airforsu
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Haha, your writing style reminds me of this ad:
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Free registration at the forum removes this block.By the way, the example I gave seems really salesy for craigslist to me. I mean, that's probably a comfort zone issue, but do you guys feel the same way with copy on cragislist? Most listings are just "[car name]: [car feature 1], [car feature 2]. telephone nr: [xxx-xxx-xxx]" so copy kind of stands out.
Not bad at all.
1. I'd like to see more of a benefit driven headline though.
2. Also, make sure you clearly understand what the normal objections are from a prospective buyer and address as many of those as possible in your copy.
3. Space out your text more so it's easier to read. Consider using subheadlines as well if it's visually appealing.
4. You should try to get your prospective buyers attention a lot more quickly in the first sentence or 2. For example, is your buyer specifically looking for immaculate? Is that the #1 thing they're looking for? If not, put that lower.
5. For the love of all things sales oriented. Please use a spell check!
Good start!
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