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    5 Headlines for A Real Product that MAKES THEM STOP
    I choose a multi-tool this time. Think Victorinox or Leatherman.

    I'll target outdoors people (hunters, fishermen, campers) that are tired of complex multi-tools that they can't figure out.
    1. Multi-Tools Shouldn't Be Complicated - Read More
    2. Can't Figure Your Multi-Tool Out? Try this
    3. Multi-Tools Have Too Many Features... Here's the Solution
    4. Why Are Multi-Tools So Complex?
    5. Tired of Confusing & Cumbersome Multi-Tools?
    5 Influential Sentences
    1. Picture this, you won't spend half an hour figuring out your multi-tool anymore.
    2. Buy now and say 'Goodbye!' to all the useless features in your former multi-tool.
    3. Buy 3 by Friday and you'll get one for free.
    4. Invest in our multi-tool and you'll have an easier time finding what you need when you need it.
    5. Imagine, you are in the field, trying to skin a freshly shot boar, but you can't figure out which of your multi-tools' blade to use.
    One Action
    For day 4 I set up my upwork account. They said there are too many copywriters out there. Might be because I choose 'Entry Level' as my skill level. I'll try changing the profile up, maybe I can make it work.

    For today, I cold-called a business and asked them if they need copywriting services. I stuttered a bit throughout the call and they politely refused my services. At least I can say that I made my first cold call.

    Here Goes The One-Page Copy

    Why Are Multi-Tools So Complex?
    Tired of not knowing how to use your multi-tool?

    Do you want a multi-tool that has features you actually use?

    Do you avoid using your multi-tool in front of your pals because it's embarrassing to spend 15 minutes trying to figure it out?

    No more.

    You Don't Have to Buy Cumbersome Multi-Tools
    Buy a "Simplex" multi-tool now and say goodbye to all the useless features your former multi-tool had.

    You'll be happier than ever and get the job done fast.

    Your future multi-tool has:
    • a sturdy razor-sharp blade that will help you to easily skin animals;
    • a serrated blade that will make cutting rope a breeze;
    • a pair of handy pliers with a wire cutter integrated that you can use to make fishing hooks on the go;
    • a saw that will take care of any branch.
    Picture this, you don't have to read a manual before using your multi-tool. You can use it straight out the box.

    Simple Tools are Reliable
    Too many moving parts make your multi-tool easy to break. Simplicity breed reliability.

    Simplex is durable because, unlike other multi-tools, it has just 3 moving parts.

    In fact, it's so durable that we guarantee it will last for at least 15 years or we give you a full no-questions-asked refund.

    What do you have to lose?

    If we are right you get a multi-tool that's gonna last a long time and help you do everything you need to do. If we are wrong,
    we give you your money back.

    Buy before Friday and you get a free fire-starter that can help you start up to 5.000 fires.

    Order Now
    01632-960729
    email@simplex.com

    __________________________________________________________________

    Done. Today's challenge was definitely harder. Rhymezone is certainly helpful, thanks for that @SinisterLex .

    Can't wait to see what tomorrow brings.
     
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    Here's Day 6 Challenge:
    Selling Should Be Easy
    Is your business making less money than you'd be satisfied with?

    Do you want to generate more sales without spending hours writing ads and sales letters?

    Hire a copywriter now.

    You will get more sales from professional copy without all the hassle.

    500% ROI

    Unlike other things, hiring a copywriter is an investment, not an expense.

    Invest with me and you will get a 500% ROI. For every 100$ you spend, you get 500$ back.
    It's a no-brainer.

    No Time Spent

    You don't have to spend time working on the copy. You don't have to spend time worrying about it.

    I write it, you approve it & publish it and the money starts rolling in.

    Why Not Write the Copy Yourself?

    You could write the copy yourself, but...
    you'll never be able to achieve the results of someone that does this for a living.

    Think about it, a copywriter puts food on the table by writing copy. That's my job and that's what I'm good at.

    You can get a better ROI of your time by doing what you are good at.

    How Do I Know This Will Work?

    You have no guarantee you'll get results, right?

    Wrong.

    So you can see I'm serious about providing you great services, you only pay me after you see results. If you are not satisfied, you don't pay anything. You have nothing to lose.

    It's in my interest to give you the best possible copy. If I don't give you results, I can't put food on the table.

    So How Much Does It Cost?

    My prices are simple and straight-forward:
    • 499$ per ad
    • 499$ per sales letter
    If you want me to write copy for any other purposes, contact me and we'll talk about it.

    Buy Until 14th October to Get 20% Off
    ______________________________________
    Done. For day 6 I'll find some businesses that I can send this letter to (as an email). I think I'll costumize it a bit, depending on who I'm sending it to.
     
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    For day 7 I revised yesterday's letter. Interestingly, new ways of saying things came up today. I guess sometimes sleeping on your copy can make it better.

    You Shouldn't Spend Hours on Copy That Doesn't Convert
    Are you tired of spending hours writing copy that doesn't work?

    Do you want to generate more sales without spending hours writing ads and sales letters?

    Hire a copywriter now.

    Professional copy gives you more sales with less hassle.

    This is an Investment

    Hiring a copywriter is an investment. This is not an expense.

    You will get every dollar you put in back and then some. In fact, I expect to give you a 500% ROI. You will get 5$ for every 1$ spent. Consider spending a couple hundreds of dollars. You will get back 5 times that.

    No More Headaches

    It's midnight, you've been working on your ad for all day now. You're tired and you'd like to spend time in your warm bed, but
    you can't. You have to make this ad work or you can't pay rent.

    Wouldn't it be lovely for this kind of scenarios to never happen again?

    It is possible if you hire a good copywriter.

    Why Not Write the Copy Yourself?

    You could write the copy yourself, but why should you?

    Why not have someone else do it?

    Think about it, you could spend more time with your kids, wife, and friends. Or, at the very least, you could do the things that you know how to do.

    Hiring a copywriter gives you a breather. You do not have to spend hours upon hours to create copy that doesn't make sales.

    What If My Copy Doesn't Work?

    You have no guarantee you'll get results, right?

    Wrong.

    I'm serious about providing you a great service. If you do not get a 500% ROI or are not satisfied for any other reason I will give you a full refund. No questions asked. If you get less than a 500% ROI, you get your money back.

    So How Much Does It Cost?

    My prices are simple and straight-forward. For one page of copy, you will pay 500$. If you buy two pages of copy you get a 10% discount.

    If you are interested in working with me contact me right away. I'll make all your copy problems disappear.

    Buy Until 14th October to Get 20% Off

    Contact Me at
    0757607591
    or
    emai@email.com
     
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    Here goes day 8 challenge:

    Action:
    I've sent emails pitching my copywriting services to blue-collar businesses. I've also set up a Fiverr account since I can't figure out how to make UpWork approve me. Too many copywriters I guess.

    5 Creative Headlines:

    The Products

    1. Persian Carpets
    2. Gold Watches
    3. Premium Baby Diapers
    4. Local Cleaning Business
    5. Vitamin Water

    The Headlines

    1. “The Finest Persian Carpets - Not Everybody Can Have Those”
    2. “Get a 24 Karat Gold Watch – Everyone Will Know You’ve Made It”
    3. “Pampers – Your Baby Deserves It”
    4. “Wine Stained Tablecloth? No Problem!”
    5. “The Reason Athletes Don’t Drink Regular Water”

    “About Us” Page:

    I’ll make an “About Us Page for a cloth cleaning firm.

    About Proclean

    The Best Cloth Cleaner of Bucharest

    We are proud to say we are the winners of the prize “The Best Cloth Cleaner of Bucharest” for the past 3 years in a row. Given the exceptional services we provide, we expect to win the prize again this year.

    Premium Cloth Cleaning Services

    We do not claim, nor even try, to be the cheapest or most affordable cleaning service. What we claim is that we will make your clothes spotless in 48 hours or less.
    You Have Better Things to Do Than Laundry


    If your clothes are dirty and you simply do not have the time to take care of them…

    Contact Us Now
    Some Photos of The Cleaning Process


    Here are some photos of us cleaning your clothes:

    [insert photos of the cleaning process: one with a dirty cloth, one mid-process and one after the cloth has been cleaned]
    More Than 700 Satisfied Customers

    [Insert 3 Actual Testimonials]
    These People Make It All Possible


    [insert photos of the employees, preferably with smiles on their faces and in nice uniforms]
    Here’s How You Can Reach Us


    Office Phone: 0249734
    Mobile Phone: 0758894456
    Email: email@proclean.com


    Call Us Now And Be Rid of Dirty Clothes
     
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    @SinisterLex

    It's Eastern Crane here man! I finally found your copywriting crash course. I'm still getting used to the forum. Will you review my copy for each day? 15 days to freedom man. I'm down for it.

    15 days is just the beginning though. This is a grind man.

    Day 2:

    Vomit Protocol: The Only Quit Smoking Method So Effective You Will Be Scared to Even Look at a Cigarette

    P.S. Every purchase comes with a free bodyweight training program.

    (Really working on this protocol/info product program. It will make you scared to even be near them)

    Sweet Sake Series: The Best Japanese Alcohol at Your Door in Minutes

    Hungry
    : The Secret Game So Taboo It Makes GTA Look Like Sonic The Hedgehog! Download It Now Before It's Shutdown

    Haute Cooking: Bespoke Dishes of the Avant Garde That Only the Wealthy Know About

    Suits AND Jewelry for the Man who doesn't walk but Progresses into a Room

    Elegant Eastern Eating: Come Get Your Plate

    Quick Money The Grimy Way

    (Lol)

    Depressed? It May Be Genetics NOT you! Consult with Your Doctor and See if Qualraxicalica Is the right Genetic Treatment for You!

    Wear the Clothes the Movie Stars Wear! No Knockoffs Here!

    Fix Your Teeth Fast! It Isn't Cheap Though!

    (How did I do Lex?)

     
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    Take some action you've been avoiding
    I helped a friend give flyers throughout town for his father’s business.

    It’s not something I’ve been necessarily avoiding. But it is unusual for me to approach strangers, give them a flyer and talk to them about it.

    I thought I’d be nervous, but I actually liked it.

    Write 5 creative headlines that MAKE THEM STOP

    5 Headlines
    1. “Feeling Lonely? Get a Puppy“
    2. “Ethiopian Coffee Beans – Only 1% are Good Enough for Us”
    3. “Is Heating Pricey? Try This and Save 30% of Your Heating Bill”
    4. “Can’t Find Glass Frames that Make You Look Good? Let Us Do It for You”
    5. “You Don’t Need that Cumbersome Wallet”

    5 Products
    1. Puppies
    2. High-Quality Ethiopian Coffee Beans
    3. Thermostat
    4. Glass Frames
    5. Money Clip

    3 paragraphs of copy about coffee (actually four)

    Like you, we want to wake up and have the best coffee we can have. That’s why we made a commitment to excellence. We hand pick all the Ethiopian coffee beans we sell and only 1% make the cut.

    We are so sure of the quality of our beans that the first coffee pack you get from us is free. If you don’t like it, you don’t have to see us ever again.

    Although, we highly doubt that. Over 50% of the top coffee connoisseurs voted our coffee as “the best I’ve ever drunk”.

    Throwing away 99 out of every 100 coffee beans means we don’t have big supplies. Hurry up and buy now.
    ____________________________________________________________________________
    *Fun Fact: I just drank my first coffee for this challenge (so I have a better understanding) :))
     
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    Buy Space Age Pans with the Same Tempered Glass That NASA Uses!

    You cook all the time. Why use inferior cooking ware? Your cooking ware should be
    as good as your cooking, right? Maybe you don't use inferior cooking ware.
    Is it the same material that NASA uses though?
    Right, I thought so.
    Think about it.
    Now.


    You need cooking ware built to last. The kind of cooking ware you can gift to children.
    You already cooking for them anyway.
    You should make your purchase before our supplies run out. Yes, it is expensive.
    Quality products aren't cheap. When was the last time you saw
    A Ferrari selling for $10? Exactly, never.
    Buy now and we have 15% discount.
    This product will never be
    Discounted ever again
    In fact,
    Our prices are expected to increase substantially.
    After we have a full patent on the product,
    You can definitely expect our prices to Double or Triple.
    SO ACT NOW
    Or,
    Put away some rainy day money for the one product you know that isn't BS in cooking.

    You NEED an Electrician When the Circuits Break Right Away!
    We care about your electricity just as much as you do. We're overnight electricians. We don't stop until the job is done and come when the job is needed. That's right. 12AM? We have an electrician for you? 4AM? The job the will still get done. Consider your options. Do you want to wait all night to get your electricity back and then have to wait for another time window during the day and call in sick to work? You're a busy person.
    That's why we're here for you! Get your powered restored now! You here because you need it.
    You've thought about it. You want power now.
    Book your appoint here.

    INSTANT CASH LOANS!

    Get the money you deserve! You need money now! Not later. We know and understand your feelings.
    We offer reasonable loans. We're not sharks. We're allies.
    Every person is greeted by a kind and caring associate. We even offer coffee and donuts in every location.
    Chew it over.
    The money you want and need isn't available. You want it now.
    You should have it now.
    So stop by today.

    4K HD TV's at 50% Off?

    Yes, it's happening this week and this week only. Crystal clear pictures for all your favorite television shows. Stop by this week.

    COUCHES FOR EVERYONE!

    All of your best memories happen with friends and family. You need to be able to seat them all. After all, Couches are the most comfortable way to sit. We have designs and choices for all tastes and fashion directions. Come by our store today. You won't be disappointed. If you cannot sit at least 3 people on any of our couches then we'll give you a FREE couch.​
     
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    Here goes day 10.

    Action I’ve Been Putting Off

    I’ve done some cold calls. It gets easier and easier. In fact, the hardest is the first call. Yet, for some reason, I still like in-person talking more.

    5 Niche Products
    I used my boxing experience for today’s challenge.

    1. Boxing Gloves That Won’t Hurt Your Hands
    2. Boxing Shoes That Don’t Cause Blisters
    3. A Mouthpiece That Doesn’t Make You Vomit
    4. A Plan to Make Weight Quick (based on water weight loss)
    5. An Arm Stopwatch That Counts Boxing Rounds

    5 Headlines
    1. “Hitting the Bag Used to Hurt My Hands Too… Not Anymore”
    2. “Blisters from Yesterday’s Boxing Session Hinder Today’s Training? Try This”
    3. “A Mouthpiece Shouldn’t Make You Vomit – It Should Protect You”
    4. “Fight Day’s Coming and You’re Still Too Heavy for Your Weight Class?”
    5. “Counting Rounds While Training Alone Can Be Done Easily.”

    Product Description

    Get our mouthpiece now and say goodbye to:
    · Rubber-like Taste of Your Cheap Mouthpiece
    · Having to Stop a Bout Because Your Mouthpiece Makes You Puke
    · Broken Teeth Caused By Not Wearing Your Mouthpiece
     
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    The Short Story

    As the last fight ends and the winner is announced, I have to walk to the ring. I am calm, confident, ready for what is about to come. I step in the ring. The bell sounds. It’s on.

    After the first minute, it’s clear that my opponent is outclassed. I’m leading. But
    about 2 minutes in the first round I feel unwell. My mouth gets watery. Just as the bell sounds I start vomiting all over the ring. The bout is stopped.

    That’s when I decided we, boxers, need a better mouthpiece. I spent hundreds of hours researching, testing, and tweaking. And that’s how my custom mouthpieces were born.

    3 Headlines

    1. How I Puked on My National Championship Fight
    2. Who Would Have Guessed a Mouthpiece Could Take Me Out?
    3. I’ll Never Lose a Bout Because of This Ever Again

    One Action I've Been Putting Off

    I honestly have no idea what I should do. I cold called, cold emailed, tried to make Upwork and Fiverr work. I still do those things. I don't think I'm put something off. This whole situation drives me nuts.
     
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    Day 4

    Proraso Shaving Cream: The Close Shave for the Man Who Is Close to Women

    Oribe: Make Your Hair as Thick As Your Muscles

    Smell as Good as Your Girl With Montblanc

    A Clean Face For the Clean Finish, Jack

    Original Fit Levi's with the Grace and Durability You Need
    You know you want it. So Join.
    This product works as hard as you do. Think about it.
    Consider why you should join now and save money.
    Make money faster the easy way. Signup now!
    Our offers only last a few weeks at a time.
    Whatever makes your life easier isn't something to waste time thinking about. Buy it now.
    Why do less inspiring work when you know our deals end by Thursday?
    Register for the easiest way to improve your creativity.
    Sleep on our products and come back this Wednesday because they're costly for a reason.
    Act now and signup to register for our newest products.


     
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    Write 5 headlines that target both pain & pleasure.

    1. Already Made Skewers – “A Quick & Tasty Grill Has Never Been Easier”

    2. Bariatric Surgery – “Fat Loss Diets Don’t Work? Try This.”

    3. Diamond Jewellery – “Make Your Wife Be The Envy Of All Her Friends – She’ll Stop Nagging Instantly”

    4. Wood Crafting Guide – “Save Money Learning a Manly Skill”

    5. A PHP Guide – “Update Your Programming Skills and Earn More Dollars For Less Time”


    Write 2 paragraphs of copy that utilize storytelling & metaphors to speak to both audiences (pain & pleasure).

    I was like you once. It’s hard to make good money as a programmer with limited skills. I remember staying late every night coding so I can hit the deadline and earn my measly pay.

    Not anymore. I updated my skills and now I’m turning clients down all day. I simply do not have enough time to work with all my new clients. PHP is one of the most in-demand programming languages.

    I guarantee it can do for you what it did for me.
    _________________________________________

    Note: I don't know if my copy gets any better, but it certainly gets easier to write it.
     
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    I watched a lot of commercials for this challenge. The way I see it, most show a story of how their product solves XYZ problem. Anyhow, here's my script. It's for...

    Car Tires That Don't Slip

    A family (2 parents, 2 kids) in an estate car drive on the road at a moderate speed. It's winter.

    One of the kids asks: "How much until we arrive?"

    The father says: "We should be there in 30 minutes."

    A left curve appears in front of them.

    In the curve, the car starts slipping. It gets off the road and starts flipping over downhill. They scream.
    They hit a big tree and we hear a loud crash sound.

    A sad violin tune plays. The image zooms out and we can see the crashed car, in the tree, with oil spilled on the ground.

    The background gradually turns white.

    A set of tires appear.

    Under them, in black font, appears the text: "Tires That Don't Slip".
    Then, under that, same color and font, "Keep your Family Safe".

    The whole image is replaced by a logo of the firm on white background. If the name of the firm is not made clear by the logo, we ad it that under the logo.

    _________________________

    What do you guys think?
     
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    One Big Mistake Every Newbie Makes

    Lots of great stuff happening in this thread. More than I can reply to right now. I've been super busy taking action, but I wanted to pop in with a piece of advice for anyone who goes through this challenge. It has to do with the formatting of your copy and a common trend I see that holds a lot of would-be copywriters up from making money.

    There's this idea in copywriting that you need to center align all of your text. You can see it in examples going all the way back to the first post. But I wonder if anyone correctly guessed the reason I wrote my posts that way. It wasn't because it's the end-all be-all of copywriting, but because I know it's what most people believe copywriting looks like.

    There's a key lesson in there. Your copy style should fit your audience's reality. You need to blend with their beliefs about the world. Every single word you write is meant for someone else. Never yourself. That means you need to deeply consider what they need from you in terms of voice, style, and the actual words you say.

    The truth is, there is NO standard format for good copy.

    The only format that matters is the one that produces the correct results. Just because you write with emotion, doesn't mean you'll always connect. If your reader can't stand center-aligned text, they won't read far enough to feel your words.

    This is a big part of why so many people get rejected or denied with publicity posts. If you send Forbes or Entrepreneur.com a center-aligned article, you won't stand a chance. It's because they've gone to great lengths to understand their market and what they want, not only in terms of topics, but in terms of how they want to consume it.

    So I hope you'll all think about that..

    • What does my audience want to read?
    • What is the context? (Sales page, email, blog post, about page etc.?)
    • What do they expect in terms of styling within that context?
    • What do they expect in terms of voice? (blue collar industries need blue collar language)
    • What do they really care about versus what I think they care about?

    Based on all of the above, how does your copy actually need to look, sound, and feel for your reader?

    Just consider it..
     
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    Challenge Common Techniques I Think Are Set In Stones

    One thing that I always thought I must do is to write concisely (short sentences/paragraphs) and in plain speak (no overcomplicated words). I might have adopted this idea because it's something that comes naturally to me (confirmation bias?).

    But, maybe, if the person was really interested in the information they'd read it no matter those things. And sometimes you might just be forced to use longer sentences/paragraphs and more eloquent* speech.

    If you're trying to sell something to a neuro-surgeon you definitely won't use the same words as if you'd sell to a factory worker.

    *see what I did there?

    Write something completely random

    It makes your skin clear.
    Without it, you'd die.
    It's the thing that makes a ton of processes in your body work.
    It is the essence of all life.

    What is it?

    WATER

    You deserve the best of it.

    You deserve water that tastes well,
    so we infused it with oranges, strawberries and aloe vera.

    You deserve water that has the right chemical composition,
    so we optimized the minerals inside it.

    Above all, you deserve water without estrogen.
    That's why our water comes in premium glass bottles only.

    Find Someone to Write Copy For
    Just managed to get into upwork. I feel like I'm going to get my first client very soon.
     
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    Thank you for the challenge!
     
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    Ok so I came up with 5 Headlines for Day 2 Challenge
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    Ha! I love these. Very creative/catchy. Nice work. That first one made me laugh.
     
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    What If Everything You Know About Smoking Is Wrong?
    Let's face it. Smoking cigarettes sucks. Someone hooked you on them at a young age. At one point, half of the United States smoked. Light up a cigarette. Smoke it. Observe the smoke. It's grey and blue like a fire right? Look at it closer. If the smoke stings your eye it's fine. Your body is naturally reacting to something it feels is a threat.

    Take a deep inhale. You can taste the bitterness on your tongue right? The smoke is hot. It stings. Does it burn your nostrils as well?

    This is fine too. Keep smoking. Keep Reading.

    YOUR FIRST INHALE
    Can you remember your first cigarette? What you know about life has been based on a delusion. The pervasiveness of this delusion is prevalent in everything. Marketers use it. Entrepreneurs use it. Dating coaches use it. Copywriters use it. Your boss. Your friends. Your family. Maybe even you. Do you want to go the end? Do you want to see, hear, taste, and feel what you deeply know?

    That grey and blue fire is poison. You know that already. Do you also know that the only reason you smoke is because someone told you that you were broken?

    Think of every person who has made you feel like less of a human. Can you even remember who was the first or when it first happened? No one forced a cigarette into your mouth. However, people have forced their beliefs onto you.

    The bitterness of the smoke you inhaled makes you want to spit. Don't spit. Keep reading and keep smoking with that spit in your mouth. Your body thinks it's food right now. That's addiction. Smoke is not food. No matter what.

    Your first cigarette. Your first smoke of any kind did not have the effect you wanted. You probably felt sick. I bet you felt like vomiting.


    THE END
    Yes, this is the end. I am going to show your mind and body TWO things. I will show you the beginning, and I will show you the end.

    Light up another cigarette if you're done with the first. Not a chainsmoker? Light it anyway. This is the present moment. Can you feel your body tensing? Can you feel your neck muscles and diaphragm pulling in the smoke? Can you feel the tightening of your whole body? This is the present moment.

    Every day you smoke follows this pattern. Think about it. Seriously consider it. You may have thought about quitting. You may think your special day is around the corner. That day is not in the future. That day is behind you. It is not in the past, and it is not in the future either. It is behind your vision. It is hidden.

    Allow me to reveal this for you. Keep smoking.

    The end of every delusion means realizing that you are NOT broken.

    Humor me. Have you ever felt manipulated? Have you felt like you haven't had a choice? This is core of how brokenness works. They didn't do anything to you. You enabled them. I am RESTORING your power to you now.

    Take a deep breath.

    Look at your cigarette.

    Inhale from it.


    You have a choice.


    If you think about it, you have until the day you die to choose to smoke again. Did I confuse you?

    Yes, you have until the day you die to choose to smoke again. This means you can sit in that conscious gap of smoking forever.

    This means you can consciously sit in a gap of choice with EVERYONE.

    FOREVER!

    THE BEGINNING
    I will show you the beginning now.

    People think perfection doesn't exist. Do You? If so, don't read the next part because you will FAIL to see the beauty in what I'm showing you.

    If you're facing a brick wall you want to pass through how do you get through it? Some people might say that you climb over it. Other people might say that you break it. Still, other people might say go around it.

    The reality of the answer is the same as the answer to, "How do you eat an elephant," or "How do you move a mountain"?

    The answer most people who have solved those two riddles are one bite at a time and one inch at a time respectively. Let's go one step further though. It's not the elephant being eaten. It's you who eats. It's the mountain being moved. It is you who moves. It's not the brick wall being broken. It is you who is breaking.

    In short,

    There is no brick wall.

    Let's go further.

    There is no cigarette.

    There was a time before you smoked. You may already be done with your second cigarette. So, there is no cigarette. What about my pack of cigarettes though you ask?

    Read the end again. Seriously, read it again and you will understand.

    Then read the beginning. Now think about it.


    THE FORCE

    Do you like Star Wars? I do. There is a such thing as the force. I have shown it to you. It is more like aikido than karate though. It is more stationary than active.

    If you've never seen Star Wars, just know that what I've shown you is like a super power. Read the beginning again.

    There is no superpower. I know. I know. I just said I gave you a superpower. Now I'm saying that there is super power. It is not a superpower. It your nervous system's natural state of being. It is the state of being you were born with. It is a muscle that has atrophied.

    Did everything fail for you?

    Do you feel like it hasn't worked?

    I will forcefully inject this thought process into your body then.

    What I am about to show you is only for the curious. It is only for those with courage. It is only for those people who have realized that fear is on the same loop as curiosity. It is for the people who are willing to dash into the freedom of being a non-smoker and forsake the safety of a cigarette.

    Thank you for reading the introduction to Vomit Protocol: The Only Quit Smoking Method So Effective You Will Be Scared to Even Look at a Cigarette


    Please Send Me a Private Message If You Are Interested in Quitting

    Thanks for reading! You May Only Need the Introduction If You Understand Everything!
     
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