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Here's your copy:
IMO, it's not bad, but it can be improved by adding more vivid details and specifics.
The brighter (and bigger) a picture you can paint, the better it is.
For instance...
Yours: Are you tired of wondering what to write to get people to buy?
Mine: Tired of ripping your hair out wondering what makes people buy?
Yours: Do you have a great looking web page, but still aren’t making sales?
Mine: Spent a fortune on a killer web page, but it still doesn't convert in sales or leads?
For instance: Would you like to boost your income and dramatically increase your sales?
This statement is about as beaten to death as you can get. It is so overused, it means nothing.
Are you tired of wondering what to write to get people to buy?
Do you have a great looking web page, but still aren’t making sales?
Would you like to boost your income and dramatically increase your sales?
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But not just any words..
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You're here because you want to make money, but you don't know what to write.
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I can help you with your:
- Sales Letter/Sales Page
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- Mail Order Ad
- Social Media Ad
- Email newsletter
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IMO, it's not bad, but it can be improved by adding more vivid details and specifics.
The brighter (and bigger) a picture you can paint, the better it is.
For instance...
Yours: Are you tired of wondering what to write to get people to buy?
Mine: Tired of ripping your hair out wondering what makes people buy?
Yours: Do you have a great looking web page, but still aren’t making sales?
Mine: Spent a fortune on a killer web page, but it still doesn't convert in sales or leads?
For instance: Would you like to boost your income and dramatically increase your sales?
This statement is about as beaten to death as you can get. It is so overused, it means nothing.