Hey guys, after hours of reading books and doing nothing i finally ended up writing my first sales letter/email. I recently started learning copy and heres one of my first attempts at writing sales/email letter.
I wrote this mock- sales/email letter for a clothing company in my city. How did i do? Feel free to criticize me and tell what went wrong.
Would you be convinced to buy clothes after recieving this? And would you buy these clothes?
Also are there any other places i can send my samples and get critique? Would appreciate if you can link to some of those websites/groups.
Anyway here's what i wrote.
SUBJECT: Everything is on SALE. Limited TIME OFFER.
Hey Ali,
Ever wanted to get those stylish brown Khakis and that black polo? Did you ever look at them and wonder how good you would look rocking those Khakis and that polo shirt? Looking absolutely dapper, everyone staring at you – from hot girls to the cool muscular lads who were always having fun. You weren’t able to buy them either because you didn’t have a lot of money with you or you couldn’t decide? After all there are so many good options to choose from- fashionable black leather jackets, comfortable jeans, fitted dress shirts and casual tees which you can wear whenever you want to.
Why worry?
There’s no need to.
After all, our WHOLE COLLECTION is on SALE
Up to 75% discount on everything, so you can buy your favorite clothes at unbelievably low prices.
Simply go to our website, filter out what you want and order! Its that easy. No difficulties in deciding what to buy.
So ORDER NOW before it ends
P.S You may regret it if you don’t. Our stock runs out quickly and we don’t want you to miss out on an opportunity of a lifetime.
(200 words)
And here's my planning for this;
Sales letter- Clothes letter
I want to create awareness about the recent sale at Gul Ahmed/ Charcoal to boost sales
Why?
All of our products are up for sale at unbelievably low prices from Tees to Polos and Jeans and Khakis
Why?
Because its for a limited time and stock will run out quickly so its best if your purchase it right now or else you won’t be able to buy the shirt you dreamed of getting
I wrote this mock- sales/email letter for a clothing company in my city. How did i do? Feel free to criticize me and tell what went wrong.
Would you be convinced to buy clothes after recieving this? And would you buy these clothes?
Also are there any other places i can send my samples and get critique? Would appreciate if you can link to some of those websites/groups.
Anyway here's what i wrote.
SUBJECT: Everything is on SALE. Limited TIME OFFER.
Hey Ali,
Ever wanted to get those stylish brown Khakis and that black polo? Did you ever look at them and wonder how good you would look rocking those Khakis and that polo shirt? Looking absolutely dapper, everyone staring at you – from hot girls to the cool muscular lads who were always having fun. You weren’t able to buy them either because you didn’t have a lot of money with you or you couldn’t decide? After all there are so many good options to choose from- fashionable black leather jackets, comfortable jeans, fitted dress shirts and casual tees which you can wear whenever you want to.
Why worry?
There’s no need to.
After all, our WHOLE COLLECTION is on SALE
Up to 75% discount on everything, so you can buy your favorite clothes at unbelievably low prices.
Simply go to our website, filter out what you want and order! Its that easy. No difficulties in deciding what to buy.
So ORDER NOW before it ends
P.S You may regret it if you don’t. Our stock runs out quickly and we don’t want you to miss out on an opportunity of a lifetime.
(200 words)
And here's my planning for this;
Sales letter- Clothes letter
I want to create awareness about the recent sale at Gul Ahmed/ Charcoal to boost sales
Why?
All of our products are up for sale at unbelievably low prices from Tees to Polos and Jeans and Khakis
Why?
Because its for a limited time and stock will run out quickly so its best if your purchase it right now or else you won’t be able to buy the shirt you dreamed of getting
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