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    Not sure this is the right place but looking for feedback on my landing page

    1. I will start using that Audit panel from now on :) 2. I'm keeping it lightweight for now to see if the core message is enough to generate some interest and clickthroughs. Then I'll gradually add on more content. Thank you for your feedback!
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    Not sure this is the right place but looking for feedback on my landing page

    Thanks to your feedback I simplified and changed perspective a bit. For anyone interested in the progress here's the new site: Nordveld | Financial fluency for everyone There are a few minor tweaks I still want to do but I'll be trying out the response with some paid traffic moving forward...
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    Not sure this is the right place but looking for feedback on my landing page

    Ok - so I took a small step back and realised a few things. The method needs to be separated from Add-On. It is too complex for the reader to get their head around what is actually offered with the way things are right now. Thank you all for that glaringly obvious feedback :D The method stands...
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    Not sure this is the right place but looking for feedback on my landing page

    Thank you! I'll consider how to cut to the chase earlier. The challenge here is that the method itself is what can drive positive behavior change. But it requires some education before it becomes clear how and why it's valuable. I'm considering to outline the method on the page as well to give...
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    Not sure this is the right place but looking for feedback on my landing page

    What makes you feel like it looks like a scam? That's pretty seriously shit in that case..
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    Not sure this is the right place but looking for feedback on my landing page

    It's not. It was terrible but somehow I was blind to it until I got the feedback. I updated since yesterday though. If you like, you could take a look again and let me know if it's now more clear? www.handsoffmoneyflow.com
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    Not sure this is the right place but looking for feedback on my landing page

    Good feedback. The story telling is something I brought with me from enterprise sales I guess. It worked really well there when you can work out a strong pitch and get 45 minutes to present. Reading this I realise I've been applying those sales skills to the wrong context. Thanks for...
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    Not sure this is the right place but looking for feedback on my landing page

    Yes - I dislike the name actually. Just haven't gotten to the point where I want to invest in a brand expert to turn it into a real brand. At first I want to see what interest I can whip up from some paid traffic. Just to test the waters :)
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    Not sure this is the right place but looking for feedback on my landing page

    1. Yikes - didn't notice that. It's just a static page loaded from aws S3.. perhaps that's the issue? Need to look into it. 2. You mean the fake menu? It's there for added confusion points. It's the new thing. (You're right, I'll need to remove it :D) 3. Let me improve the copy also based on...
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    Not sure this is the right place but looking for feedback on my landing page

    Hahaha, damnit, you're right. Why is it so hard to write good sales copy as soon as you start writing sales copy instead of just talking about it casually ‍*facepalm*
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    Not sure this is the right place but looking for feedback on my landing page

    Agreed! And that is part of the plan. However my skills in this domain are quite.. undeveloped yet so coming here for some guidance seemed like a good idea.
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    Not sure this is the right place but looking for feedback on my landing page

    Great feedback, I will for sure take a look at that book. And I agree with your points. The initial draft I had focused more immediately on the benefits, but I wanted to try a storyline approach. I think I'll need a hybrid approach, as my thinking previously was that I would get "warmed up"...
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    Not sure this is the right place but looking for feedback on my landing page

    Care to elaborate on why? As you can probably guess I wrote it and would really appreciate and welcome any chance of improving my copywriting skills :)
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    Not sure this is the right place but looking for feedback on my landing page

    Thank you for your feedback! It makes sense. Maybe an explanatory video in the top would be the way to go.
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    Not sure this is the right place but looking for feedback on my landing page

    Fellow Fastlaners! I've been building an Add-On which allows you to connect your (mostly EU) bank accounts to Google Sheets so you can have up-to-date balances there for a no-hassle financial cockpit starting point. It includes seeing your balances, generating a PnL statement as well as some...

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