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I'm building a website selling a specific womens watch and it's going to have 3 main sections of text. In this sections I would like to appeal to some of the womens desires and less of 'selling' the watch. I'm hoping to channel that emotion into a sale, rather then have obvious selling copy.
Here are the 3 sections I would like to get feedback on:
As Beautiful As You
We don't always look inside and really see how beautiful we really are. Sometimes you need a reminder and what better then a beautifully made rose gold watch to look down at.
Look Good, Feel Good
This should be added to the golden rule list. It works, put a smile on your face and you'll be happier, put a a nice watch on and you'll be X (still figuring out what to add)
Classy
It's possible to be sexy while simultaneously being classy. Get people looking at you for all the right reasons.
Any feedback/ideas would be appreciated. I'm a new copywriter so if you think it's crap just tell me, no feelings will be hurt
Here are the 3 sections I would like to get feedback on:
As Beautiful As You
We don't always look inside and really see how beautiful we really are. Sometimes you need a reminder and what better then a beautifully made rose gold watch to look down at.
Look Good, Feel Good
This should be added to the golden rule list. It works, put a smile on your face and you'll be happier, put a a nice watch on and you'll be X (still figuring out what to add)
Classy
It's possible to be sexy while simultaneously being classy. Get people looking at you for all the right reasons.
Any feedback/ideas would be appreciated. I'm a new copywriter so if you think it's crap just tell me, no feelings will be hurt
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