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At first I thought that was the Fastlane going through Arizona, so I expected to see MJ flying in a Lamborghini.

But I laughed anyway!
 

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Took me back to my Atari days.

I guess no one ever said a cartoon has to be funny.....

My nephew's brother in law works for Pixar and I'm used to seeing his stuff. I guess I was expecting too much. :)
 

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At first I thought that was the Fastlane going through Arizona, so I expected to see MJ flying in a Lamborghini.

But I laughed anyway!

yes! i made someone laugh, tiny value achieved maybe lol

Took me back to my Atari days.

I guess no one ever said a cartoon has to be funny.....

My nephew's brother in law works for Pixar and I'm used to seeing his stuff. I guess I was expecting too much. :)

Pixar!? that's just not fair man. lol
yea this cartoon was just proof of concept, the "plot" was almost all on the spot thinking lol
 

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To be honest, when I opened it, I was not even thinking about his stuff that he makes on the side but once I saw the Atari like cartoon, for some reason I thought about his stuff. It's all about experience. The more you do it, the better you will get. I think I mis-spoke in my original post. I wasn't expecting Pixar quality, I just wasn't expecting 1980 Atari quality. And then I actually thought it was going to be a funny cartoon so I guess both of those together......
 

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To be honest, when I opened it, I was not even thinking about his stuff that he makes on the side but once I saw the Atari like cartoon, for some reason I thought about his stuff. It's all about experience. The more you do it, the better you will get.

im trying to stick to South Park level at best lol but with my own style.
 

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Yeah, I guess if you would have used the anal probe it might have been funnier! :)

LOL true true.
My next one will use a script, it'll be great, the world will love it, and i will swim in riches and fame! and give out copies of unscripted to the masses!
 

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I was skeptical at first, but then that Chappelle bit played and I burst out laughing. That was unexpected.
 

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i'd say it has early 90s PC CD-ROM graphics, Atari had like 4 pixels lol. I laughed
 

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So they are in town this weekend for Christmas and to see his sister who just had a baby. We were at the hospital talking and I told him about your cartoon, this stuff is all they ever talk about because his wife is Jenny Garth look-alike Abbie Cobb. So anyway, he said you might enjoy a website called Sketchup. I also just saw this in a group I'm in and a guy was saying how good it is. You might check it out.
 

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It was way too long. You need to cut the scenes down to 2-3 seconds. The cop walk was way too slow.
 

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It was way too long. You need to cut the scenes down to 2-3 seconds. The cop walk was way too slow.

lmao i went for a slow cinematic feel.
The cop walk supposed to be for dramatic effect!
several people stated that they liked the dramatic feel of the cop walk lol can't please everyone i guess.

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So they are in town this weekend for Christmas and to see his sister who just had a baby. We were at the hospital talking and I told him about your cartoon, this stuff is all they ever talk about because his wife is Jenny Garth look-alike Abbie Cobb. So anyway, he said you might enjoy a website called Sketchup. I also just saw this in a group I'm in and a guy was saying how good it is. You might check it out.

i played around with sketchup back in high school its a cool program. For may cartoon though i have developed my own method for creating the art.
thanks.
 

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