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I have three simple points.
No point in going through the copy itself as the fundamental elements outlined above aren't there yet. Da una rapa non si cava sangue.
Clarify your message first.
- You have a specific solution to a specific problem, and that's good. But who is the market? Who has this specific problem? You don't seem to have identified who they are. Identify the specific segment you're selling to.
- Your sales messaging is confused. You're not really communicating the idea. You need to tell me why I have really been struggling with rhythm, and what's unique about your solution. You need to give me a "ah-ah!" moment. I have to think "ahh, that's why my strumming sucks!". Don't tell me it's an awesome method, show me what I've been missing, how it changes everything, and why your thing is how I solve the problem.
- Who is this sales page for? Do they know you already or not? Are they failing because of rhythm problems, or is it just a weak spot they haven't really thought about in years? You have to know exactly where the mind of your customer is at when they read. You don't, because if you did it would be obvious from the copy.
No point in going through the copy itself as the fundamental elements outlined above aren't there yet. Da una rapa non si cava sangue.
Clarify your message first.