while and checking my spam, I noticed that I never received a welcoming email.

This is a massive mistake in your email marketing, as about 75% of newsletter subscribers expect to receive a welcome email. By not having one, you're quite literally ignoring customers who are knocking at your door saying they're interested. This means from simply not having a welcome email, you're missing out on tons of opportunity to increase brand engagement, boost revenue, and develop long term relationships with your customers.

So to fix this, I've built a welcome email for ___ which I've attached below:

(image of custom welcome email)

If you like this welcome email, I'd love to quickly get this setup in your email marketing software.

Let's first have a short call to discuss this further and then I'll have this up and running in no time.

If that sounds good, just let me know a time that works for you.

Speak soon,
Hadrian

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I believe this could be heavily improved, but I'm struggling with how. If you received this, what objections would come to mind? If you wouldn't respond with yes, why not? Would you want this to be more personal? Would you like to know more about the service before we get on a call? Please give your honest feedback.

 

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